I think "Finally" is the perfect title for this story, because -- yes, FINALLY.  They need to do this. 

I will say this, though:  I had to go back and re-read a couple times to make sure that Pam was the one who said "I miss you" first.  I was really glad she was, though.  I think it will change everything if she says that.  And man, I would beat myself up for days, too, if I'd been her.  Can you imagine how many times she's replayed that in her mind?  Wow, I am really obsessed. 

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Aw, I thought this was really sweet and a little sad.  I wonder what Jim would think if he knew that she'd been drawing illustrations of him while he was gone.  Hmm.  I always find it interesting, too, that people talk about Pam drawing his hands a lot.  I imagine that she must be pretty good, because hands are one of the hardest things to draw... at least, in my experience.  The eyes are always easy, and then the mouth and the nose, but the hands... trying to capture those long, slim, but masculine hands ... I think that would be hard.  I just think it's interesting how every time people write about Pam drawing Jim, there's always a comment about his hands.  :)

I also really liked the line about the hidden treasures in her desk:  the yogurt lid metal and the yearbook picture!

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Interesting... I like this!  I think you really got Angela, nice.  Plus, I think Darryl could be kind of intriguing and attractive up close.  Hmmmm.

Author's Response: Thanks so much!  I think so too.  Plus I think Angela could find him intriguing under the right circumstances (they seem to have some things in common, at least to me).

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This was lush and gorgeous as always -- and a completely different take on the scenario.  I did not see Roy coming over, wow!  I have felt so bad for Roy, too, in your latest multi-chapter story and now this one, it's horrible.  Poor, hot Roy.  I have to say, though, I really liked the allusion to GWH -- "You have no idea how long I've wanted to kiss you again."   Like a punch to the gut, I felt like, "Oh, my God."

That was just right -- just enough to bring her out of the moment ... because, man, her in her robe, and Roy, in ... his hotness ... erm ... okay.... I have to go now...

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I liked all of these.  The longing, the failure of Pam to call him sometimes, the desperation they both felt afterwards, the (several) failed attempts with Karen ... the watercolor sailboats.  Lovely.  

Hannah, I think this is a good start, but I noticed a couple things.  1) I assume you must have written this before seeing Branch Closing, because Karen made it pretty clear that she didn't know what Jim's feelings for her were, which would imply that they probably weren't dating before that episode.  I think you could just as easily make this work one of two ways:  they could either be going to Scranton being VERY good friends (maybe Jim is thinking about dating Karen, unsure of what to think about Pam), or maybe they could have started dating unexpectedly in the week or couple weeks between the branch closing and the merger.  I would imagine it would take some time for things to switch over, and maybe something happens between them that kind of puts them in a dating category.  Given Jim's reluctance to come back to Scranton in "BC," I would not say that's unlikely.

Second, I think you might want to either run a spell-check or get a beta -- I noticed you misspelled "Stamford" several times.  FYI.

Other than that ... I think you have a good start.  I'm definitely curious about what's going to happen next week and beyond!  I'd like to see you continue.

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Wait... WHAT?  That ending just had me squeal and scream out loud. 

 It has nothing to do with Dwight's total power over the band aids and nothing to do with walking in (after hours) on Jim and Pam going at it on the couch next to reception.  She just really needs a change.

I think I just about LOST it there.  That was ... WHAT?  That whole paragraph was just amazing and true and then I got to that and I was like, "Oh ... my ..."  and I think I just about lost it all.  Nice.

Also, I just wanted to mention that sometimes I write something and I just know it's great and I can't wait to hear someone say something about it.  I don't know if this was one of the lines for you, but I just loved this:

She sits down at the table and pours her licorice pieces out onto a paper towel, lining them up like little corn syrup soldiers.

And then she spells "JIM."  HA!  I loved that part.  I think that was my favorite part of the story.  

I loved your Karen.  She wasn't bad or mean or weird, she was just real, she was a real, true person ... wondering what it was that Jim was really hiding and imagining WHO that might be and being surprised at that person being Pam and that is so true, for real.  Really nice job.  I liked this story a lot.

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I thought this was very funny and true.  I really cheered for Ryan when he said, "I could ask you the same thing," to Jim in the break room.  I mean, seriously.  

And really, this was my favorite line:

Surprisingly, there was no big party or announcement from Michael.  Only a remark from Dwight saying that it's like Lost when slowly but surely some of the others started to leave the show.

I don't even watch Lost, and that made complete sense to me.  I also love seeing Ryan move to Karen's old desk, so glad he's out of the middle of that triangle.  Hee.  This whole thing was so strangely gratifying to me.  :)

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Bob Vance - FTW!  That is hilarious that he bought six purses and gave them all to Phyllis.  LOL.  Great story.

Author's Response:

Ah, but that crazy romantic bought ten purses -- six in his arms, and four in his hands.  BV,VR never does anything by halves.

Thanks for reviewing!

One other comment I forgot to make -- the timeline in the story is a little confusing; you might want to take a look at that.  I'm not sure if it's all chronological or if it's purposefully out of order. 

Author's Response:

I mentioned in the author notes that I had originally planned for these to be drabbles and then a "five things" so they weren't actually related to one another or set in the same storyworld.  So while I tried to organize them in an understandable order, you are quite correct in noting that if read as one piece, they could seem out of order. 

And I think I'm starting to confuse myself. :) 

I thought this was nice.  I agree that I usually find "threesome" fics a little OOC, but you did a nice job with making it work.  I could totally see Karen being attracted to both Pam and Jim at the same time and her fantisizing about wanting both of them ... I loved her catching them making out in the women's bathroom (!)  It was interesting.  I also like how it ended with her alone, because I often think that's how threesomes really end - I don't believe that three people could really make it work together; in the end, one person will always be left out.  I'm glad that you ended it that way.  Nice first story!  

Author's Response: I tend to agree... most people are naturally monogamous, and there's always jealousy. Thanks for the review!

You are going to make me cry.  I hate Fancy New Beesly and her sadness.  I want them all to just be happy.  Wah.

That being said, your stories so far have been nicely written and I appreciate that.  Keep writing ... even if it does make the baby GreenFish cry.  

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I LOVE these little drabbles.  This is so interesting... I love the idea of Pam becoming real friends with Toby; he really seems like he'd be a good friend, y'know?  And Pam... realizing that she was never really friends with Jim; that was it was actually always more than that, really.  I love that.  These are really cute and nice and I want to read more.  

Codename Boyfriend needs to go out of town more often.  ;)