Date: March 30, 2007 08:54 pm Title: The Grave
Wow...this just keeps getting more interesting. You are very good with the twists...everytime I think I Have something figured out...turns out I don't.
Date: March 30, 2007 12:40 pm Title: The Grave
Ah, so now we get to the meat of the issue. I'm curious to see how lucid Creed can be.
Date: March 30, 2007 09:05 am Title: The Grave
By the way, I thought it was very obvious who it was from the beginning. I wondered for a little bit but then the guitar comment confirmed my suspicions.
Date: March 30, 2007 09:03 am Title: The Grave
Ooooh very interesting! I was sure Angela was pregnant; is she and she's breaking up with Dwight because of it?! Or... does she have some fatal disease? WHAT IS IT?
Date: March 30, 2007 06:52 am Title: The Grave
oooh, now that is an interesting book!
Date: March 29, 2007 02:21 pm Title: The Puzzle
Well... I was thinking Dwight because of Angela's um... doctor problem, and the whole 'punishment for her sins.' And I don't think Creed was Jim's... friend. But ah well. It's still very good.
Date: March 29, 2007 06:39 am Title: The Puzzle
my first thought was creed. but i didn't want to say anything and be proven wrong. or jinx it. but i also have my suspicions about dwight/angela, but won't say. :)
Date: March 28, 2007 08:59 pm Title: The Puzzle
I really like how you've woven fun mystery into this story while adding careful doses of all the characters. Few stories take the time to explore the other relationships of the office (though we Jammers sometimes struggle to admit that such things exist!), but your Phylllis/Stanley moment is a perfect reason for more authors to try branching out in the same way. Great job, and I can't wait to see where this goes next! --CH
Date: March 28, 2007 05:03 pm Title: The Desk
You really have me hooked on this! It's nice to see that they are all acting a little nicer to one another..I really like this.
Date: March 26, 2007 11:33 am Title: The Annex
YOur first paragraph had me doubled over, busting a gut.
Date: March 26, 2007 10:05 am Title: The Annex
hum, what is up with angela and her doctor. and toby listens into the conversations :)
9 [Report This]Date: March 24, 2007 08:56 pm Title: The Desk
This is intriguing. I would really like to read more.
Date: March 24, 2007 12:52 pm Title: The Desk
I'm think it's either Dwight or Creed - you officially have me hooked. I would think that Pam would be more broken up about Dwight...but then I don't think Jim would refer to Creed as his friend. Hmmm...I'm intrigued! More please!
9 [Report This]Date: March 23, 2007 07:40 pm Title: The Desk
*tear* You killed someone off! I love Pam & Jim realizing they would want the other to know how they felt...hum...could this finally urge one of them to say something?
Date: March 23, 2007 06:08 pm Title: The Desk
nonononononononononoNONONONONO!!!!!!
Tell me you did not just kill off Dwight.
It's Ryan, right? Please let it be Ryan. Or Stanley.
Seriously, I'm on the verge of hyperventilating.
thanks.
cheers.
--Lex
Date: March 23, 2007 05:35 pm Title: The Desk
Dwight??? Oh stab me in the heart... hehe, in other words, continue please!
10 [Report This]Date: March 23, 2007 01:21 pm Title: The Desk
Oh. My. Goodness! More please!!!
Date: March 23, 2007 11:28 am Title: The Desk
Oh interesting concept, I'm totally interested. Keep on posting! I totally want to know who it is and what they have to say (via journal or whatnot).
Date: March 23, 2007 11:13 am Title: The Desk
This is an interesting start. You've set it up so that it would appear that the deathee (is that a word?) is Dwight, but it also seems you've made it deliberately a mystery because you want to keep us guessing (or thinking it's Dwight. Or Creed. Actually, either one would be relevant.) I like the premise, but I don't know if the "surprise, who died?" is necessary.
Two comments: 1) you might want to check your word use; read over the story again. I caught a couple words that were used improperly, i.e., "slowly" instead of "slow." (That wasn't it, but that's what I mean. And 2), I really wonder whether Jim would hope that whomever it was kept a journal. I doubt that - it seems too obvious and sets up the fact that they are going to find a journal. I think he'll just be curious what he's going to find, not really knowing what to expect.
I don't know if you've used or are interested in using a beta, but the couple little things like this could and/or would be easily caught by using one.
Don't let my wordy review overwhelm you -- I am definitely interested to see where this goes ...
Date: March 23, 2007 10:55 am Title: The Desk
i want more. it is interesting... and a death its somber, but happpyjam.
Date: March 23, 2007 10:27 am Title: The Desk
oh wow. This is so sad, but I LOVE the plot!! I can't wait for coming chapters! good job i'm excited
Date: March 23, 2007 06:01 am Title: The Desk
Hmm. You've got me intrigued! Who could it be. Dwight? Stanley? Creed? (I'm not sure about the exact seating layout of the office. so I don't know who it could be.)
I'm loving the Jim/Pam interaction too. Maybe soon they'll be able to confess their feelings aloud.
More, please!
6 [Report This]Date: March 23, 2007 05:59 am Title: The Desk
So is it Dwight or Creed?? You have me stumped! Everytime I think I know, I change my mind!! Can't wait to see where this goes!
Date: March 23, 2007 05:31 am Title: The Desk
Okay, I'm hooked. I think this has the potential to really be a great one.