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So, this just broke my heart in the best possible way. I think the second one is my favorite. Jim realizing a potential that just never gets fulfilled. *cries* And, of course, five is great too. Love.

Hey! I just wanted to say that I really like your dialogue. The voices of Jim and Pam are well-done and you've got some nice banter going on. Nice work!

Great read! You did a good job maintaining the tension throughout the story. Even though Jim had a lot of time to think during this drive, I think he would have been too panicked to keep his mind in one place for long. I liked how you had him constantly reeling himself in from thinking too much about the future or the past. Nice work!

Author's Response: Thanks...I didn't think of this as especially tense or dramstic since we knew it had a happy outcome, but I'm glad people found it so.

OH MAN. It is very late and I cannot put together a real comment right now but I just have to say tonight: I'm LOVING this fic and will desperately be awaiting future updates! This is exactly the satisfying sort of story I've been wanting to read since rewatching The Dundies. Very good stuff. :)

Author's Response: Wow, thanks Astraea! What a nice review :)

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OH MAN. Every chapter is like a cliffhanger! :D I really enjoyed this. Damn, I'm all for them being stuck together in a confined space. Craaazy good job with the chemistry. Clutching his tie? Whew. :D

For as crazy as this must feel to Jim, I think you handle Pam's reactions really well. I think you took the makeout to it's inevitable conclusion, I don't think Pam could rationalize actually cheating on Roy, once the thought occurs to her it has to be over. Also, loved Pam shutting down and lashing out. Totally in character from what we've seen on the show.

Also, Jim. Such a perfect mix of anger and fear and panic that he's trying desperately trying to keep in control. SO glad to see him really pushing Pam to see how much she wants this too. Oh, and it's a little thing, but I felt like the cursing was just right (i.e. "freaking" vs "fucking"). Maybe it's just canon's necessary limitations, but I just don't imagine Jim or Pam swearing too easily.

More please! ;)

Author's Response:

Heh - the clutching his tie bit was in response to Starry Dreamer's urging me to rachet up the steam a bit.  Glad you liked it!

I'm also glad you found Pam's reaction believable; I keep saying in review responses that that was one of my big concerns -- whether or not this would work.  I agree with you that she wouldn't be able to process what had happened once she really let it hit her (OMG, I'm cheating on Roy).  Lashing out at Jim is something I could see her doing as well because, like you mentioned, we've seen her do it on the show.  (I cannot stand watching "The Fight" for that very reason - the way she's all flirty and then suddenly just turns on him.  Gah.)

I love writing Jim when he's hovering on the verge of losing his control, because I do think that's one of the amazing things about him -- he is so controlled.  And I love the few moments on the show when we've seen him lose it, however briefly (like in "Boys & Girls" or "CN").

Thanks so much for reviewing!

Omigosh, I LOVE THIS. The premise is just great and it's really well-executed. I have to say, I really related to Pam in this chapter. Unfortunately, I too sometimes keep suppressing things until the very last minute when I just burst. So when I was reading this chapter, I gasped right along with Pam and totally had tears in my eyes. I also liked that Pam was kind of relying on Jim not being there, so she could keep herself in denial that this was really changing anything. I hope the next chapter has some of Jim's perspective because I'm dying to know how he's coping with all this! Great work, I can't wait for an update! ...Hopefully soon? :)

Author's Response: Your wish is my command. Kind of alternating POVs in this one ;-) Glad you can relate to Pam (really, who can\'t, right?). Thanks so much for your comments!