1 [Report This]Date: February 04, 2023 09:08 am Title: Truth
I would give kidney to see this happen on screen. Such a good premise with excellent execution (in phrasing).
10 [Report This]Date: June 08, 2010 09:42 am Title: Truth
Oh my God. This is the textbook definition of the phrase "Spiraling Out of Control". Secrets just being hurled out now! Oh no! This is great! lol...
Date: February 17, 2009 08:21 pm Title: Truth
OMG I love it, so clever with the dundies / casino night mix up :)
Date: June 06, 2007 04:54 am Title: Truth
I realized that I never actually got around to finishing reading this since I was waiting for it to be finished before I tackled it and I'm just rereading from the beginning again and nearly busted a gut at Kenny.
Date: April 02, 2007 06:25 pm Title: Truth
Oh now that is a beautiful piece of confusion. It's all completely true. But the lies of omission, hooboy. I love that the two kisses have been conflated!
Author's Response: Thanks belsum! I really appreciate that you're writing reviews for each chapter. Really above and beyond!
Date: March 21, 2007 12:53 pm Title: Truth
“JET SKIS!”
Kenny in da house! Hilarious comic relief in the middle of this otherwise very tense scene.
Karen stays on the stoop, half-in and half-out of the doorway.
Perfect metaphor for where she is now. I like the way you mirror her state of mind in her actions.
He took her off his speed dial a week or so ago. The night of Phyllis’s wedding.
This line made me wince. No, Jim! Don't give up on her yet!
It feels strange to him to know that she was that close this whole time. It felt farther.
Awwww.
If she actually had feelings for him, then why didn’t they get together when she left Roy? What is missing from this picture?
Yeah, and that's the $64,000 question Greg Daniels is dancing around, isn't it? Can't wait to see your answer...
Author's Response: Kenny was the best character to write. Ever. And YAY for mentioning the half-in and half-out the door metaphor! I was wondering if I got that across or not, because no one had mentioned it. Thankee!
Date: March 12, 2007 05:29 pm Title: Truth
I *love* this. Everyone's so in character, despite the fact that they're in this incredibly tense situation that we've never seen on the show. And, yet, I can imagine it going down *exactly* like this b/c the voices are perfect. And the mix of drama and unleashed emotions ("She was your fiancée, you fucking moron!” Jim snarls. “Not that you ever remembered it then either.”) and humor ("JET SKIS!") is just like on the show. I've read a lot of post-Cocktails fics, but this is definitely one of my favorites.
Author's Response: Oh, wow! Thanks Rowena! I'm incredibly flattered by everything you've written. It's exactly what I hoped people would think.
Date: March 11, 2007 07:19 pm Title: Truth
I'm not finished reading yet but I just had to say, wow, I LOVE that Jim told Karen about the Dundies kiss and not the casino night one! That's so sneaky and yet awesome.
Author's Response: Isn't it sneaky? That Jim... He's got some 'splainin to do ;)
Date: March 11, 2007 04:55 pm Title: Truth
Oh wow - gasped right out loud at this chapter. He told her they kissed at the Dundies? I mean, it's not a lie, but it's certainly...oh man, this is not good for Karen.
BTW, is it wrong that I really like your Karen? Love the way she's so no-nonsense, yet is caught in the middle of the biggest, messiest love triangle since Antony & Cleopatra.
Seriously, though, this is terrific: spot-on dialogue, intriguing characterizations, and a plot that is nothing short of mesmerizing.
Author's Response:
Hee! Yup! It was the Dundies! I actually used that surprise in another fic, but I've convinced myself that it's canon so I think I'm going to continue to use it as a basic assumption in all of my fics. Heh.
And I love that you like my Karen. Because I like my Karen. I try really hard not to give Karen a raw deal, because I try to put myself in her place. Would I move to Scranton for Jim? Quite possibly. Would I be very jealous of his relationship with Pam? Definitely. Would I be dumb enough to stay with him even after he admitted he still had feelings for Pam... Probably not, but I can try to explain it in a way that saves her character from being pathetic and/or nasty. I hope.
Anyway, thank you so much! Can't wait to hear what you think of the rest :)
10 [Report This]Date: March 08, 2007 05:37 pm Title: Truth
Wow, I just laughed so much at Kenny. First at Jim's reaction to him smashing his car, and then when he yelled "Jet Skis!" before collapsing. Perfection!
Author's Response: Heh. Yeah. That part was fun to write. That was actually the first part I thought of when I decided to write a Post-Cocktails story. I was like, "Kenny must scream 'JET SKIS' and then pass out." Thanks for reading!
Date: March 06, 2007 10:48 am Title: Truth
This is awesome. You've got Jim's hurt and anger, Karen's relentless confusion, Pam's essential Pam-ness (being concerned and mad in practically the same breath? Spot-on)...all of them feel so real. I can't imagine we'll have everything so dramatic and instantaneous, but I LOVE this.
Author's Response: Thanks! I worry about writing a story with this much drama and action because it's so different from what usually happens on the show. I worry about keeping everything realistic and in character. So I'm glad to hear that it's ringing true for you :)
10 [Report This]Date: March 05, 2007 03:51 pm Title: Truth
ah! write more quickly...i was on the edge of my seat the entire time...which means you are a wonderful writer!
Author's Response: Awwww! Thank you amelie! I'm going to continue writing riiiiiiight... now!
Date: March 05, 2007 12:40 pm Title: Truth
Oh this is getting so good. I love how we have the rehashing of both kisses. Dundies and Casino Night.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Just wait until you see the fallout...
Date: March 05, 2007 12:04 pm Title: Truth
OH WOW! I never thought of Jim telling Karen about the drunken kiss at the Dundies but not Casino Night. I repeat...wow. I could see it playing out just that way in canon, too.
And man, you know JUST when to end a chapter. I'm on pins and needles here! Great job. Seriously.
Author's Response: Heh. Glad you write the kiss confusion thing. I read the idea on Office Tally and used it in one of my other fics. Since then I've decided that it's my own special fic canon :) Glad you like the cliffhanger too!
Date: March 05, 2007 11:53 am Title: Truth
Everything about this is just... GREAT. I can't even put into words how much I'm enjoying this, so I'll have to leave it at the fact that I am beyond excited for more!
Author's Response: Thanks DinkinFlicka! I'm really excited too! I'm still figuring out what will happen next, and I can't wait to see what you think!
Date: March 05, 2007 07:07 am Title: Truth
You just love to torture us, don't you? Your cliffhangers kill me shan. Please update soon! :) amazing job
Author's Response:
I do love to torture. It's a hobby of mine.
Thanks WBJ! I'll send you out some of my rough stuff today if you'd like. I'd love to see what you think :)
Date: March 05, 2007 12:41 am Title: Truth
It's getting good! Update soon!
Author's Response: Thanks! Hopefully the next chapter will be even... gooder.
Date: March 05, 2007 12:17 am Title: Truth
Oh my gosh! What a cliffhanger?!? My jaw is on the floor! Please write fast!
Author's Response: No worries. I'm working on it! Thanks for the review!!
Date: March 04, 2007 10:22 pm Title: Truth
I really wanted to say how great it was that you made Karen a likeable character in this!
Ha. Sorry, couldn't resist.
I love the whole thing more and more with every read. I'm honestly having a hard time keeping myself from rereading it while I'm trying to do the neverending work piled next to me... I LOVE Pam and Jim's conversation! I love Jim forgetting how angry he is at Pam as soon as she said Roy was scaring her earlier. I love that even though this is a fight scene, to me the strongest blow was ...
" you can get back to your girlfriend.”
Ouch. Still hurts. Wow, Shan, just wow.
Author's Response:
Hahaha! You can try to hide your love for Karen, but I know the truth. You want to BE her. It's so obvious.
So, besides being pretty much the best beta ever, you also leave awesome reviews. I love that you kept score during the Pam/Jim convo. Pam totally won it with that last line though, you're right. I might be sending you some reeeeally rough dialogue tomorrow, just to see if you think I'm taking this in the right direction. 'Cause, you know, I want Jim and Karen to end up together and I figure that you'll support me 100% on that.
KIDDING. Don't send me nasty emails.
Date: March 04, 2007 09:26 pm Title: Truth
This story is SO good. I can only hope the writers take this route (but most likely not...)
The confusion between Karen and Roy was great--how awesome would it be if this played out like this on the show
Amazing job--can't wait to read more
Author's Response:
Yeah, I don't think the writers will go this way either. They tend to shy away from the big dramatic scenes, which is why Roy's "I'm gonna kill Jim Halpert" at the end of Cocktails was so surprising. But if it did happen sort of like this, I might just die of happiness.
Thanks for the kind words!
Date: March 04, 2007 09:18 pm Title: Truth
you know that expression "just when you think it can't get any worse..."?
Yeah. Totally applies.
I can't wait to see just how much worse it gets.
Thanks.
cheers.
--Lex
Author's Response: Oh totally. And it will get a bit worse in the next chapter. But I promise to make it better in the end because I'm a total sucker for happy endings. Yeah. Hope I didn't kill any suspense there ;-)
Date: March 04, 2007 09:13 pm Title: Truth
OMG!!!!!!!!!!! UPDATE! UPDATE! UPDATE!!!!! Ok, seriously I could NOT read this fast enough. It's like I found myself speed reading NEEDING to find out what happens! THIS IS SO GOOD! You've got a knack for suspense. I seriously can't wait for you to update this...I'm basically gonna be checking back every few minutes...so sad am I. lol
Author's Response: Thank you!!! I've never actually written suspense before, so I'm glad to hear that! I want to warn you though-- it's going to be at least a couple of days before chapter 3 is ready. I don't want you wasting you time when there's so much good fic out there :)
Date: March 04, 2007 09:10 pm Title: Truth
Oh. OH DEARIEE.
XD. Cliffhangers kill me.
ANYWAY. Great way to keep us at the edge of our seats. :DD. And I know it was supposed to be an intense scene, but I couldn't help but giggle when Kenny said 'JET SKIS!'. xDD. Hope to hear more from you soon~
Author's Response: Glad you giggled at the jet skis thing. I found Kenny to be hilarious in Cocktails and wanted to use him for comic relief in this one too :) Thanks for the review!
Date: March 04, 2007 08:57 pm Title: Truth
Aaah! When will we see the next chapter?
I am really enjoying all the post-Cocktails stories. I love here when Roy figures out there were 2 kisses. And we thought he was angry before!
And these lines?: “She was your fiancée, you fucking moron!” Jim snarls. “Not that you ever remembered it then either.” and "You were a shitty fiancé. It was only a matter of time before she left your sorry ass." Love that.
Love that Jim reminded Roy that Pam was a fiancée instead of "just" a girlfriend. It was only going to make Roy madder, AND inform Karen of something she hadn't known, but Jim has just had enough.
Sadly, I don't think Pam would have dumped Roy w/o the Casino Night kiss, but I can see how Jim might have thought it. I think Pam probably couldn't marry Roy when all she could think about was kissing Jim (and how she wanted more...).
Anyway, good job and looking forward to more. Are long reviews okay? I haven't been reviewing long, so I don't know if there are rules.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! Long reviews are more than okay. They're fantastic. I live for them!
About the 2 kisses- after Cocktails I was like, "Oh god. What will he do if he ever finds out about the Dundies?" Heh. I'm glad that you liked angry!Jim. I love it when he comes out to play. Especially when his anger is directed at Roy, who truly deserves it. And I agree with you about Pam. She probably would have let herself fall into an unhappy marriage without Casino Night, but Jim definitely doesn't get that yet. No worries. I'll get him there :)
As for when we'll see the next chapter... I just wrong a page of Pam/Roy dialogue and a page of Jim/Karen dialogue but I'm not sure yet how I want to put everything all together so... at least a few days. Sorry!
Author's Response: And by "wrong" I mean wrote. Wow. Hope that's not a Freudian slip of some kind...
Date: March 04, 2007 08:54 pm Title: Truth
Love this story...keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review :)