Reviewer: Maxine Abbott Signed
Date: April 12, 2021
Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 19
So what do you have against ED Sheeran? Things I felt in this chapter- Karen really has to lighten up - Jim's line about threesomes was funny, too bad she's too uptight to find the humor there.
Athlead (or Athleap, here) - wow you are managing to get it all in here and still in such a natural way - I like that a lot.
Jim and Karen, they are not a good fit...especially since she is so insecure (yes, I read her as insecure which is why she acts they way she does, not sure if you intend it that way but in my experience most bullies lash out as a defense mechanism and Karen here certainly acts like a bully, a very possessive bully). Not that I feel bad for her because she is just so mean, even to Jim who she is supposed to love.
You've really reversed the Pam and Jim roles here by having Jim stay with her so long - that's just genius.
Author's Response: Hahaha, I'm sorry. I can't stand him. I know he has many fans though. I think I might like him more if they played him a bit less...hearing Shape Of You in every single bar, every single time I turned on the TV, and on every radio station for months was the final nail in the coffin for me. And there was genuinely a period where Thinking Out Loud was the first dance at *every* wedding I went to.
I'm really glad you liked the Athleap though, and the threesome line lol. And no, that's exactly how I meant for Karen to come across on the insecurity, so I'm really pleased she did! I wrote it with the idea that her behaviour gets worse the more insecure she's feeling. There's a reason she was at her nicest when she a) wasn't in a relationship with Jim, and b) when Pam wasn't around. And at this particular point in the story, she's had weeks of Jim living in Stamford with her acting like he doesn't really want to be there, plus a couple of small hints that Pam might maybe like Jim a bit too much. But yes, still not really acceptable behaviour...
Thank you so much for reading and taking the time to review!