Date: October 07, 2009 05:08 pm Title: Treading Water
no problem, good for you for having a sister so obsessed with the office - i was like her when i was her age, now it's 5 years later and i'm still like that!
Author's Response: She was thrilled to read your comment, I don't know what I'd do without my editor, so I'm glad she's getting a little praise as well! I can't believe you keep coming back to review (and chat) but Thanks a ton!
8 [Report This]Date: October 06, 2009 08:49 pm Title: Treading Water
whew. *wipes sweat off brow*, yeah, i didn't really like this story all that much. i do however, like and truly appreciate how nicely edited it was, and the thoughts seemed really realistic. i guess i just didn't like the idea of the story in general. i must say though, to end on a happier note, i love your other work!
Author's Response: Thanks for being honest, sorry if you were worried about it. All editing credit must be given to my 14 year old sister. She loves to write, is a huge Office fan and a grammer snob to boot! I don't post anything unless she has read it several times and critiqued it, and she's pretty tough, so there isn't any review that can offend me :) Thanks for giving my other stuff a chance, glad you enjoyed it!
7 [Report This]Date: October 06, 2009 04:25 pm Title: Treading Water
hey, yay to you for writing a multi-chapter story, i love it, taking the plunge. as for the content, i'm not so crazy about this chapter, i found it to be very similar to the episode with to added pieces, but i will assume that it was just an introduction to the story. i look forward to continuing to read!
Author's Response: Thanks for the congratulations and all your input. Yes the first chapter was an intro, but as a warning, the story is pretty much all of the action of casino night, with Jim's thought process thrown in. Quite frankly, I don't think this is all that good of writing on my part,(I prefer 55 word fics) so if you find anything you like in it, I'll be thrilled :)
8 [Report This]Date: September 09, 2009 01:10 pm Title: Treading Water
Ohh interesting premise :)
Author's Response: Thanks Hannah_Halpert, I hope you continue to enjoy it :)
Date: September 09, 2009 08:41 am Title: Treading Water
:) put 'em up! this sounds really interesting, although I'm a bit confused about the 'heights' part, are we going to see more of that?
Author's Response: Sorry if I confused you, let me try to clear it up. If you meant ""Scared of heights (something he would later find ironic)"" that line has no real bearing on the story. It's just a inside joke with my brother, who was terrified of heights as a kid and is now over 6 foot tall. But if you think that line is confusing or out of place, just let me know and I'd have no problem taking it out. I want my stories to be as tightly written as possible, so I like when people bring up things like that. Thanks for your help:)
Date: September 08, 2009 08:47 pm Title: Treading Water
I like it so far! please keep going
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! As promised I'm posting the next chapter, but be warned I don't think it's some of my better writing. I like your username, as often as I login, a one word name is starting to sound better and better :)