Reviewer: albie_ Signed
Date: December 12, 2008
Title: Chapter 6: A Sorta Fairytale
Wow, I just read all these chapters at once and I'm really enjoying this. Firstly,I like you following the old adage of writing what you know. You really give the feel of Chicago and its citizens and the things that matter and really, just get the atmosphere down without being heavy handed and are really just ivniting us to your city. Secondly, the way you've drawn Pam with a certain understanding of her indecisiveness andhow I really love how for her the fairy tale does not start with the prince, but jsut her, the princess and what she wants for herself. You've really done a great job portraying someone figuring out who they are and could be. Thirdly, you are developing the Jim/Pam relationship so nicely. I loved the scene of them on the subway on the ride home from the game. You are doing it with a kind of gentle ease and I like that a lot. Nothing is rushed, things just...are. And you are doing it all witha respect to Pam/Roy without having to make him the bad guy or an evil oaf. Lastly, we share so many music tastes, it's insane, so, um, really great music choices there. Really looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Wow, thank you for the incredible review! If there are typos in this reply, I apologize but I just got home and my dog, Sadie, is all over me! Ahhh... She wants all of the attention. Haha. Anyway, thank you again. I\'m so happy you are enjoying this story. These characters have been in my head nonstop all week, I\'m starting to think I\'ve gone mental. But I\'m always picturing these cute little romantic storylines. The White Sox game and subway ride? Totally came to me when I was in the shower. Which may explain the rain. I don\'t know. I\'m a crazy person. But I\'m in love with this story, so it\'s very exciting to read your awesome review. Thank you!