Reviews For Breakthrough
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Reviewer: MaryESP Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: April 24, 2021 09:35 am Title: Chapter 1

Love this!

Reviewer: Clover Signed 1 [Report This]
Date: January 25, 2018 10:06 am Title: Chapter 1

Oh, this is really excellent! Love it!

Reviewer: Alex Wert Signed [Report This]
Date: March 05, 2007 07:15 pm Title: Chapter 1

I know this wasn't the point of this great fic, but I loved your Kelly and Ryan bits.

Author's Response: Thanks! That pair is ridiculously fun to write. Actually, I don't know that I've ever written Ryan. I have to get on that... (twss)

Reviewer: grapenutbeats Signed [Report This]
Date: March 03, 2007 09:12 pm Title: Chapter 1

This is exactly what I look for in Office fic!  Something completely understated just like the show.  I think it is completely in character, with Pam showing a little bravery for once.  This is how I imagine their finally getting together; something kind of subtle that says everything.

Author's Response: Thanks! Heh. I was just thinking to myself that you would not like my post-cocktails fic. Understated is not a word I would use to describe that one... But yeah, I find it a lot easier to write this understated stuff. Thank you so much :)

Reviewer: Semby Signed [Report This]
Date: February 22, 2007 04:39 pm Title: Chapter 1

Oh, that was lovely!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: time4moxie Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: February 21, 2007 07:41 am Title: Chapter 1

very nice!


Author's Response: Thankee! Getting reviews from you is like being told "Hey, nice bike riding!" by Lance Armstrong.

Reviewer: Amalia Kensington Signed [Report This]
Date: February 20, 2007 12:19 pm Title: Chapter 1

oh my GOD!!!
Okay, I really love it when Jim and Pam fight. It seems to be like the only times that they're really honest with each other.
Also, I like that nothing has been seriously defined. But there's the hope of things to come.
Thanks so much.
cheers.
--Lex

Author's Response: I totally agree. When they're angry it's like they can't hold it in anymore. I looooove writing fights for them. It's like an addiction.

Reviewer: gotkona Signed [Report This]
Date: February 20, 2007 10:26 am Title: Chapter 1

Loved it and how you had Pam be so brave.

Author's Response: Thanks! It wouldn't seem brave coming from a lot of other people, but I guess coming from Pam it was pretty brave.

Reviewer: Paper Jam Signed [Report This]
Date: February 19, 2007 10:57 pm Title: Chapter 1

I really liked this! Funny and cute and romantic!

Author's Response: Yay! All the things I hoped it would be :)

Reviewer: PuffingNoise Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: February 19, 2007 08:30 pm Title: Chapter 1

Awesome. I love the moment between Pam and Jim in the breakroom at the end.

Author's Response: Thank you! That was the hardest part for me to write. I must have tried 10 different endings, so I'm glad you liked it.

Reviewer: molly_connelley Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: February 19, 2007 08:05 pm Title: Chapter 1

This is brilliant. This is... this is perfection. This is exactly what Jim and Pam need, what they deserve. They deserve to get pissed, have it out... thanks for writing this. I loved it. I loved it.

Author's Response: Thank you! I totally agree that Jim and Pam deserve to get pissed. I like that you used the word deserved. They've earned a moment of unbridled honesty, you know? Lay everything out on the table, even if it isn't pretty.

Reviewer: flamingosinparadise Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: February 19, 2007 07:05 pm Title: Chapter 1

I loved Kelly's comment about Ryan and the ravishing.  In my head...that's canon now because it's hilarious and so Kelly.  And the Jim/Pam stuff...frickin good.  Characterizations seemed spot on.  Great job.

Author's Response: Thank you! Characterization is so important to me. I love writing Kelly. I'm going to have to finagle Ryan in here at some point, because he's way too much fun too.

Reviewer: JimPamFan Signed [Report This]
Date: February 19, 2007 04:33 pm Title: Chapter 1

Keep going, keep going!  I love it.

Author's Response: Thank you! I will :)

Reviewer: NotQuiteDonna Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: February 19, 2007 03:12 pm Title: Chapter 1

This was just... outstanding. Well done!

Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it :)

Reviewer: kaystar Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: February 19, 2007 02:35 pm Title: Chapter 1

What a sweet and romantic ending. I loved this. 

Author's Response: Awww, thanks. I had to write something fluffy after I finished the other fic I was working on!

Reviewer: ElizabethLynn Signed [Report This]
Date: February 19, 2007 02:26 pm Title: Chapter 1

Well done and really in-character.  I, too, will be ridiculously heartened if we see Jim back at his old desk.


Author's Response: Thankee! It would be wonderful if he'd move back, wouldn't it? *fingers crossed*

Reviewer: annagirl93 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 19, 2007 01:38 pm Title: Chapter 1

wow.

wow.



Author's Response: Hahahaha! Thanks :)

Reviewer: justjaded Signed [Report This]
Date: February 19, 2007 09:21 am Title: Chapter 1

Wow. I feel like I haven't read a fic in a very long time that could easily have been on the show. The beginning of the break room scene, with Kelly, seriously could have happened. Great stuff here. While I love fluff and what not, it was nice to see a sort of symbolic ending and beginning for them, without being too over the top.

Author's Response: What a wonderful compliment! I really tried to keep things realistic and in character, and to keep it from becoming shmaltzy, so thank you!

Reviewer: sharky Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: February 19, 2007 07:47 am Title: Chapter 1

What a great story! I loved the whole thing about Jim reading the paper but not really. Great detail!

Author's Response:

Thank you! Yes, my fiction-writing prof would have been proud of the newspaper thing :) 

I love your stories, by the way, so this means a lot coming from you! 

Reviewer: StarShine Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: February 19, 2007 07:38 am Title: Chapter 1

WOW. I LOVED THIS!!! you wrote pam's pain so well... and of course, i love a happy ending!

Author's Response:

Yes!!! I love capitalized reviews!! Hehehe!

Pam is just so sad right now, isn't she? Don't you just feel bad for her? I had to relieve some of her pain :) 

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: February 19, 2007 07:26 am Title: Chapter 1

Ooh!  I am sooo hoping Jim does move back to his old desk.  And how pathetic that I'd be encouraged by that tiny little detail?  How very Pam of me.  BTW -- your characterization of her is spot on.

Author's Response: Thank you! I feel very comfortable writing as Pam, which is odd because I'm nothing like her. Except that I work as a receptionist part-time. Hee!

Reviewer: Angryhaiku Signed [Report This]
Date: February 19, 2007 06:46 am Title: Chapter 1

I really, really liked this! I think you got the beats of the fight exactly right -- it felt like a natural arc. And I liked that even when she's being brave, Pam still can't quite bring herself to come out and say it!

(Are you thinking of continuing this? 'Cause, yay!)



Author's Response:

Oh, thank you so much! I was concentrating so hard on getting the beats right, so I'm really glad to hear you mention that!

And yup, I'm definitely thinking of considering this, even though it says complete. You guys have convinced me :) 

Reviewer: stampsgal Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: February 19, 2007 06:09 am Title: Chapter 1

Shannon,

This was great!  Please tell me you're going to write another chapter!  

There were some great lines; my favorites were:

She hates the cameras. They make her recognize the exact moment she does something weak or foolish 

and

Pam squeezes the flier so tightly that she wonders for a second if a person can actually liquefy paper if they apply enough pressure. Maybe she’ll ask Dwight later. It seems like something he would know. 

 Sarah



Author's Response:

Thanks! I will very possibly write another chapter, but there are other fic ideas floating around in my head (especially regarding the new challenge that came out. Think of the possibilities!)

Glad you liked the liquefying paper thing. (That was my favorite part too. heh.) 



Author's Response: So, I know I'm pretty slow, but I just realized that I know you! It wasn't until Melody's review that I was like... WAIT A MINUTE! So yay! I love that the elves meet in other fandoms :)

Reviewer: tv_dream Signed [Report This]
Date: February 19, 2007 05:54 am Title: Chapter 1

Very nice. I like that nothing is overstated and dramatic between them when she says it... seems more realistic.

 And let's all hope Jim is back to his old desk soon...



Author's Response: Thanks. I thought it was much more them to not really say anything. It's frustrating, but it's them.

Reviewer: WildBerryJam Signed [Report This]
Date: February 19, 2007 05:43 am Title: Chapter 1

ahhh!! I love it!!!! It felt so true and emotional and wow. You're amazing. This is what should happen this week. For realsies.

I'm very excited to see what happens now that Ryan is at a new desk. Please Jim move back! I loved the Kelly line about ravishing Ryan, I acn totally hear that coming out of her mouth. Amazing job!

Author's Response: Yay! Thank you! I love writing humor so the Kelly stuff was fun, but I was worried about the emotional stuff. I'm glad it rang true.

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