Oh.  My.  God.  Please always write stories involving Michael Gary Scott because they are the funniest things ever.  I have laughed SO many times reading this, it's ridiculous.  I mean, you really managed to capture the sense of Jim and Pam in this season -- and Michael's laundry list (no pun intended) about Jan.  Hoping they're related so he can break up with her--?  HAHAHAHA.  And Dwight... just... all perfect.  

Wait... there's still more?  GAH POST SOON.

I love how Michael is all crude at first, but really quite sweet in private.  It's very Michael-esque.  Also, Creed's line was brilliant.  Heh.


Author's Response: Thank you!  Yes, I think Jim bet that Michael would be crude, but Pam knew he'd be sweet (eventually). I'm glad you enjoyed Creed's comment- it was really the whole inspiration for the story! Thank you again.

Well, I love the premise of this story.  And you really have the whole Pam/Jim interaction down quite well, I must say.  I can only imagine Jim's expressions as he's reacting to Dwight and similarly to Pam when she bets him to go hunting with Dwight.  

I have to admit, I was a little surprised that Jim told Pam about her "company" for the weekend; I sort of figured he'd leave that to the element of surprise.  But, you know, either way, Angela & Pam are going to have some quality time together, so that's always good stuff.

I also liked the detail of having the cameramen follow Jim & Dwight -- it totally seems like something like this could happen on an episode.  And yes, that cameraman would have drawn the short straw; poor guy.  I wonder if the presence of the camera will throw off the whole camoflage thing, though.   Like, wouldn't it be a little distracting to them trying to take cover?  I think Dwight would make a comment about that. 

Anyway, great start so far.  Can't wait to see where this goes.  I love anything involving Dwight & Jim.  

These were both very funny.  I can only imagine the look of confusion on Dwight's face when Michael walks in on the first one.  And Michael:  "Is that me in there?"  LOL.

The second one is very Dwight, by the way.  I could totally see him doing something like this.  "I'm not ... entirely certain of Pam's views on cannibalism."  Hahahaha.  And Jim's question?  Awesome.   Nice job.

I have been reading this off-and-on at work all day today and now you've got me completely hooked into this storyline.  I officially love/hate you right now.  Heh.  It really is a very engaging story and I love the contrast between the real-life Jim and Pam and the online Jim and Pam.  Update this soon.  I hate not knowing what's going to happen next!  Argh.

This story was very well done!  I liked the nice connection that Pam formed with Mose, and in a way, I kind of wanted to find out what whittling Mose gave Jim (and how he would react).  I could definitely have seen this happening within the realm of the episode.

Also:  Dwight said Pam was pretty?  Oooh.  Interesting.  

Great job!  

Very nice piece.  The way you broke up the short chapters makes a lot of sense and it's not too overdone.  I'm glad I waited until this was finished, though, because it would have driven me nuts watching the spiral Jim found himself going down in.  I think it's interesting because a lot of men (and women) probably find themselves in the position that Jim was in -- married to the wrong person, but doing what they felt was easiest, or best for them at the time -- and allowing their lives to slowly fall apart, all the while continuing to make bad decisions.  I'm so glad that it ended like it did; just the thought of it made me sad and angry at the same time.  We are in complete control of ourselves to make the right decisions and I'm glad that Jim realized how he almost could have made the worst decision of his life!  

Nice job overall; it's a very clean story too (I like that - no glaring mistakes, heh.  :)

This was really cute.  I love the idea of Dwight as a father (and grandfather), chasing kids around Schrute Farm, haha.  It's funny how the kids are sort of belligerent and awful -- stealing mail and swallowing calamine lotion.  Heh.

Author's Response:

I love picturing Dwight just romping around in the beet fields. And the kids are so awful when Angela's not around because they know better than to be bad when she's watching. ; ) Thanks for reviewing, GreenFish!

-Rose

Obviously you watch this show a lot, because you have the voices down PAT!  I love it so far.  And I love how it explains the drastic, classy change in Pam's wardrobe.  I love What Not to Wear, so reading this has been a delight.  I can't wait to see the next part.

Author's Response: Thank you so much!! Yeah, I certainly have seen my fair share of episodes of What Not To Wear, and I\'m glad you think I\'m keeping Stacy and Clinton in character. They are really fun to write. :) Thanks again!!