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Hello and welcome.

Congratulations on posting your first story. As a somewhat newbie myself I can relate to how much courage it takes to post for the first time.

I love to get all the takes on the missing scenes around season 3-4. I think you did a good job getting at what Jim would have been going through. Happy as he was he was finally going for and getting the woman he truly loved, he was surely wracked with guilt over all that went down with Karen. You did a good job portraying that.

I’m glad to your Karen did not let him off the hook.

I’m looking forward to seeing if your Pam has any concerns about Karen or guilt. But more so looking forward to her reaction now that Jim has chosen her.

One suggestion in the format that you add an extra line drop between ideas and particularly spoken dialogue.

Once again welcome and good job.

Author's Response:

Thank you so much. You are so right, it was quite a big leap for me. I am a big fan of missing scenes too, hence I chose this topic to try out my imagination. 

I am so glad you liked my version of Karen. I always felt that she did get the shorter end of the stick, and well Jim deserved some of the flak if not too much of it. And thank you for noticing and sharing your suggestion regarding format. I am definitely gonna be mindful of that for future chapters. I am actually having a hard time regarding formatting of pasting them here, because its not coming exactly how i wrote them in my word file. I am working on figuring that out.

Thanks again for your time and kindness. 

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Now this is more like it! What could have been and you wrote it so well:

as she stomped over the awkwardness behind which he was shielding himself...

"Awesome," he muttered, as all his resolves suddenly were scattered on the ground...

"It's good to be back," he repeated. But this time he was talking about something else entirely.

As much as I love this telling, glad it didn't go this way on show only because of what we would have lost in all the great fics that break our hearts with angst or "fix them" like this one.

Very Sweet

Author's Response:

Thanks so much!!

Of course it's better the way it is, with all that long suffering, lol.

But I wanted to give this a try :) 

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I continue to be blown away by the things you write and the way you write them. The thoughts we all share as fans of the show and Jam become so much more with the artistry of how you put them to paper (or the computer or your phone which I've heard you are known to do).

And the new ideas like Jim and Pam on dating apps - such a great concept - plus what fun cover art. Great Job as always.

Author's Response: Max, thank you!! This was the sweetest review! :)

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Ahh the illustrious Comfect. I've hear mention of you - even read a recent one-off you posted. See I came on in September and you were even mentioned in a review I received:

http://mtt.just-once.net/fanfiction/reviews.php?chapid=16444&type=ST&item=5875

BAsed on that I could imagine your writing was funny and entertaining and the stuff I would enjoy but as I mentioned I came on in Sept and had a lot of catching up to do of old fics and like you mentioned, there's been a lot to keep up with that's come out since then. Anyway, I read the one-off you put out recently but nothing else of yours...until now.

I'm already having a blast, kinda imaging a Sam Malone type Jim behind the Cheers vibed coffee bar and totally digging your premise.

Now as a graphic designer myself I cringed at the Papyrus and threw up a little in my mouth at the Comic Sans- however it does seem very fitting in that it's Michael's place. (although I think he is rather creative - loved what he did in the local ad).

All in all this was very fun, you really do a fantastic job setting the scene and describing the action. Can't wait for more. 

Anyway, I'm glad you are back so I can get to know you and your writing.  

Gotta know what font that is since you already mentioned comic sans. Park avenue? Myriad. zapt chancery?

Meeting Michael was fun and you got his energy (especially when high on own supply) and vibe down.

Lotta fun.

Author's Response: I didn't have a specific font in mind, more a class: those spidery handwriting-like fonts that are impossible to read on small screens. Glad you enjoyed the chapter!

Delightful intro to some of the other characters. The descriptions of Dwight and Angela were particularly clever. But no mention of cats? I did however, find the American Doll reference spot on.

Kevin, Oscar, Kelly and Toby all well presented and appreciative not to get too much Packer. (But like how you sidestepped there).

Keep up the fun.

Author's Response: Thanks! Cats are...hard to bring into a coffeeshop, though maybe I should make Angela try to make an exception now that you mention it.

Always enjoy these updates - the little bit about opening sequence was a fun drop in.

Nice switcharoo of with Pam at the counter tapping her fingers and enjoying jelly beans.

The line about them being complimentary not the same appeals to me as a Jam fan and a designer.
Complement always preferable to too matchy matchy

Author's Response: Thank you! I am enjoying flipping some things around here, and I think they are best when they are being equals and meshed opposites, not just identical. Not that they're identical in canon or anything, but sometimes they try to make them that way in fics and it's not ideal IMO.

Nice Dwight. You nailed his Dwightness.
Yeah tea. Darjeeling - must be Darjeeling!

Author's Response: If only Darjeeling were in the CVS variety pack! And thanks so much :)

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Well this was just the sweetest. How charming can Jim be at the dance and the way he assured her as they danced was so Jim.

I’m in love with the romance you built for them and I was just laughing at the scenes where they had to dress quickly as her parents came home.

The proposal was just too sweet. I happen to be in the middle of a jigsaw puzzle my family began the night of our holiday so there’s that.

Thanks for sharing this sweetness with us.

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Haaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa

Aly this was hysterical and a wonderful lunch break treat.

Except that I snort-laughed out loud at work on said lunch break.

But I forgive you because this was just so much fun. Thanks for the laughs.

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Always love a prior meeting story and this was very sweet and like you say very fitting for what is hopefully the spring and brighter days ahead.

I love the picture of Jim with the flower tucked in his ear and the single flower in a mug on his desk.

Thanks for sharing this.

Author's Response: Thanks so much! Both seemed like very specifically Jim things to do 😊

Author's Response: Thanks so much! Both seemed like very specifically Jim things to do 😊

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Lately I’ve had less time to really go in depth with my reviews (I do like to share the things I notice and love because that is what I love to see in reviews I get).

But this chapter I could just drop an “I liked it”.
This chapter really was so well done and hit all the notes it needed too.

First of all I’m a fan of the structure of this whole story. The way you tie together a current moment with a complementary flashback That framing deepens both the present and past narratives.

I usually will scoff at stories where Jim sees Pam and is in fully in love immediately just from seeing her face but you’ve given enough added reasons for him to be smitten that I buy it. Her line about him being the top hammermill salesperson seals that for me.

The scene with Phyllis is also a lot of fun. She’s hard to get at her character but I think you captured her essence.

And that last line was beautiful.

Thanks for sharing this wonderful story.

Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to write this review, I really appreciate it! Glad you're enjoying the story!

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Oh how I loved this chapter...from the way you addressed her dislike of the courses she was taking, the ones that pulled her away from him, to her expressing her disappointment at his delay in the proposal. I am so glad he explains he had planned to do it and Andy "schruted" it. I am pretty sure that revelation came out in canon even if we never did see it.

And the flashback was beautiful- making the rest-stop something more meaningful than just a rest stop at exit 17. Oh and you should add this story to the Exploding Soda Challenge.

The addition of this...
Sometimes the simplest, most ordinary things are the most beautiful.

to what we see of the proposal is just gorgeous as is that he has shared how he has had the ring a year.

This story has been a joy to read so thanks for sharing your vision.

Author's Response: Hi, I've been so bad at responding to these... I'm new to MTT, so what is the Exploding Soda Challenge? And thanks for your review!