I love this!   Great job!  Optimistic, but still realistic as a hope......

Curse you for getting my hopes up! 

This is so in character...and I love the contrast of Pam's "that's kind of sad" with Karen's smirk at Jan's breakdown.  

Can't wait for the next chapter! 

<cough.>  Well.   Goodness.   Jim needs to pick a vagina and stick to it, I think. 

 But, in the meantime, I have a more serious critique.   I would like it to be a policy going forward that if Jim has got the stamina for three times in one night, than the author has to have the stamina to give each "time" it's own chapter.   Because, seriously?   I'd like to know more.   You know, as a scientific observer, of course.   And a single sentence description is insufficient data.   So, you know, you should really give the particulars on the first two times.   You know.   For science.

A more detailed plot suggestion has been sent to your MTT email.....;)


Author's Response: Haha! Awesome! :) I really love that idea and I'm totally formulating ideas in my mind right now that could make it work awesomely.
Thank you so much for the inspiration!!

<cough>   Ahem.  

 Yes.   Very nice little tale.   <cough.>   Veeeeeerrrrrry niiiiiice.     <cough>   Hot, and yet still in character and on plot.   <cough>   

Did I say hot?   Cause, yeah.   

this is so sweet, and in character......And, on a subtle note that should NEVER be spoken aloud....poor Jim got used to having to "talk out" every.  little.   thing.     It's going to take him a while to get used to being with Pam and getting back into their "water under the bridge" dynamic.

Author's Response: Lol. It's funny you mention that because I very nearly titled this fic: One Night of Talking...Not Too Shabby...............Buuuut decided against it. lol. Thanks so much for the review Maybe Once!

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 Not to be redundant.   But, seriously?   Nothing but keyboard banging will suffice.  

I think I like-like this story, and I'm going to kiss it.  May I kiss it?

Author's Response:

Maybe Once, if you're on its doorstep in an hour and a half, you can kiss it. =D...thanks! glad you enjoyed!

"True," she replied. She paused a moment, then smiled into the darkness. "I'm still going to tell everyone we totally had sex tonight."

I love it all....but especially where you left it.....DO go on, dear Mox..... 

Well, it is a twist, I'll say that.   This is an unusual story.   Usually, the "Jim ends up with Karen" stories are all "Karen is AWESOME! Pam SUCKS ROCKS!" but, in this story, Pam comes out looking like the best person of the three flawed players.   Jim is a total douche and Karen is melodramatic and Pathetic....so, I suppose in a way they deserve each other.   

Author's Response: I'm glad you saw it this way... Pam's supposed to be relatively clean while the dirty dirty Jim overreacts and tries to man up all at once, then deludes himself and takes advantage of the also-relatively-clean Karen's one giant flaw (overcommitted).  She can tell him to f*** off, but can't follow through with it.  I hope you enjoyed the mess.

Your dialogue seems really cute....but it's hard to read without any breaks in the text....try going back through and add some hard returns, they may not have transferred properly from whatever word processing program you originally used.  

Author's Response: Thanks! I noticed that after I got it all done. (What a pain.....LOL)

Excellent....it's really hard to do the uber smut and still keep them in character....and this story did achieved it!   Good job.   I think.    Maybe I'll go back and read it again, just to be sure.....