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A lovely and funny Christmas story that despite not ending how I expected was still very satisfying.

Very clever in how you had them picking each other's similar gifts even though they hadn't chosen each other. Especially in the was you worked out how Phyllis would wind up ceeding the job to Pam (with a knowing smile).


YOur Michael is very Michael, with his gift ideas but especially in how he does the snow angels. And not only did you tie in the homemade presents but made Pam's allegorical to her relationship. Nice job with that.

Pam and Jim playing in the snow is just delightful. And that kiss at the end - even if not the one expected, it still warmed my heart.

Happy holidays.

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Always enjoy a story with a bit of mysticism in it, especially when it offers the kind of subconscious hope it gave to Jim. Nice job with this one.

Author's Response: Thanks Max! I'm not much for the supernatural (a bit of a skeptic TBH) but I really wanted to write something with a vague hint of a Christmas Carol without it actually being a Christmas carol, or similarly It's a Wonderful Life. I wanted Mrs Frobisher to have a little hint of Clarence in this story as that enabler to help Jim have his happy ending (bit of an innuendo there but you know what I mean :D)

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JIM!!
Great way to highlight the unspoken communication they always had.

Author's Response: Thank you! I love emphasizing that, it’s so fun to write!

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Pam’s quiet spoke a thousand words, and he loved reading between her layers and the reward of her smile when she felt understood. This was a great line.

I see you are setting up a little jam roadblock. But hoping Jim listens to his own voice soon rather than that of the crowd.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I’m so glad you like the line! Don’t fear too much! 

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Totally can see this- Dwight watching her, and sensing what could happen. How else had he been able to react so fast with the pepper spray...also that he would keep watch by her house all night.

Nice job!

Author's Response:

Thank you 💜

Dwight may be an 'odd' one but he is loyal to the core and he showed his true colors when he saw her crying in the hall and immediately demanded "where is he"..... I adore him being her staunch protector.

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Nothing like a heated session of angry truths to be engage all the pent up desire these two have for each other. Getting shades of Fleetwood Mac and Daisy Jones as Jim accuses her of a Karaoke attack. And her line "I was doing Karaoke..." - loved that.

You did well at having them get to much of what they hadn't been able to say before... the lines about giving her no time to process and the waiting in particular. Now it is odd to hear Jim curse (but only because its a non-no on network so not used to it) but it seems like a natural response when trying not to act on what eventually happens anyway.

A terrible mess indeed but one we are all waiting for.

Author's Response: Awww Max, you know I absolutely LOVED Daisy Jones and The Six, and I'm a FM fan as well (lucky enough to see the full original line up at the O2 in London in 2014, before people were sacked or died.)

I don't think this is anything not seen in fics before but this feels like an appropriate fix to right a writers' wrong I always felt was done at Phyllis's wedding and beyond.

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Yeah sounds just about right Jim being ready to flee again. But I loved the 'when versus if' observation. Very telling...I'm glad Pam said her bit about him not misinterpreting but more glad Jim has Mark in his ear, telling him what is clearly right in front of him ...but because after CN he put on blinders and he can't see it. Go Mark...now where are they going?

Author's Response: Thanks Max, all will become clear very soon…(and it may not be where you expect… no DM parking lots involved, haha)

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What a fun trip to Santa's Village. Never been nor did I even know about it but it sounds like a fun place for kids and for kids at heart (and Jim is a pretty big one of these - strange however how he doesn't like to dress in costumes).

But first - the inner thoughts on the way were well done. Having them share the driving was a smart way to fit that in - plus gotta think that while Roy would want to drive the whole way to anywhere they went -he would make Pam stay up with him - right?

Always enjoy a good prank and the gnome traveling with a kidnapped bobblehead is a good one. Also enjoyed the real versus artificial tree debate.

So there won't be a casino night confession now so I appreciated how you used the lines here instead.

To end with a blizzard and a one room situation - the next chapter should be quite interesting.

Author's Response: Santa's Village is kind of a small place so no worries if you've never heard of it. It's in the Lake Placid/Whiteface Mt. area if that helps at all. Considering Pam is the one taking him there, I figure Jim's ready and willing to follow her. Especially after her reveal in the car. I'm sure Roy would want to drive since to his mind, no one else would know how to drive or some other thing. Roy might let Pam sleep. After all if Pam is awake she'd want to talk to him, and it seems that's not really something Roy is very interested in, listening to Pam. Good thing Jim is cut from a very different cloth.

Loved adding the bits of fun like the gnome and tree debate while they're exploring the village. JAM banter can be tricky so I'm glad you liked it. Same with repurposing canon lines. The fun thing about AU is you can use the same lines, but twist them to mean different things. Always fun to do that.

Glad you're looking forward to the next chapter. So am I. Thanks as ever for the review.

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Welcome and nice job on this perspective of Jim and Pam's feelings before and during Casino night. Very much enjoyed where you added scenes and filled out others (the one with the photos stood out for me, always love seeing new little details as did the reaction Jim had to her platitudes and how they cheapened their whole relationship - "the you have no idea speech", as well as the chat with her mom).

Appreciate the circularity in how he thinks to take the photo. And how you explained/wrote the way he intended to tell her about the move but what came out instead was well done.

Glad to catch this when I did (with some extra time to read a new story) and enjoyed a new voice here.

Also interested to see what you'll do going forward - will you tackle all of Season 3? Hope to see more added elements of the things we didn't see (ie photos)

Author's Response: thanks so much for reading and leaving a review! as for tackling all of season 3, i'm not sure just yet--i am really interested in writing about jim and pam's thought process throughout the early seasons, so I might flip wildly back and forth between different episodes/time periods. 

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I really enjoyed this one. You have a wonderful style of writing both the scene and inner thoughts and have nailed the characters even when you barely touch on them (i.e. Michael).

Author's Response:

Thanks so much for being my first ever review on this site! I adore this legendary couple and love writing them and only want to them justice. 

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I know nothing of dating apps but this feels like fun already. And having lived in NYC from about Pam's age until recently, love that it's where this is set. Interesting twist that her sister is getting married just as she has called off her own. And Pam already has a little more confidence to send off a "what I'm wearing" text.

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I think you are right, there had to be more than just one "teapot note", there must of been many times Jim must have tried to put his thoughts down to paper even if they would never be shared anywhere besides the box. I enjoyed this take on it and how the box got passed around. Now I'm a bit surprised that temptation never got to any of the possessors but hey it's your story...and I'm glad WE got to see some of the other notes -both before and after they get together.

And I just loved the line about losing his dream -
“Lose her? She’s right here. And I’m never letting go of her.”

Nice job with this first story.