Date: January 11, 2007 04:04 pm Title: Tears of A Clown
Wonderful. All of these feel so real.
Author's Response: Thank you!
10 [Report This]Date: January 08, 2007 11:14 pm Title: Tears of A Clown
"“Other people crying is SO sad!”" made me laugh and tear up at the same time... aaand I can't believe I just admitted that... I'm loving this!
Author's Response: Heee, admitting is the first step. Thank you, lano!
Date: January 08, 2007 06:07 pm Title: Tears of A Clown
You were able to capture each character and what their instinctual reaction would be so well. Kelly making it all about her, crying like a baby made me giggle a bit.
Author's Response: Thanks, MA! It's good to know I can make people giggle.:)
6 [Report This]Date: January 08, 2007 06:07 pm Title: Tears of A Clown
I'm really excited about the premise of this story - can't wait to see the other potential people who find her. Loved Andy's voice here, too - so funny.
Author's Response: Thank you!
Date: January 08, 2007 04:15 pm Title: Tears of A Clown
I can so see Andy coming on to Pam like this - or I guess reacting to her rebuffing his smooth moves is more like it.
Author's Response: Heee, he would need to turn it around so he wasn't the one doing the rejecting. Thanks!
7 [Report This]Date: January 08, 2007 12:35 pm Title: Tears of A Clown
That was so great! I was expecting at least one of those to be Jim or Karen so it was a nice surprise when you didn't include them.
And I'll put another vote in for breaking up the dialogue differently to have each person's words and actions be together instead of having the dialogue of one person right after the action of another. That being said, it's minor compared to the voice and language you used, which were awesome!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'll sit down later and look over everything and make some dialogue changes so it's easier to understand. :)
10 [Report This]Date: January 08, 2007 12:23 pm Title: Tears of A Clown
Ew, Andy's so squicky! Perfect job with capturing his voice here. Loved this. *onto the next chapter*
Author's Response: Ha, thank you! Andy really has no boundaries to his creepiness. :)
Date: January 08, 2007 11:56 am Title: Tears of A Clown
That was so Andy.
Author's Response: Thanks!
10 [Report This]Date: January 08, 2007 10:22 am Title: Tears of A Clown
wow... you should write for the show. cuz seriously, making you alternately switch from crying to laughing is hard. (that's what she said!) but the show nails it, and apparently, so can you! i especially liked that no. 5 kinda hits that it might be jim, but i was really glad that it was roy, because that's so much more realistic.
and the windsheild wipers... wow.. LOVED IT!!
Author's Response:
Wow, seriously, that is SUCH a compliment. I figured it would be much more sad if Roy found her.
Thank you so much for the thoughtful review!
Date: January 08, 2007 09:38 am Title: Tears of A Clown
What a beautiful job. Very simple, not flowery, not to mention you captured each character so perfectly. Nicely done.
Author's Response: Thank you!