1 [Report This]Date: March 05, 2021 04:43 am Title: Chapter 3 - The Promised lies
It's a little weird, but Karen here, with her thoughts and persuading herself, reminds me so much of Pam in her relationship with Roy — the feelings are gone, but both tried desperately to clutch to deceive and save that they could. And I feel sorry for her here. I've never hate Jim, but this is the moment I like him the least.
Also, I don't like what Karen did with Pam's flyers, but I can understand that.
And, I really like this line — 'that's the only Italian (food) he can tolerate.' It hurts. She's already known that things went terribly wrong (and we knew how much Jim is passionate about Italian food!) but still can't stop watching this trainwreck.
Thank you for writing, I'm morbidly curious about her thought on 'The Negotiation' revelation.
Author's Response:
You are such an intuitive person and keen observer. You made my day by noticing that little foreshadowing which I though was perhaps too subtle for anyone else to notice - Italian food. What she did with flyers was really sad, it must be something she may have regretted looking back. What she had become in this relationship which was clearly turning into a train wreck like you said.
I love your feedback. You always take time to say such positive things and help me feel supported to continue writing. Thanks again for your time.
1 [Report This]Date: March 04, 2021 04:17 pm Title: Chapter 3 - The Promised lies
Yep, this is bang on. The walls are going to crumble soon... one can tell that Karen kept telling herself the same thing over and over in the hope it would solidify. It didn't, and that's visible even the night before they had their corporate interviews.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your comment :)
Yeah, I am sure there was lot of assurance she gave herself like a mantra to cope with the storm happening right in front of her. It's interesting how we don't even realize other's needs in our own need to cling with them.
1 [Report This]Date: March 04, 2021 01:35 pm Title: Chapter 3 - The Promised lies
Karen really has her head up her ass.
She is refusing to admit that her relationship with Jim isn’t as real as she wants to believe it is.
If she and Jim were so great together then Karen wouldn’t have felt the jealously of Pam’s art show, and so she wouldn’t have torn down the flyer.
Karen is also refusing to see that Jim is holding her,and Pam, at arm’s length away from him.
Which is probably why Karen has the constant need to have Jim, and herself, talk about their feelings.
Karen can’t see that the reason why Jim has turned more towards her is because he can’t stand the fact that Pam got back with Roy,
instead of him moving on with her. Karen doesn’t doesn’t understand that Jim is just using her as a distraction.
This is why I never thought that Karen was all that smart or confident as a woman.
Jim is an idiot too because he can’t see that the whole reason Pam got back with Roy is because of his relationship with Karen. Plus Jim certainly didn’t help the situation by not only turning more towards Karen, but being an ass himself to Pam.
Karen being so insecure and jealous, makes me look forward to seeing her thoughts on beach day, and getting dumped in New York.
If that’s where you are taking the story.
Author's Response:
Karen truly didn't see things clearly. She was really overtook by her insecurities, jealousies and Jim's indifference - like you pointed out. Jim had it tough too because he didn't know any better either since Pam never said anything to him and he was just not ready to get his heart broken again. Yet that doesn't justify what he was doing to Karen.
Thank you for your comments. I really like discussing the characters and their thoughts and feelings ;)
Date: March 04, 2021 09:54 am Title: Chapter 3 - The Promised lies
Yeah, the sandcastle is crumbling that's for sure. Karen is smart and perceptive. I like how you have it here that she is picking up on all the small glances between Jim and Pam. However it feels like she still doesn't have the whole story. Regardless of all the late night talks, I never thought Jim was 100% honest in his feelings for Pam and how crushed he was and still is after Casino Night. Seeing Pam leave the wedding with Roy may have turned Jim more to Karen so I get why she'd think they'd all moved on. However I think your last line hits the nail on the head. She wants to believe his smile is real. Which to me reads she doesn't truly believe his smile for her is real. Nice job.
Author's Response:
Thank you for this. Yeah I also felt that Jim just never got around telling the entirety of what happened. It's hard to put in words when there was little of what really happened and most of what was felt. I am so glad you like the last line. I really tried to end it with something that resonated with characters and us.
You have been wonderful in supporting me through posting these chapters. Thank you again :)