The documentary company needs a little help to finalize a distribution deal, so the head of the camera crew decides to recruit a mole.Fun. I wonder where Phyllis plans for Pam to go in that red dress? I guess I'll watch and learn...
Author's Response: Oh, I actually have an answer for that!
Nice, Sharky! I await the next chapter (but patiently)!
Author's Response: It's being worked on as I speak!
Sharky, this is getting better and better, and I liked it to begin with, so... yeah, it's pretty good.
What kind of evil person am I that I love that Jim passed out drunk on his couch, pining for the gal he thinks he can't have? (Worst sentence ever, BTW.) I even love your chapter notes.
One nitpick - I think Phyllis's last name was Lapin, not Lupin.
If you don't watch it, your new chapters are going to cause as much ruckus as Squirrel and Girly-girl. Yep, they are!
Awaiting more Mole, when you can...!
Oh, such a nice ending! I especially like Jim casually going to the candy dish! Such a great visual to signify that things are now as they should be.
And... KarentheJimSlayer is now KarentheBadMemory. Thank goodness.
This made me think of Michael punching one of the buttons for Stanley - "You'll hate it." (I think it was peach iced tea - The Secret.)
Hurray for Jim's choice! I'm not sure what the significance is of 3 buttons for water and 1 for grape soda. Is it that grape soda is the more unusual choice? That water's a dime a dozen, but grape soda is ... the most awesome? (True of course, but what was the 3 vs. 1 trying to get across?)
Anyway, I enjoyed it. Enjoy your trip. And hey, did you need a nap because you had a pretzel loaded with all the sweet stuff earlier? Loved your comment about pretzel day.
Fluff of the fluffiest order. Jim and Pam move in together. Set in S3 (fingers crossed) LOL! NO SPOILERS AT ALLThese are really lovely. I especially like how Pam alludes to their future together using Christmas decorations, and how Jim is so happy she's done it.
Author's Response:
I'm so glad to hear it. It just seems to me that Pam says things quietly - when of course - she actually decides to say something at all. Thanks for the review!
Yay! An even happier ending, because now they're really together.
I look forward to your next undertaking!
yep. happy, really together :).
thanks for all your reviews during this!
Very sweet. I think their "confessions" are a little too "wrapped up", if you know what I mean. Kind of "this is what happened, and then this, and then this", mentioning all the things we fans want them to say. In reality, I think it would be choppy and interrupted with pauses and the other one saying something, and things would be more understated, not as many points stated. And could that be any more of a run-on sentence? Probably not.
I still just love the sound of that collage. And isn't it handy that it's hanging in the bedroom?
I'm glad for the happy JAM ending! Off to see the epilogue!
yeah, it probably is a bit to neat. oh well.
hehe, well, pam did look at it when she was lonely... at night... in her bedroom :). not that i am suggesting anything at all!!!!
Very nice!
Author's Response: thanks!
Thanks for 2 chapters in a day, and the "dammit" in the prior chapter. I feel... strangely powerful... tingly... (/Vampire!Jim).
My favorite parts of this chapter are: Jim deciding to only bring wine so he can have two nights of Pam (perfect!), and Pam asking about Karen.
Haha, yeah. As much as I love this story, I just want to get it over with. Life is just taking over my life... and unfortionatly, afternoons like this (meaning when i can just read fanfic all day) are getting less and less.
so, its life to thank for the two chapters. you however take all credit for dammit.
and jim is smart, wine means two evenings with pam. he's not just a pretty face (but he does have a pretty face)
I think the prank is good. But I like a good "Dammit, Jim!" as a response, like from the pilot!
I think they should collaberate in Pam's bedroom. WHAT??? Who said that?
changed it to dammit jim for you :) hehe.
and, i don't write smut, i am far to innocent for that. but, yes, eventually it does move (even if just slightly) past pranking
Yay!!
Author's Response: hehe, yes, i like yays. there should be more yays (and possibly a few awws)in the coming chapters
This story is going so nicely. I love the description of the collage. I think many of us would like to own that collage...
Author's Response: i would so want that collage. just a tiny bit creepy obsessive, but i don't care. :)
Oh, I adore Nick and his meddling ways. YAY!
Thanks for two chapters in a day.
I know, Nick is a good meddler, isn't he. I will totally admit that I hadn't planned that. I was going to write something similar to what Jim got. But my fingers decided otherwise, so good.
right now its all in my betas hands, but, depending on when she gets it back to me and what i feel like, there may be two chapters a day until it ends. or i may make ya'll wait. depending on what i feel like. *grins evilly*
I really like this closure you gave Karen (and us). Great idea.
Author's Response: Yeah, I sort of was going to do something else, but, I felt that Karen deserved an end. And I sort of wanted closure for writing her. Who knows how it happened, but I like it
Good chapter. I love Jim and Pam's awkwardness. "… that paper doesn’t sell itself." Yikes. Reminds me a bit of the break room scene in The Merger when Jim says something like "back to work" and does this lame thing with his fist.
I look forward to Jim and Karen arguing. Arguing, breaking up, yelling that they never want to see each other again, a little "why don't you go spend time with PAM!", you know, that kind of thing. (Slinks off to happy Karen's-gone zone.)
The awkwardness disappeats... eventually. althought it is fun to write :). i need to rewatc season three... cause i miss all of these little things *sigh* i can't wait for the dvd to come out.
didn't i say in my last comment that pam is going to be murdered by dwight and jim and karen are going to be happy and have lots and lots of babies... i don't know why you are anticpiating a fight :P
Jim should take photographs of Pam this afternoon. That's what friends do, right? Take photographs of each other? (...in various stages of undress? Whoops, that'd be "more than that").
One thing I wanted to mention about the dialog is that the Office people (and especially Jim and Pam) generally use contractions. The only time they don't is when they're really trying to accentuate something, like "I cannot believe you said that" or "tragically, I cannot" (Jim to past Jim). When I see "he is planning" or "I am really", it takes me out of the moment a bit, because it's not the way they'd really talk.
I like where this is going!
hum, me and my friends don't take naked pictures of each other... not sure if i want to know what you and your friends do :P
blah! i thought i caught all of those noncontractions. see, i read it about a thousand times, and i still miss stuff like that. which is odd, because when i really talk (and generally type) i have the worst grammar and phrasing ever. but in here, i am never using contractions... i will try to catch them for upcoming chapters (can't promise anything)
i am trying to decide whether or not to post another chapter today :)
I want! I want!
I love this: “Damn, what is it going to take to drive this woman away?” Your Karen is not getting much of a clue. And where IS Jim spending all this time? In his own apartment, shades drawn and lights out?
Love "Pam Patch". Almost as good as Pam Pong. Hmm, am I the only one who can think of more meanings for Pam Patch? One of them being somewhere Jim would really like to be? Okay, just me. (Please don't throw garbage at me.)
Anyway, get crackin'. More, please.
Yay! Well, I do have more written, and I do have about 5 chapters planned (course, that still isn't the end), so once I read it over a few more times I will put it.
I think I am making my Karen kinda desperate and stuff. Not sure where, but she just came out like that.
Jim's secret will be revealed shortly. ... hehe.
Haha, so glad you enjoyed Pam Patch. It was just a spur of the moment thought.
I will probably post about a chapter a day or so until I am done with Spring Break. And then it will depend on how much free time I get (or, how much free time I make. I am a firm believer that fanfic is more important than school. shame my teachers aren't sold on the idea.)
I really like your "slow and descriptive" style. I'm finding these very interesting. I like Karen's thought process when she's deciding to go over to Mark's.
I look forward to the next chapter!
this review = nearly complete and total happiness on my part :). so seriously, thanks (see, doesn't take a lot to make me happy.
the next two chapters are really really descriptive, and thats all i have written so far. it really develes into jim and jims secret, so hopefully those will be good also.
writing karens thoughts was surprising easy for these chapters. i thought it would be hard since i really don't find myself like karen, but its just, putting myself into her shoes and figuring how why she would act the way she has been, and just sort of going from there.
but yep, hopefully still will have the next chapter up tomorrow if all goes as planned.
thanks again!
I love the secret! But why wouldn't he tell Karen? Is it because he doesn't love her and never will and doesn't want to share more with her than he has to? (Whoops, pull back, Kev!) But it's great! I'm enjoying your story.
Couple of things a beta probably would have found:
It should be "he" instead of "him" for his friend and him had been walking along the tracks. Also "he and his friend" sounds better to me than "his friend and he". I'm not sure if one order is correct and one isn't, but if you say "his friend" first, then the mind immediately has to say "whose friend?" until you get to the "he".
Unless Jim's friend's name is John, you referred to Jim as John.
Anyway, very nice!! I'm going to submit this review, then go look at your pics.
Hum, why hasn't he told Karen. Your reason is as good as any. I think I have a reason in my head, but I haven't quite written that aspect yet... maybe I will explain it more, I dunno.
In regards to the he/him/friend stuff, that is how we were always taught to write it... not sure if it is correct, but yeah, it was using that phrasing and order and stuff like that. i always thought it sounded strange, but that is what my 3rd grade teacher taught us. who knows.
And yes, I named his friend John. Because I like the name John, and yeah. :)
Thanks so much for all your reviews, each one totally brightens my day!
I enjoy this contemplative Jim, just enjoying being out in nature and taking pictures. I enjoyed the part about the gift for Karen. Your Jim is definitely not very "into" your Karen.
I laughed at the part about Pam and the bit of song you threw in there. It's very sweet to think about Jim still dreaming about a future with Pam. (Oh, yeah, I'm a bit of a Jammer.)
Thanks for the shout-out. I like to make people's days!
For a beta, some people mark themselves as beta-ers in their profiles. I don't know if there's a way to request one from the powers at be at MTT, but you could check that out. Also, if you are on TWoP (I only lurk, myself), people ask for beta-ers on the fanfic thread. You actually do very well un-beta'd, though.
Looking forward to seeing what happens with Karen at some point. Willing to wait as it unfolds, though!
Haha, no, my Jim isn't into my Karen. Well, this is going to eventually be a JAM fic, so, I can't have them be all happy, now can I?
Yay someone else caught the lyrics. It just popped in my head. And thenunfortionatly, got stuck in my head.
I had some betas for a previous fic, but most of them are busy for this week. So, maybe starting soon, I can get some. Or I may start browing random profiles. Most of my problems are with tense changes. It gets more obvious in the coming chapters. I already caught a few of them, but yeah.
I have a bit more written, and Karen is dealt with eventually.
Also, jut want to make sure you know, I did two chapters today. Since you replied to the first of two, just wanted to make sure. But it was two today, because I don't think I will be able to do any tomorrow. Depends on how fussy it is reconnecting my internet when I get back at school
Not at all confusing. Ooh, another chapter! (Runs off to see!)
Author's Response: not a happy chapter was it :(
An accidental meeting!! I did NOT see that coming, and I love it! I have some ideas on how Jim and Pam can combine their passions. Well, their passion, anyway!
Thanks for mentioning there was another chapter - I might have missed it. Of course, I would have caught it at the next update, but still!
Yay for Pam and Jim face time!!! "Enjoy" your classes (okay, tolerate them then - a degree is important!).
Haha, well,maybe the next chapter will just be them throwing themselves at each other and making wild wild love right in the middle of an art class... or maybe not.
Classes suck. Just had my first one back from break. And all I got out of it was blah blah blah chemistry blah blah blah. Oh and the always fun, you won't get a job, you won't get into grad school pep talk. newest chapter up. :) read on my friend, read on.
“Hey, babe. I’m just leaving Mark’s now.” - Busted!
As long as Karen had Jim on speed-dial (so she didn't have to dial all those numbers), her voice was certainly realistic enough.
And if the choice is 'fess up or break up, guess which one I'd have Jim choose? Go ahead, guess!!!
I'll wait and see what you have Jim choose...
Let me guess. You want Pam to be murdered by Dwight, and then Jim and Karen have lots and lots of babies, and live happily ever after? Right?
Darnit, I just gave away the ending.
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