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This story was very cute. Simple and yet conveyed everything after the first date that we didn't get to see. ::sigh:: If only this story becomes a commercial ;o) Good job!

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Great job! I thought that the title was perfect to describe Jim's mind after finding out he and Pam are having a baby. I really liked the way you wrote Jim fumbling around and trying to make everything comfortable for Jim. *sigh* I can only imagine how much he'll fuss when Pam's belly is growing with the baby.

Author's Response: Aww, thanks so much! I\'m glad you enjoyed it!

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You mean the Radish Inn, right? Now I'm really curious what Jim did to deserve it. I've always thought Jim and Pam need to go back to Schrute Farms to try out the other two rooms beside Irrigation ;o) Prequel, perhaps?

Author's Response: I want to keep this series to 55 words, so there might have to be 2 or 3 prequels. Now I\'m doubting that what I wrote for Jim is horrible enough to deserve the Radish Inn, so it may be a few more days so I can do a rewrite:) Thanks for the review! And now that you say it I have think I have to write about them in the Night-Time room! But I don\'t think Jim was that awful, so maybe just the American.

Yay to Jim's and Pam's sexy banter. I really like the fact that they're talking and behaving more like themselves now that they're out of the office.

Can't wait to see where this is going next. Hopefully to a roadside motel somewhere because of all the snow? *nudge nudge wink wink*

Author's Response: bkwrm...I think you're on to me!

Awww...even strangers could tell that they're meant to be together! Why can't they? I'm glad to read about the inner monologues of both of them. If only there was a way that they can read each other mind, then things would be so much simpler!

My favorite thing about this story so far is the fact that Jim and Pam haven't even kissed each other yet but the way you described them looking at each other is just so good. It's the same way they surreptitiously looked at each other in the first 3 seasons. Loved it!

Can't wait to have some more free time to read the rest!

Author's Response: Free up some spare time...there's lots more coming.

Oooh...you're so cold! Leaving us (and Jim) hanging like that! The possibilities of the next update ::rub hands in anticipation::

Okay, on to the more coherent review: I enjoyed the awkwardness of the two of them trying to get comfortable in the same bed. And I like how Pam is in this story. Honest and straightforward. What else...oh yeah, the two of them talking together in bed. They should get all the talking done so we can get to the good part, if ya know what I mean ;o) Kidding! But not really.

Author's Response: As I've been saying...patience, patience...patience.  And, I don't think it's any surprise that I think Pam is one of the most intriguing characters on televison.  I'm not going to belabor the point here, but she's been on quite the journey since we frst met her sort of squirming at Michael's remarks from behind the reception desk in the "Pilot". 

Before I start on the "review" of the story, I just want to let you know how appreciative I am that you're updating this regularly. Thank you so much for the time you've spend on writing this as well as taking the time to reply to the reviews. I've really enjoyed the additional details provided in the author's response :o)

I really liked the fact that Pam called her mom and talked. In the episodes, we've got a glimpse that Pam must be pretty close with her mother so I really like reading further evidence of that fact. Also, that's good advice, Mama Beesly!

Frida is not exactly subtle in getting the info out of Jim, is she? I mentioned before that I really liked this new character that you introduced and I hope to see more from her because I have a feeling that Jim and Pam need some prodding and the perfect person for that is...Frida!

I'm getting used to the pace of the story now so I'm just going to sit back, relax and enjoy as the Jim and Pam (hopefully) find their way to each other once again.

Okay, back to the 20 questions: Is the movie "The Women"? I haven't seen it but remembered a review mentioned that it's a remake. If so...then is the actress Norma Shearer?

Author's Response:

Thanks so much for the kind words.  As I've said,..or at least inferred (?)...I really don't want to have those of you who are interested in what is happening in this story wait a long time to see how things are developing for our hero an heroine. That is why I waited until I was completely finished writing the story before I began posting it.  And believe me...I started on this some time ago.  I'm not going to promise that you will see new chapters every day (my original idea was to post every other day) but the response I've receievd has been so positive that it's gotten my adrenalin going...so I haven't really stuck with that.  But if real life stuff gets in the way...well so be it.   But, I vow to try to keep any delays to no no more than one day as there are still many chapters to go and I don't want to be posting his after Season 6 starts (don't worry...just joking...it's not that long). 

And, as far as my responses, I am genuinely appreciative and respectful of the time and effort everyone has taken to leave their comments and I just want to reciprocate in kind.  I think you all deserve that.

Frida.  You are righjt....she's not very subtle....I think she's very comfortable just sort of speaking her mind.  I'm glad you and others like her.  I think she and maybe some of the other characters Jim and Pam encounter on this trip may all contrribute, in some way or another to helping to open Jim's and Pam's eyes.  We'll just have to see, won't we?

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As far as the "20 Questions"....50 Schrute Bucks  for the correct movie....but wrong actress.  Keep trying...you're doing good!

Hee...Rachel is even less subtle than Frida. The kids, Jason and Tina are becoming more adorable.

It's a bit odd to read four chapters without any Jim/Pam interaction but I kind of like it because of the way you're building the plot. I'm usually a pretty horrible reader since I always try to guess what's going to happen but in this story, I just can't and the surprising thing is...I really like it!

Other things that I like:
- the game that Pam thought of for the kids (what a fun idea!)
- Jim becoming more accepting of the possibility of him and Pam (love the way his thoughts of her are sprinkled throughout)
- Pam using her art to express what she cannot say (another great idea!)
- the fact that everyone at the motel is on Team Pam! Because she's clearly awesome!

Oh yeah...when's the movie coming out? Will it star Jenna Fischer? Who's playing you? ;o)

20 Questions: I'm stumped because my first thought was "The Thin Man" series. This actress was in "The Women?" Was she one of the main characters? What other movies was she in? Clearly, I suck that this game :D

Okay...thanks for putting up w/ my ramblings.

Author's Response:

Yeah...Frida, Rachel...they're all onto the JAM!  As far as a string of chapters without any real interaction between Jim and Pam...sort of reminds you of...oh, what season was that!  We got through that...glad you got through this. 

My movie...the silver screen isn't big enough for all that snow! 

20 Questions....I said "character" actress.  And no....the "Thin Man" series is definitely going off in the wrong direction.  New clue:  Did you...or anyone you know even remotely, happen to check the TCM schedule yesterday?  The coincidences were just sort of piling up, one after the other...now that's a kettle of fish for ya!

And, I think my spelling was better this time around!

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I pretty much agreed to what NanReg said below.

Their walk in the snow was so romantic...but they weren't saying what needed to be said! But at least they're talking to one another and Jim began to open up by asking Pam those questions and sharing his thoughts at the end of their walk!

Also...Jim throwing his dirty wet sock on Pam...not cool. Yay for them bantering though :D

That phone call that Jim's about to make? It'd better be to someone whose name starts with a "K" and end with an "N" and the conversation should be along the line of "...it's not you, it's me..." Just sayin' ;o)

Oh, and please post the next chapters soon because I can't wait to see Jim's reaction to Pam's gift!

Author's Response:

What...you didn't think Jim "sharing" his dirty wet sock with Pam was clearly a subliminal expression of desired intimacy????  I thought it was kind of like foreplay.  Don't you watch "Animal Planet"? Well, at least you thought the walk was romantic.  Now that I think about it, maybe I should have thrown in the sound of sleigh bells in the distance...then again, maybe not...hmmmm!

And, you'll just have to wait and see who he calls next.  Let's see, Katy begins with a "K"...  No promises!

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Dude!! I so called it on the swaying/dancing!! ::pats self on back:: Kidding!

That scene you described of them, dancing to Ol' Blue Eyes (love his music!), all their feelings so close to the surface...so romantic. In fact, I had to re-read it because for a moment, I forgot it was just the two of them!

Now we're getting somewhere! Loving the fact that the tension between Jim and Pam resulted in such a hot kiss. Long time coming, I tell ya! (TWSS?)

Can't wait til next time! My crystal ball tells me there will be some horizontal action going on soon! Actually, it's just my perverted mind hoping :D

Author's Response: Hey...who was it that said..."Dancing isn't Boinking!"   Hmmm....let me think about that!   As I've been saying...stay tuned.  And yes....feel free to give yourself a real big, well-deserved pat on the back.

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Wow...I'm sort of speechless right now. I couldn't believe it when I saw that this story was complete. And then I started reading...

The ending was such a perfect end to everything. The honesty between the two of them at last was just so great! It was what I kept hoping they would get around to do, clear the air and move on together. The Valentine's gift and more talking. And of course, the last chapter ;o)

::sigh:: I have to echo the sentiments of other reviewers about hating to see this end but with an ending like that? Well...I guess I can't complain ;o)

Overall, this was a great and enjoyable story. Thank you for sharing.

Author's Response:

It's very gratifying to hear that you thought the ending worked so well.  As I was writing it, I hoped that it would be viewed as remaining very "in character " for what we've come to understand about what kind of people Jim and Pam are...even though we haven't been privy to anything nearly so explicit.  And as I said in an earlier response, as I wrote the ending, it just seemed that when it came right down to it, that once the air was cleared, both Jim and Pam would be quite able (and willing) to let the depth of their true feelings for each other take over.   Thans so much for reading and all your kind words along the way.  I really appreciate it!

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I usually avoid angst-y fic (or anything angst-related in general) but your summary made me curious which I am glad. The description of Pam alone in her "cozy" apartment is just so heartbreaking. I really liked the part about the teapot, especially since the Jim who gave it to her is so different from the Jim of S3. Great job!

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Question: Are you really one of the writers from TO in disguise?

Because this was just brilliant! I laughed out loud so much that a couple of my co-workers gave me weird looks. But they wouldn't understand.

I felt like I was reading an actual script from the show and could actually "see" the episode as I read this. You got everyone's voices down to a T, especially Michael's (are you worried about that at all?). All of the talking heads were really funny. My favorite is probably Pam's Girl Scout one. Dancercize! And Michael writing the index cards for them to read. Hilarious! He obviously learned from his "roasting" to know better than to ask them to write their own speeches about him ;o)

There were a few things that I had to suspend disbelief (just like on the real show):
- the cold open (I just can't see that extravagant prank)
- Dwight believing the thing about the Large Hadron Collider (I give him more credit than that but that TH of his about waiting for the world to end was hilarious though!)

But overall, I loved everything about this script story. Excellent job!

Also, thank you for sharing this.

Author's Response: Glad you liked it! :) I am a little worried about being able to get into Michael\'s head. It\'s a scary place to be. ;) When I was writing, the two points you brought up were things I had to think about. I was way deep into a bunch of scriptwriting resources (doing research since this was for a writing fellowship contest) and most of them agreed that you could go as far as the audience would be willing to go, but no further. So I figured if Michael would drive into a lake and Jim would have had to climb a telephone pole to trick Dwight, I figured the two things I put in hovered around that mark. I must say, this was super fun to write.