10 [Report This]Date: September 30, 2009 03:21 pm Title: Chapter 5
um... rather incredible chapter! i loved this one, very realistic, and i loved how the reader was able to see multiple sides of every character. nice work beermefive!
9 [Report This]Date: September 25, 2009 02:03 pm Title: Chapter 5
I love your story. It's great!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you like it!
Date: September 23, 2009 10:37 pm Title: Chapter 5
Wow. Very dark. Definitely holding my interest. I'm interested to see what happened to Pam and why Jim is holding off on the surgery. (Taking him at his word that it's later rather than outright refusing.)
BTW, you meant to write Holly was a "barren" bitch, not a "baron" one.
Author's Response: Thanks for that! Kind of embarassed now...lol
5 [Report This]Date: September 23, 2009 12:11 pm Title: Chapter 5
Hi
I'm really sorry, but I just didn't agree with this last chapter of yours. It didn't seem in character at all for Jim, even if he is sad and depressed and wanting to blow off steam. I just cant imagine Jim acting like that I'm sorry, and Holly in my opinion forgave Jim way too easily.
Loved chapter 4 though and the way you've portrayed Michael and Holly's dynamic.
Also thought it was a nice touch having flashbacks about the will :)
Author's Response: The will was definitely one of my favorite parts to write. Same with Michael and Holly's date. And about Jim's freak out on Holly, it's further explained in the next chapter. I'll just say that his tumor messes with his emotions. When he's sad, angry or happy, the tumor causes him to feel it tenfold...but anyway, the next couple chapters are finished, I just need to tweak them up a bit...
Thank you for the review! And I hope you continue reading despite the OOC Jim...
Date: September 23, 2009 08:48 am Title: Chapter 5
I cried. Knew it would happen eventually. LOL The part about Pam's ashes just....wow.
Author's Response: Aww...yeah, I got slightly misty eyed while writing that part...lol.
10 [Report This]Date: September 23, 2009 06:43 am Title: Chapter 5
This story is amazing, beermefive. It's usually my personal rule to not read anything that has an already-dead Pam in it (not to mention a dying Jim), but I have to admit, this has sucked me in and I can't wait to see what the big mystery is. This is a great AU, so please keep updating.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm really glad you like the story despite already-dead Pam and a dying Jim. Hopefully the big reveal won't disappoint! Thank you so much for reading!