Date: April 22, 2007 08:22 pm Title: Chapter 1
Jim is completely emasculated here throughout this story and honestly makes me think you're about 15. Real men don't behave in this way. Sorry if this is harsh but I don't pull punches in reviews.
Author's Response: Well, I guess I appreciate the review, even though it is harsh. The first time I read it, it hurt my feelings, but then I thought about it and I really like that you're not afraid to say what you think. Better to say something when you think there's a problem the let it go.
I know that Jim seems like a major push over, but really there is a point to that. Despite the feelings of many, I'm sure; I need Pam to stay with Roy and having Jim fight that would put a damper on where I want this to go.
Date: April 21, 2007 02:23 am Title: Chapter 1
fuck, how could she still marry that dorkface of a doofusbrain of a MONKEYHEAD of AN IDIOT WHO NEEDS TO LEAVE THIS STORY RIGHT NOW?!
Don't get me wrong - I freaking love this story, because it's half on the lines I was expecting after Casino Night - Pam needs a friend, Jim is a friend, and the friend, that can help her. Of course, because Jim was there, I guess she didn't understand the pain of not having him nearly as much as she would've understood if Jim had really left, on bad terms - so I like that you got that in.
But still, I'm unbelievably mad at both of them, because Jim: Pam DID make the biggest mistake of her life x infinity, and Pam: YOU ARE IN LOVE WITH THE MAN WHO THINKS YOU ARE BEAUTIFUL.
Oh, dear - I think I'm going to be typing in caps a lot when I'm reviewing this story. Be prepared - I get very...passionate about my 'ships. ;)
Can't wait to see when she ditches the moron and gets with TheGoodGuy, who is ABetterGuy than the Jim on the show because he chose to realise that what he did was just a big shitty. :P
Seriously - get to writing!