Date: January 11, 2007 10:02 am Title: Chapter 1
oh, how I wish Pam would let on even this little bit to Jim! Crying!Pam has just wrecked me!
9 [Report This]Date: January 11, 2007 08:19 am Title: Chapter 1
Please, please, please continue this. Definitely. I absolutely loved it. It was funny, and sad and drunk!Jim had me crying and laughing and angry all at once. I really hope you keep going.
Date: January 11, 2007 07:59 am Title: Chapter 1
I like this because it's almost like an alternate history. In that respect, you could go on in this alternate direction or leave it as a one-off.
Also--"balancing was stupid" is effing brilliant!
Date: January 11, 2007 06:49 am Title: Chapter 1
Drunk Jim is very funny but poor Pam, she's hurting so much.
8 [Report This]Date: January 11, 2007 06:37 am Title: Chapter 1
Good job. I liked this. I think you got their voices down well.
I just noticed one typo, though. in this sentence: I got you’re text "you're" should be "your".
9 [Report This]Date: January 11, 2007 02:39 am Title: Chapter 1
And I couldn’t bike home, because balancing was stupid. - Haha! Oh, what a great line. Yes, continue!!! (Please?)