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God that was incredible. I should get to math homework but I needed to say that! Such a great one shot and I love the colliding worlds and bantering. Add a second chap if you can think of another one, it would be so cool! Maybe they meet up later when their kids are 5 or 6 and Karen/Dan are taking Ethan to see Karen's past. Jim and Pam are just walking outside of the building after another take your daughter to work day and they run into each other. Then they start talking about Oscar's welcome back party and how Karen asked Jim if he was still in love with Pam...

That could be interesting. Sorry you just inspired me to start thinking about other possibilities. Slightly in the future talking about a harder issue, huh? Try it if you like or just forget about it - your choice!

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I really loved the awkwardness - but how they all were able to walk away feeling good about themselves - and happy. Very sweet. I did see a couple little typos, if you just quickly look over them you'll find them no problem. But back to more exciting things - who's next? They don't have any more exes... what about someone else's ex? Like bumping into Holly? That could be really fun to read - I'm sure she would love Cece, and then ask about Michael... and that would be pretty interesting... just an idea. Anyways, I hope you'll be able to come up with a new loose end to fix and please keep going, this is a lot of fun!

I just read the rest of the reviews: I totally agree, Alex and David Wallace would be great! Both have some background insight on the characters, Alex on Pam, David Wallace on Jim. That would be fun to read!

Awww, what a sweet story. And a team effort, too! Sorry I bailed out on this one, I got busy with school stuff, but this turned out amazingly. I love how it started out with your idea and everyone else seemed to have pitched in to make something fabulous. Great job, adampascalfan12, and this is great! I always loved the letter, and I think you've got a great version there.

P.S. I caught two things, in the first italicized flashback you have 'jim walked in without no shirt on' instead of 'jim walked in without a shirt on' or 'without his shirt on' - i think that's what you meant to say. secondly, in the A/N you added a 'n' to the end of deedldee's name.

this turned out great, and i'm sorry i got busy and had to stop, what a sweet fic!

Author's Response: That's okay, I understand that you had to work on school stuff. I was going to post it just in time for Mother's day, but studying for the finals took me off track with the story. But I'm glad that I had you guys to help me to make the story flow more better and recommeded some suggestions. That was great team effort, I enjoyed working with all of you and is happy that the story turned out to be great! So thank you for helping! P.S. I changed the mistakes, thanks for pointing that out!!

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That's officially the cutest thing on the planet - I LOVE CECE MARIE HALPERT!!!! My goodness that was awesome. A TWSS, a snake and a turtle all in one chapter - PLUS sexy daddy Jim? Life is too good to me. Amazing!

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I LOVE THIS STORY!!!! That is the sweetest thing watching Cece ride away. To the end of the driveway. That was awesome! And so cute that there are twins around now! Great chapter(s) and I'll continue to love each and every one of these Jim/Cece anecdotes as long as you'll continue to humor me.

I really liked this chapter. Nice response for Cece's needs here! Very cute, keep going!

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This is so perfectly sweet. Amazing job, unfold, for capturing the essence of everything that is Jim and Pam and putting in into a six hundred-something word story. I love those first two paragraphs, with the repetition of 'she is standing in front of his living room window' and her observations. I also love the last three paragraphs, how every kiss is just as important as the one before it because it took so long for Jim and Pam to be at this stage and be able to do that in addition to Jim's constant urge to protect Pam. I think I'll stop trying to justify why I like this so much - but know that this is wonderful!

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This was great. I loved all of Jim's actions, mannerisms and inner thoughts - this all seemed very realistic. The way Jim imagined the events occurring and his feelings about them were great. I'm really looking forwards to the next few chapters! I wonder what Jim saved... And if there'll be anything from Karen...

Author's Response: Thanks, pmh! Realistic is always a high compliment. This is just a short little thing, so I hope you like how it ends. :)

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I remember clearly reading the first two chapters - but somehow I forgot about this story for the latest two chapters. I'm still trying to figure out how that was possible because this is just so powerfully moving and well written! You've written this with such incredible attention to detail, emotion and character, Dedeen - I'm so impressed with how you've gone about this topic so realistically. I sincerely hope you or anyone you're close to has not gone through this, or something similar and that you've just got a knack for medical-style writing. I'm crossing my fingers that you haven't gone through that, and I'm so sorry if you have.

Please continue, I know there are many other readers out there who would agree with me in saying that they would hate to see this story unfinished!

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Oh my... wow... I was almost crying at the end - when I read that this was Jim's way of saying goodbye. Then when Jim said that Pete was going to take care of everything, he had Cecelia's box and he wanted Pam to be happy... well, that was just hard to read! I trust that you won't take our Jim away from us - you wouldn't do that, would you? But all in all, amazing detail and I am constantly surprised by the amount of emotion you are able to incorporate into your writing. Wonderful chapter, on to number six!

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Oh my goodness, this is so hard to read. But I just can't stop - it's so good! This is fantastic SO FAR, Dedeen, and I'm looking forwards to reading how things will continue. You've done such an incredible job keeping this realistic in both the medical sense (not that I'd know anything for sure!) and the Jim/Pam relationship sense. I'm really looking forwards to chapter three, keep going!