Date: July 22, 2007 09:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow. First off, I do not usually like script-like stories for whatever reason. But this was spot-on PERFECT. Not only did you have Jim and Pam down cold, but every other character as well. Your Michael was scarrily spot-on as well as Angela. This is EXACTLY how things would go down if we ever saw a pregnant Pam and Jim. Just great. Kudos!
7 [Report This]Date: July 22, 2007 05:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
Pam's talking head with the bumper sticker was so cute! And I love the way she keeps falling asleep.
Date: January 16, 2007 08:57 am Title: Chapter 1
aw that's the end? it was so cute. i'd love to hear more.
8 [Report This]Date: November 08, 2006 11:26 am Title: Chapter 1
I like Jim's talking head bits, but Michael seems a little OOC in relationship to Pam's 'condition'. Why is he so angry? Definitely great potential though!
8 [Report This]Date: November 07, 2006 08:53 am Title: Chapter 1
Interesting start. Can't wait to see where it goes.
10 [Report This]Date: November 07, 2006 07:22 am Title: Chapter 1
Uh oh, I have a bad feeling about this... Don't go, Jim! Can't wait for more :)
10 [Report This]Date: November 07, 2006 07:04 am Title: Chapter 1
I really love this...please continue!!
Pregnant Pam!! BY JIM!! YAY!
10 [Report This]Date: November 07, 2006 03:29 am Title: Chapter 1
You really pulled off the script format well. Love Pam's 'Baby on Board' talking head, can just see her expression - expectant Jim would be absolutely adorable. So much comic gold they could exploit on the show even with these two together - as you illustrate so well here!
9 [Report This]Date: November 07, 2006 01:53 am Title: Chapter 1
i don't normally go for script-format fics. but you've really nailed the characters, and the general feel of the show. the way the scene cuts away to a talking head, the reactions of characters ... great stuff! looking forward to reading more!
Date: November 06, 2006 10:33 pm Title: Chapter 1
Yeah I don't usually get into script like fanfics, but this is something I can get behind. I laughed out loud at Angela's reaction to Pam's pregnancy. Man you were right on target with her voice. Can't wait to read more.
10 [Report This]Date: November 06, 2006 09:54 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh, this is fantastic! I don't generally get too into script-formatted stories, but I'm loving this.
PAM: Well, he’s my husband--
That sent a jolt of joy through me.
10 [Report This]Date: November 06, 2006 09:32 pm Title: Chapter 1
Awww. So cute.
One thing- it's Michael, not Micheal. It's hard to tell sometimes, so I understand. Were I not a psycho Office freak, I wouldn't have noticed, either ;-)
Date: November 06, 2006 09:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is definately a story I can get behind. I'm going to reserve further judgement until it's complete, and I am very anxious to see it completed.
I would love to see a tiny bit more length, but I also enjoy restraint in authors, and I certainly wouldn't like to see you start adding unnecessary bits. You've got a good instinct, especially around your dialogue. Keep up the good work.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing! I actually cut out a whole opening sequence between Micheal and Dwight, which explains the little mistake in the story of 'Micheal and Dwight emerge from the office' somewhere in the middle there. But yeah, it was weighing it down a bit. Hopefully the other chapters will be at a more satisfying length. (TWSS!)
Again, thanks!
10 [Report This]Date: November 06, 2006 08:50 pm Title: Chapter 1
wonderful start. can't wait for more
Author's Response: Thanks so much! :)