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Omg this is just so special. I love spirit week. I only wish I was still in high school to partake.

These 2 are the most adorable Pam and Jim ever.

Ok so the way she got his hair done for wacky hair. What can I say but how do you come up with such cuteness. Oh and why should I change? The lines you write just so clever.
Like Larry.
And the image of cat in the hat Pam. Love it.
Finally Leah and Hans. And that he did it on his own for her. So utterly heartwarming.
Love this sequel. So so good.

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Finally getting around to this one...

first let me say I very much enjoy the way you write scenes with a descriptiveness (is this a word?) that illustrates without overdoing it. It makes the reader feel like they are there rather being told what they are seeing.

*On the drive home, Pam told Jim about the two students she found making out in the janitor’s closet when she went to find some more paper towels for her classroom and how Michael mixed up the words “physics” and “psychic” in an email to her.* - this just tickled me - *D*

And this feels very Jim and pregnant Pam -

*Are there any Thai places that also serve chips and salsa?"

"If there aren't, there should be," he said, mouth full of apple.*

All Jim's good intentions to take the night to tell her being ruined by Karen (even if not her intention) was a twist not expected but well played.

Skipping to the end - again I feel like I was there on the car ride and then in the room. And that last line....ouch.

Of course he didn't leave - I'm so glad but all the talk of divorce must have him really freaked out.
Sweet scene with Nelly. And I like how you flipped the Dwight/Jim scene.

But at the heart it's a tough situation for both of them, Jim thinking he's doing something that will benefit the family not realizing how she doesn't need it or want it and just wants him to be there for the now. Pam not seeing that he is trying to make a change for their future, and that they (her and the kids) are the reason he's doing it.

They have fallen back into their days of miscommunication and that's when things go bad for them. TALK you fools.

Author's Response:

Thank you! 

Yes, I'm writing it in a way that Jim refuses to give up on Pam but Pam is unintentionally making it hard for him. It's really a communication breakdown at its finest. 

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I've Been enjoying catching up with this story.

I'm not sure when I last reviewed so this may encompass a few past chapters. Bring Michael in was a great choice. He has a way of lightening up every situation but also giving some really great advice (never ever ever give up).

Him mentioning Stanley leading Jim astray was a good line. As was the line about Pams glasses. Very funny. I enjoyed the tease about the baby names although he could've really named them that and I wouldn't have been surprised.

I love the Pamela Beagsly reference. I adore that's deleted scene and the layer you've added that it's a male dog is just great fun

Nice job all around. Looking forward the the rest..

Author's Response:

Thank you so much and glad you've been enjoying.

 I've said this a lot but Michael's dialogues were some of the most I've had to write with. I wish I wrote in BFD somewhere.

 The glasses, definitely. Still one of my favorite insults in the show. And Pamela Beagsley, I thought to myself, what would make this even more absurd?

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I had assumed this song/chapter would be about Pam and Roy but the approach you took here was bold and powerful and haunting. There was a power in the way the flashbacks slowly went from her history with Roy (and the slow evolution within this relationship) to her history with Jim. That really spoke to me. You really show your talent in the way you construct the narrative in your writing.

Because of the increments you set up - small warning signs were interpreted as compromises and later things that should never have been tolerated are overlooked because of grand gestures that came after you allowed us to see how Pam (or anyone) could become accepting of their situation - through justifying and remembering good times and self-blaming. 

I am glad you gave her strength to find her way out and a "Jim" to help guide her way.  

Well done on a topic that is not easy to write.

Oh and just as I was softening to Karen via HMOH you send her in to crash this party. Well played. The emotions you made me feel from her showing up even though we all knew he was done with her and would never allow her to get in between them.

Like of the same way watching a movie based on real life events. You may know the ending but it still has you on the edge of your seat. That's a talent to being able to do that.

Author's Response: Well, DC's Karen is a work of art, so I can understand that inclination. ;)  I'm so glad that scene played out the way I wanted it to, thank you! 

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Another Masterpiece.

I am the one writing a time travel story but you are the one who brought us back in time through the magic of your words.

The subtlety which tied 'her' song to the famous story was mirrored in the way you tied theirs to it to and all the little hints of it were so artfully placed.

Yet it screamed of the characters.

Speaking of screaming, I hate him, even more when you paint him and it made me more than a little angry that he had the fortune he did. But his callous cheating and then challenging her with it, daring her to leave – Argghh.

I loved the amalgamation you made here of Pam and Isabel to create that third character with bits like this ... pulled everyone in her path beneath its undertow and her attention made Pam feel as if she was the most important person in the world.

The haircut felt very symbolic, not only as a sign of the time, but as a symbol of rebellion, just like a post breakup haircut or naval piercing or tattoo. A response to the pig’s cheating perhaps? But in true Pam fashion, concerns of what he would think couldn’t be banished from her thoughts. The envy of Isabel’s daring nature also very true to her form.

I’m a terrible dancer – wink.

Green dress – double wink.

And if you didn’t have me hating Roy enough, between the woman he has at the party under her nose and the pushing her down the stairs, he is just deplorable.

No matter what decade it is seems these two would find their way up to the roof. How perfect here that it’s a widows’s walk.

And have to mention this line ...What she hadn't wanted to consider that night on that crowded dance floor under the summertime gibbous moon, was that his glancing touch had stirred more in her than a kiss from her husband ever had...beautiful.

So good so far. Can’t wait to get to the second half.

Author's Response: Oh wow, masterpiece is such high praise, thank you! I feel like if nothing else I have succeeded as a writer that I made you feel such strong Roy-hate. I love that you picked up on the subtleties of Pam I tried to place that made her character fee true as well as all the little canon things. 

subtle SPOILERS below for review-first readers. Go Back and read - I promise - you need to.

Lady...this was so rich (and don't mean in the opulent sense but I'm digging on my unintended pun)

and so brave (to not give us the happy ending but yet so right in how it aligns Jim to the character he was subtly written to be and his tragic ending) those words she uttered must have been like death to him...that is so well done.

and so loud - and by that I mean I could hear Pam and Jim through your words, few others do it so well and can create an AU version of them and still allow me to hear the characters as I read.

I'm glad I've been to Newport and could put them exactly where you intended but even if I hadn't been your story would have taken me there.

I come for the Soft shell crab - wink

So the photography scene - you know how I feel about it - how I love it not only because of the connection to you but as I read it again I got another thing out of it - OMG the documentary - slip to the edges and capture the real - to create art, something beautiful in the ordinary - Invisibility like those behind the cameras - OMG genius!

"I don't want to let go. Do you want me to let go?" Crush me why don't you - and even though it's Pam it made me think/hear "I'm not drunk. Are you drunk? in the tone.

"You're drunk," she said in a small voice like an uncommitted sin.
"You're beautiful," he countered, and the world kept spinning.
Still thinking of this scene and the blush that would have come over Pam's face.

I was expecting you to tell me you had run over someone with your car. - double wink. You. like TS are a master at subtlety.

OK, if I didn't hate Roy enough after the darkroom scene I wanted him dead. He was probably too stupid to know how the light would destroy her art but all the rest was just cruelty and abuse.

The breakroom scene from boys and girls, um, I mean the scene where she comes to Jim after Roy has banished Isabel, destroyed her photography and crushed her heart and wrist, well I love how you can create a whole other world and then call up a scene from the show with a few lines.

"Well, that's the way of it, isn't it? If you neglect something long enough it disappears." - and he is too stupid to know it - but that Jim thinks this will truly happen is even more heartbreaking when we reach the ending.

"I'm really sorry I didn't come to your art show," I truly loved how it worked this in.

Now comes the big Jim gesture (a lot more here than what he ever did on the show but still as impulsive and reckless) and filled with more winks:
-It was quite a humiliating step for him to seek an arrangement with 'new money' across the Sound
-she doesn't like dancing
-You two are good eggs


"It's a dangerous business," he mused unaffected into the remains of his drink.
"Especially when you are married to the woman my brother wants." - this was amazing.

Ah but the plan didn't go as intended - and as just as Roy found out he also won - because Pam was still Pam - she still felt tied to the convention of what was expected, the notion of what was proper in society (at least that was how I read it) and took Roy's face and plead as an apology even if he never once uttered I'm sorry (the equivalent in my head of a tickle instead of contrition)

Pam hesitated as she stood in the middle, invisible tethers tying her to opposite ends of the parlor, to opposite men, and to opposite futures. His long-standing confidence in the surety of her feelings began to fade as she looked at Roy and then looked at him, the storm of indecision clearly visible behind the green eyes that contained all he ever wanted.

The biggest wink (at least to me) were those words and not because they were exactly what she said on the show - but because they were surely like death to him.

Oh Bored - This Was SO good.
I didn't even get into the way you write here - but I can't even describe that anyway.

Besides everything else I said -
'OMG this is brilliant' - wink

Author's Response: Here’s the thing, (and I know you know this also being a writer) as calm and collected as we writers try to come across, we live for feedback. Especially on pieces that you pour so much into. It feels validating in a way far beyond just writing. 

I just enjoyed all of this story as with all the things you write, even if it was a little heartbreaking in the beginning.

Loved that they come together in NY- always love a tale that takes place in my city (even if I no longer live there) and I think I know the Shake Shack they go to.

Gotta say -silly enough this is the line that I most related to through ...actually accept the update her computer had been trying to complete for three weeks...I am Pam here, not wanting to update either...and I see the symbolism I think you may have been going for - unless it was just a clever observation... either way - loved it.

Another great addition to the bunch.

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I finally got to reading this and read to the end (well the end so far since there's a few men we still haven't heard from). I came back to drop a review on this one because I feel your Michael and his absolute affection for Pam. For all he does wrong with everyone including her he has always redeemed himself in my eyes because of the affection he has for her and you portrayed that so well. I did laugh about how he's asked his new receptionist if he would ever leave with him to start a new company. It also touched me how he would have tried to fix Pam and Jim if he knew ( and get rid of Toby while he was at it).

Overall I am so enjoying all of these. Kevin and cCreed made me laugh in their perfect voices and I love getting a little Oscar insight. Not enough Oscar around here.

Keep them coming. Lot of fun.

Author's Response: Thanks so much! And yeah, Michael's genuine love for Pam is his biggest redeeming feature for me. Thank you for taking the time to review, I'm really thrilled to hear you're enjoying this! 

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Once again reviewing for the last few. They are all so fun. I really enjoy the delusional Jan ones. Very good voice here for Jan. It kinda makes sense she and Michael we’re together. They are both so self absorbed. But with Jan I think it’s a whole other level which you demonstrated.

Meredith you nailed her voice.

Angela. I like how someone still has to be the office mattress. Oh and of course she’d bring up that Dwight saved him against Roy. And what woman (including Angela) wasn’t impressed with how he scooped up Pam when she was hurt.

I really enjoyed what you did with Katy. Yup he’s that good. But also that dorky but isn’t that what makes him so loveable.

Just wanted to let you know enjoyable these are. Jelly beans by the bagful to you.

Author's Response:

That’s so kind to say, thank you so much for taking the time to leave feedback: I really appreciate it! And I am thrilled to hear you’re enjoying these :) 

And yes lol, I enjoyed how Jan was so self absorbed that she actually made Michael look almost normal. The whole Angela getting really excited by that Roy/Dwight interaction on the show also really cracked me up, I didn’t think she’d be able to resist mentioning it.

Thanks so much again for reviewing! 

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First of all from the minute I read your chapter notes I loved this. I am constantly hearing songs and making them Jam songs.

Then you solved the conundrum of who started first. Brilliant. What a perfect solution. I was even watching The Secret the other day for research and this so jives with how it seemed to go down. If not, it’s how I’m seeing it.

The whole thing was just so seeable (like I could see it happening and wasn’t just reading). Loved!

(I think I’m supposed to say you killed me or something like that but i can’t seem to do that and don’t think I ever will).

Can’t wait to read the rest (and will you be tackling the most famous letter he ever wrote to her?)