1 [Report This]Date: March 10, 2021 11:49 am Title: Chapter 5 - The truth(s)
Thank you for thanking me lol. Seriously though you are a very good writer. You really got Karen's POV down perfect. Thank you for sharing and I can't wait for more of your stories.
Author's Response: Thank you again for your words of encouragement. I am glad that you enjoyed my POV on Karen. And I hope you get to try my POV of Jim and Pam in my other story.
1 [Report This]Date: March 10, 2021 08:10 am Title: Chapter 5 - The truth(s)
Oh.
Well, everything was leading to Karen having her dream crushed, but still... of course, Karen was eager to deceive herself all the way, but I don't like that all her hard work and sacrifices turned into dust like that. And I'm not fond of Jim at all for using her as a living shield from his own ghost.
"small city full of..unimportant people, insignificant memories and…..unfinished feelings." - this summed up Karen's attitude toward Scranton perfectly.
"She was everything (but that)." - again, a great glimpse of the canon here!
It was a tremendous and completed story, but I wouldn't be mad if you added a bonus chapter (with a happier Karen, perhaps?)
Thank you for writing!
Author's Response: I love this Dernheim when you catch my little canon parts. I am glad you liked that sentence. It means a lot that writers like you take out time to appreciate work of someone so new. I have thought of a bonus chapter too, waiting for it to come to me. I hope you enjoy the other story as well.
1 [Report This]Date: March 10, 2021 06:47 am Title: Chapter 5 - The truth(s)
I can easily see this happening with Karen. Heading out to New York she feels like everything she's been working for with Jim is about to come to fruition. But there's still some more subtle things you threw in there that I liked. Jim smiling, but not laughing. Him being sympathetic to Jan. Her realization that Pam is not plain. Lots of good insights to her character.
The ending of this story does sting for Karen. It would hurt to get dumped by this guy you were so invested in. So in that regard you did well to get her feeling down right. Luckily for us we know she'll go on to find happiness. Well done for your first story.
Fortes Fortuna Adiuvat
(Fortune Favors the Bold)
1 [Report This]Date: March 09, 2021 08:09 pm Title: Chapter 5 - The truth(s)
A very nice ending.
Karen really did get a rude awakening,
which in the end was her own fault for staying
with him.
Karen did say the same thing as I have
when she mentioned that there two Jim’s.
Scranton Jim and Stamford Jim.
Karen wanted Stamford Jim, and that’s who she felt she was dating.
Stamford Jim was not the real Jim.
I think that is the real difference between Karen and Pam.
Unlike Karen,Pam KNEW that there were two Jim’s. When Jim came back from Stamford he wasn’t the Jim Pam knew and loved. Pam could see that the real Jim was just under the surface.
That’s why she never gave up on him, and I think
he pretty much admitted it to Pam during their talk after her confession on beach day.
Author's Response:
Yeah I have to say that you are spot on. I think your idea of two Jim kind of resonated with him except it was the same Jim with the hidden part, like a lie of omission. She was exposed to only a part of him which was never him for real, truly had a rude awakening there.
Karen did the best with whatever she knew on the surface like you pointed. We don't often distrust a person without having a reason to. Poor Karen didn't know any better. But Pam knew Jim for years to call on his facade. They were meant to be.