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Reviewer: Cate the Great Signed [Report This]
Date: May 13, 2007 08:46 pm Title: Part 3: Bonus Question and Aftermath

She squeezed his hand, an unusual public display of affection, and looked at him urgently. “Dwight, I would very much like to get back to the hotel as soon as possible.”

BEST. ENDING. EVER.



Author's Response: Glad you liked it...I love imagining hot and bothered Angela.

Reviewer: JRAddict Signed [Report This]
Date: May 13, 2007 08:37 pm Title: Part 3: Bonus Question and Aftermath

Super cute ending--great job!  I loved the smirk and eyebrow lift from Dwight during the fight question--so what he would have done

 

 



Author's Response: Thanks...have to admit I was pleased when I thought of that.

Reviewer: Too Late Kev Signed [Report This]
Date: May 13, 2007 08:25 pm Title: Part 3: Bonus Question and Aftermath

I really love the stuff at the end with Jim and Pam.  Their back and forth banter is great, and it's nice to see this wonderful married relationship.

Of the funny stuff, that thing with Dwight saying Paradox was not only funny, but perfectly Dwight.  I can just see him making one of those faces, like when he said "Remember on Lost when they met the Others?"  Creed's commercial is great, and Angela's TH about the noise from the roof?  Awesome.



Author's Response: Thnaks as always TLK...the ones you mention are among my favorites...yes I had that same Dwight face in mind.

Reviewer: ElizabethLynn Signed [Report This]
Date: May 13, 2007 08:06 pm Title: Part 3: Bonus Question and Aftermath

Awww!  I needed that, after all the Jim and Karen Beach Cuteness.  Funny!

Author's Response: Thanks...let's hope we're not all turning desperately to escapist fluff after this Thursday.

Reviewer: WildBerryJam Signed [Report This]
Date: May 13, 2007 08:03 pm Title: Part 3: Bonus Question and Aftermath

haha this was just too great.  I loved that Michael does the James Brown hot tub impression. Wow.  You've really honed alll their voices extremely well and the ending? So fluffy, it was just what I needed! Thank you! This was just awesome!

Author's Response: Thnaks wbj...I just couldn't resist adding a dash of fluff at the end.  Glad you enjoyed it.

Reviewer: uncgirl Signed [Report This]
Date: May 13, 2007 07:48 pm Title: Part 3: Bonus Question and Aftermath

This was so wonderful and you hit them all spot on!  Great Great job!  So happy you wrote this!  

Author's Response: Thanks, and thanks again for everything.

Reviewer: jillyree Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: May 13, 2007 07:43 pm Title: Part 3: Bonus Question and Aftermath

Once again, thanks for writing this cute, fluffy little piece of fluff.  I enjoyed it greatly! 

Author's Response: Thanks jillyree, it was a lot of fun to write.

Reviewer: feared_or_loved Signed [Report This]
Date: May 13, 2007 07:21 pm Title: Part 3: Bonus Question and Aftermath

I LOVE this story.  I particularly liked James Brown Michael in this chapter but I loved all of the commercials throughout the story.  Awesome job! 

Author's Response: Thanks...I gues actually he was imitatig Eddie Murphy imitating James Brown (one of my favorite SNL skits ever)

Reviewer: Maybe Once Signed [Report This]
Date: May 13, 2007 07:12 pm Title: Part 3: Bonus Question and Aftermath

Yeay for funny fluff!  Yeay for the newlywed game!   yeay!  [/kelly]


Author's Response: Thanks Kelly, I mean Maybe Once

Reviewer: Rowena666 Signed [Report This]
Date: May 10, 2007 03:55 pm Title: Part II: Ten-point Questions

(Commercial) Tonight on COPS, the Scranton P.D. deals with a drunk driver who has lost more than his sobriety. (Footage of Todd Packer with no pants on, handcuffed and bent over a police car)

(Todd Packer) (Slurring) “Ociffer, I’m not drunk. I don’t (bleep) care what your (bleep) brefalizer says. I just had a couple of cocktails. Hey, where are my (bleep) pants? Did you take my pants? What are you, some sort of (bleep) queer?

 

Awesome. Such a hilarious fic.



Author's Response: Thanks, glad you liked it.  I ha a lot of fun with the commercials

Reviewer: flamingosinparadise Signed [Report This]
Date: May 08, 2007 05:16 pm Title: Part II: Ten-point Questions

I love this story.  My favorites:

- Jim's line about Michael needing clarification 

-How in sync Pam & Jim are 

- Angela admitting to beet field sex

-Jim & Pam having roof sex (that needed to happen at some point).

 Looking forward to the next chapter! 



Author's Response: Thanks, and I'm certainly all for Jim-Pam roof sex.

Reviewer: MrsLloyderineHalpert Signed [Report This]
Date: May 07, 2007 12:40 pm Title: Part II: Ten-point Questions

love the COPS commercial!

Reviewer: MrsLloyderineHalpert Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: May 07, 2007 12:07 pm Title: Part I: Five point questions

ooh I love this idea!  Nice job with all the characters.  Very fun.

Reviewer: jinx Signed 8 [Report This]
Date: May 06, 2007 10:05 pm Title: Part II: Ten-point Questions

Great concept brokenloon.  A very enjoyable read.  Can't wait for chapter 3.



Author's Response: Thanks!  Work on Ch. 3 will start soon.

Reviewer: LoveFool Signed [Report This]
Date: May 06, 2007 10:04 pm Title: Part I: Five point questions

Ok..."the butt?" LOLOLOL. this story is seriously so freaking funny. NICE WORK, man! And when Jim said "I can't even get her in the door of a Chili's" ok - what a great joke that was. This is just such a nice antidote to all the JAM angst on the show right now. Thank you so so so much for this. 

Author's Response: Thanks LoveFool, I'm so glad you like it.  It's been a lot of fun to write.  Here's to Jim and Pam really being newlyweds some day.  Hope you're working on writing something for us. 

Reviewer: Officeholic Signed [Report This]
Date: May 06, 2007 09:40 pm Title: Part II: Ten-point Questions

The most daring place you and Jan ever made whoopee?


(Michael) (Looks puzzled, hesitates) I guess…in the butt?

(Hooting and laughter from audience, Bob cracks up)

(Darryl) (From audience) ‘Attaboy, Mike!

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Those are priceless lines above and had me laughing TOO LOUD at 12:40am. Great work! 

 



Author's Response: Thanks, always nice to get a laugh.  Hope you didn't wake anyone.

Reviewer: LoveFool Signed [Report This]
Date: May 06, 2007 09:17 pm Title: Part I: Five point questions

Beet Fritters......I don't think I need to say anything else about this, because that was just freaking HIL-arious. But I WILL say more. What a unique, fun idea. Seriously, I'm jealous of your creativity here! And your voices are down pat. I could totally hear Jim when he said "do you know we're on television." lol. Along with every other voice as well. Just perfect.......MOving on to chapter 2 now. Beet Fritters...roflmao

Author's Response: Here you go:  http://recipes.lovetoknow.com/wiki/Beet_Fritters_A_La_Dickens_Recipe  Yes, I googled beet recipes as research.  Thanks so much for the review. 

Reviewer: BoBerin Signed [Report This]
Date: May 06, 2007 09:04 pm Title: Part II: Ten-point Questions

What I thought was funny...pretty much everything. Hee. You pretty much nailed the characters. "I am not short. I’m average. Get your facts straight" - Did DnknFlcka beta this for you? ;)



Author's Response: Thanks!  It's fun to try to tap into Ryan; his deadpan style kills me.

Reviewer: EverybodyHurts Signed [Report This]
Date: May 06, 2007 08:40 pm Title: Part II: Ten-point Questions

(Dwight) I have a full suit of armor that I wear occasonaly to keep broken in, just in case the need for it arises.

I laughed my ass off at that line.  Of course Dwight has a full suit of armor; he could use it in the event of a bear attack!

This fic is just lovely.  Everyone is written so well.  I showed it today to one of my co-workers, a fellow Office fan, and he agreed that the characterizations were great.

Can't wait for the next chapter!



Author's Response: Wow EH, thanks a lot.  It's been a lot of fun to do.

Reviewer: lama Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: May 06, 2007 05:44 pm Title: Part II: Ten-point Questions

Absolutely love this- so much fun! And your characterizations are spot on. Well done!

Author's Response: Thanks lama...I recall you as very good with characterization so I'm especially gratified to hear that.

Reviewer: rulesofjinx Signed [Report This]
Date: May 06, 2007 03:36 pm Title: Part II: Ten-point Questions

great job yet again. this is SO funny. i can't wait to see how this all finishes up :)


Author's Response: Thanks so much!  I'll get to work on part 3 soon.

Reviewer: xoxoxo Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: May 06, 2007 02:30 pm Title: Part II: Ten-point Questions

One thing that I neglected to comment on when I got a little preview - Kelly's Sea of Love drawing on the card.  Awesome.

Cannot wait for chapter 3.



Author's Response: Thanks, and of course thanks so much for your help, particularly helping me find my inner Kelly.    

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: May 06, 2007 01:01 pm Title: Part II: Ten-point Questions

So much to love about this -- the commercials, of course, kill!  And 'in the butt' is a classic.  Er, yeah.

Bonus points for the roof -- "the roof counts"  Yeah. 



Author's Response: Thanks lisahoo!  I'm glad you liked the commercials, I had fun with those.

Reviewer: Alex Wert Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: May 06, 2007 11:30 am Title: Part II: Ten-point Questions

Dwight and his armour and, of course, in the butt were the best parts.  I don't see how you can top that, but I'd like to see you try.

Reviewer: invis Signed [Report This]
Date: May 05, 2007 11:31 pm Title: Part II: Ten-point Questions

I love that you used the "in the butt" answer - and that Darryl cheered from the audience!  LOL!

Another very entertaining chapter.  Angela getting all hot and bothered over Dwight's suit of armor was just great. 



Author's Response: Thanks so much.  Those were my favorite bits.

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