1 [Report This]Date: May 18, 2023 03:17 am Title: Chapter 1
What a fantastic short story! SO in character for Pam and I loved the awkwardly friendly interaction with Karen and how far Pam's imagination raced into the future. Amazing!
Date: April 21, 2009 05:37 pm Title: Chapter 1
Cute story. I loved the line "Jim ruins everything." I could hear Pam saying it. Good stuff.
Date: May 31, 2008 07:23 pm Title: Chapter 1
Hi! I know this fic is old, but I read it a while ago and utterly loved it, but couldn't remember its name to find it again. When I saw you had written a review, I was able to find this wonderful story again. Just fantastic, from "Voldemort" to Pam sort of wanting a friendship with Karen.
Date: August 17, 2007 06:28 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ha! Adorable. And totally realistic to boot. :)
Author's Response: Thanks, Post_it_Thief! I appreciate the review.
Date: August 15, 2007 08:57 pm Title: Chapter 1
Great first effort. I really enjoyed how you wrote Pam. The HP references made me laugh as well. Well done, and hope to see more from you in the future.
Author's Response: Thanks, dundiefromgod! It means a lot, since I'm really enjoying your own take on Pam in the Devil and Angel story.
Date: August 15, 2007 04:56 pm Title: Chapter 1
Sudsy, what a dawesome debut!
First I love how the title refers to Target, but also made me think of Pam drilling down on what she wants. Good stuff.
Pam's thought process on why she can't be friends with Karen, and the conclusion that Jim ruins everything. Gold. Pure gold.
And then the sun comes out? Perfection.
Awesome first fic. Can't wait to read more.
Author's Response: Thanks, Susan! I'm glad you picked up on that double meaning of the title. It's so nice to know that it made sense to others and not just me! Thanks for the great feedback :-)
10 [Report This]Date: August 15, 2007 10:09 am Title: Chapter 1
hehe... that's right! strut your stuff, pam!! great first fic! so glad we don't have to call jim voldemort anymore...
Author's Response: Thanks so much, StarShine! I am so glad that these type of situations will likely be in the past for our girl Pam!
Date: August 15, 2007 08:51 am Title: Chapter 1
ooh, i really liked this. everything was just so very Pam. And I loved how she was dying to see what was in Karen's shopping basket. I thought for a moment she would have embarrassing stuff in there. hee. but it was definitely a believable exchange. also, i loved the way Pam imagined a friendship with Karen. Seems like under different circumstances, these two really could've been friends. Great job!
Author's Response: I liked that moment too - I really wanted to show that while Pam might think that Karen is somewhat exotic, she's really just a normal girl who just happens to be stuck in the love triangle of the century! I hope it worked. Thanks so much for the review, questionforyou!
10 [Report This]Date: August 14, 2007 08:19 am Title: Chapter 1
Oooh, this was really good!
Author's Response: Thanks, Puff!
Date: August 14, 2007 05:17 am Title: Chapter 1
Sucky days do feel better with a boyfriend/Jim.
Poor Pam it really is sort of a conversion of suckiness for her.
“Seriously, I bet this whole beach day thing is just a scheme to get all of us women as close to naked as possible.”
I think that was a real thought in his mind.
Really thought this worked well to explain that period of time between WA/BG, and very Pam, and so yay!
Author's Response: Thanks, Emily! That's what I was going for, so I'm very glad to hear that it worked.
Date: August 13, 2007 10:48 pm Title: Chapter 1
this was so cute! it's exactly the way i hear pam thinking in my own head (weird sentence, i know). i had a cute little smirk on my own face as i read it. :-)
Author's Response: Aww, thanks, rakerpation!
9 [Report This]Date: August 13, 2007 09:36 pm Title: Chapter 1
very nice first story! I'm a little jealous of your mad skills. :) Seriously though, this was very believable, very true to the way Pam has changed through season three.
Author's Response: Thanks so much, MrsLloyderineHalpert. I'm glad it was believable - that was the goal!
Date: August 13, 2007 08:35 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is great! I love Pam's reasoning why her and Karen can't be friends.
Author's Response: Thanks a lot, Pamcasso!
10 [Report This]Date: August 13, 2007 08:35 pm Title: Chapter 1
I wonder what Voldemort would think of me in this?
That made the story great right there on its own - and then you continued with the Harry Potterisms ad nauseum, which only made it better. She's probably been hanging out with Dwight too much.
And the paragraph of Pam gazing into the future was absolutely hilarious. Terrific first outing, Sudsy.
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it, Wert. Can you tell I've never read HP? I do know some of the characters, though. Thanks for the review!
Date: August 13, 2007 08:05 pm Title: Chapter 1
Lovely! A great look at Pam's character, and the potential for friendship between Pam and Karen, if it weren't for Jim(/Voldemort). She's right, he does ruin everything! ;)
Author's Response: Thanks, Semby! Well, hopefully when the next season starts, he won't be ruining things for Pam :-)
Date: August 13, 2007 07:53 pm Title: Chapter 1
Why Pam & Karen couldn't be friends.... exactly. Ouch. Too bad Jim didn't get a peek at Pam's halter top. Kevin wouldn't have needed his list. Nice job supergirlsudz!
Author's Response: That's exactly what I was going for, so thanks, Lisahoo! I bet Kevin is sad he didn't get a look at the halter top, too. Oh, shoot :-)
Date: August 13, 2007 06:14 pm Title: Chapter 1
Hey! You posted! I'm so glad to see this. There's always room for more authors in these parts, especially when those authors turn out to be as good as you! Congrats on your first fic! And thanks for letting me beta. Sorry it took me so long! :P
Author's Response: Thanks for the encouragement and awesome beta skills, Azlin!
9 [Report This]Date: August 13, 2007 05:31 pm Title: Chapter 1
Sudz!! This is so fantastic! This was like a superhero story: "Fancy New Beesly and the Swimsuit of Doom!" :) Seriously, though, I love your take on Pam's inner struggles with trying not to think about Ji--er---Voldem---uh... You-know-who, which totally was not working for her. I mean, come on...it's like Jim trying not to think about Pam! Of course he is!
I thought it was a stroke of genius to have Pam's inspiration come from Karen of all people. And I loved the thought "Why couldn't we be friends?" Only to have Pam follow that logic to it's inevitable conclusion and get mad at Jim for "ruining everything." Hilarious stuff.
I think this is a winner, and to think it's your first shot out of the gate! I hope we see more from you, 'cause this was great!
Author's Response: Mose, thanks so much for the review, and for your kind comments in the chat which inspired me to get this out of my head and onto the computer screen!
Date: August 13, 2007 04:44 pm Title: Chapter 1
This really nails FNB, with her blend of old insecurities and newfound feistyness. I love how virtually everything makes her think of Jim - and then she actually sees Mrs. Voldemort herself (hee, perfect.) Several lines made me laugh, but this kind of kicked it off: He was probably off doing something romantic with his awesome girlfriend, maybe celebrating their six months and one week anniversary. Anyway, this sounded very believably Pam, the premise was really original and I was so glad when she decided to throw caution to the wind and go for the halter (a taste of things to come.) Hope you write more!
Author's Response: Thanks so much, Colette. It means a lot coming from an author whose work I really admire!
Date: August 13, 2007 04:26 pm Title: Chapter 1
That was great. I think your Pam thoughts were really in character and well done. And who can resist a story set in Target?
Nice work!
Author's Response: Thanks a lot, desert island! I myself am also a big fan of Target :-)
Date: August 13, 2007 03:55 pm Title: Chapter 1
From a houseful of women that love Target I truly appreicated this fic. Go Pam, flaunt it.
Author's Response: Heck yeah! If I was as cute as Pam, I sure wouldn't be hiding behind cardigans and blouses. Thanks for reading, gotkona!
8 [Report This]Date: August 13, 2007 03:33 pm Title: Chapter 1
Congrats on your first fic! I hope we'll be seeing more from you, too. I loved the part where Pam starts imagining how a friendship with Karen would go - that was a nice touch and very well written. And I'm so glad Pam got the opposite of what Karen suggested!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review, kaystar! I had re-worked that section where Pam imagines their friendship so much, I'm glad it made sense :-)
Date: August 13, 2007 01:23 pm Title: Chapter 1
Woohoo! Power Pam! Aw, that was a good story. I feel bad for Pam that she didn't get to flaunt it, but no one else did, so it's ok I suppose :)
Author's Response: Hopefully Pam will get a chance to flaunt it for Jim sometime this summer! Thanks for the review, secondrink!