Date: October 16, 2006 08:32 am Title: Forgotten
I'm so behind on reviews but wanted to tell you that I really liked this, it was very realistic, and it pains me to think that she and Jim came so close to getting to know each other and she came so close to blowing off Roy right at the beginning. Ouch! Really nice job.
Date: October 12, 2006 11:25 am Title: Forgotten
Awesome job on your first fic! I enjoyed the situation and characterization, and I hope you continue to write!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the encouragement - I'm really glad you liked it. I hope to write more, too, but I have to find a way to do it faster!
Date: October 12, 2006 04:54 am Title: Forgotten
First of all, this is your first fan fic? Because this is just excellent! What a great, great concept - them having met on the night of the infamous hockey game! And I could so see this happening - Jim being all gangly and awkward and such. :o) Loved it, too, that you worked in the "They know what they did" line!
I hope you dive into the obsession right alongside the rest of us, because this was such a terrific story! Write and post more!
Oh, gosh. Thanks so much. This is not my first fan fic ever (I have a one-shot and a partially abandoned WIP for Veronica Mars over on LJ) but I haven't written much, and this was my first Office fic, so I am so glad that it turned out okay:)
The obsession has definitely taken hold - Unfortunatley, I write very slowly, but I definitely want to to more.
Date: October 11, 2006 06:16 pm Title: Forgotten
Awww, that's so sweet and sad. Why couldn't Roy have shown up a few seconds later? Or, you know, not at all? Answer: because then we wouldn't have had a show. Ah, well.
I know, Roy ruins everything, with his showing up, and setting a date and such. Stupid Roy.
Thanks for reviewing, I'm glad you enjoyed it:)
Date: October 11, 2006 04:57 pm Title: Forgotten
EXCELLENT! Ten stars. Absolutely.
I usually don't like stories that backtrack the characters when they were younger than series, but this was so well done I liked it despite myself. You have positively NAILED Jim and Pam, and even Roy. I love this line:
"He had grown eight inches since the summer, and sometimes his arms and legs still felt like they were controlled off site by someone who was not him."
That is so adolescent-boy. Jim's friends are dead-on, as well.
And this exchange is perfect:
"But I, for one, am glad we still feel close enough to laugh about it together. Some relationships wouldn't survive such an incident."
"Yes," Pam agreed, going with the joke, not stopping to wonder why she suddenly felt so happy, "it could have totally ruined our non-existent relationship. Thank god we worked through it."
I have no suggestions for improvement; it needs no improvement. Brava, brava, brava.
Wow.[/Jim] Thank you so much, I think your review has made my night:)
I am so glad you liked it, and found the characters, er, in character. I was a little worried that Roy might seem overly concerned, but then decided that even Roy would have to realize the depths of his screw-up if he left a girl behind on the FIRST DATE.
Thank you again for such a great, encouraging review:)
Date: October 11, 2006 04:51 pm Title: Forgotten
"Hey, never be afraid to call a foul. They know what they did." - yay to you for throwing this in!
Your description of Jim's lanky mess of jeans, etc was so funny!
That is my favorite PSA, followed closely by Dwight and the "eaten by wolves". I laugh and laugh everytime. Actually, I have watched the DVD extras over and over, why do you ask?
Thanks for reviewing. I'm so glad you enjoyed it:)
Date: October 11, 2006 04:47 pm Title: Forgotten
In honor of your name, *yaaaaaaaay!*, Kermit-style.
Very good! The voices are right, the pacing is great.
And: yes! When Pam tells this story on the show, Jim totally gets a "Wait a minute" look on his face before he asks her when it happened. Wouldn't it be cool if he did remember?
And wouldn't it be cool if I didn't treat these characters like real people? Too late! Great job, Muppet :)
Jim DOES get a "wait a minute" look on his face! I am now positive that he was remembering and kicking himself to find out that at the time Roy wasn't yet Pam's boyfriend.
They're not real people? Whaaat?
Thanks so much for the review and the encouragement :)
Date: October 11, 2006 03:32 pm Title: Forgotten
this as so cute. where do people get idea's like these? they're so good.
Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked it:)
Date: October 11, 2006 02:39 pm Title: Forgotten
Oh, this was so cute! It made me so disappointed when Roy came back, even though I knew it was coming.
And, heh, I love the reference to Jim's philosophy on fouls. :D
Thanks so much! I didn't want Roy to come back, either.:)
Date: October 11, 2006 02:17 pm Title: Forgotten
This was so sweet! You perfectly captured what those moments are like--the instant connection, then the real disappoint at a missed opportunity. And this was perfectly in character for Jim, Pam & Roy. I really enjoyed it!
Author's Response: Thanks! I was a little worried Roy would seem a little too concerned, but he did forget her. On their first date. Even he wouldn't realize that was a huge screw up.
Date: October 11, 2006 01:59 pm Title: Forgotten
how cute- and i really loved the little jim psa quote :)
Author's Response: thanks - for some reason that psa makes me laugh more than any of the others. I think it's because Jim is so dead serious when he says it.