1 [Report This]Date: July 11, 2021 08:02 pm Title: Chapter 1 - The day I lost my Best friend
Ouch. This is a good version of Pam and her inner monologue. Points for homeostasis!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much. I am so glad you liked my work and you left reviews for each of my chapter. I hope you liked the 3rd one as well :)
1 [Report This]Date: June 19, 2021 10:25 am Title: Chapter 1 - The day I lost my Best friend
This feels accurate to how she must have been feeling after Casino Night. The only thing I'd have is that depending on how you read it, Pam admitted to her mom that she was in love with Jim before they kissed. Which of course being so close to the wedding with Roy would probably add another level of guilt to her.
However the feeling of numbness and shock came across well. Her defaulting to something familiar like a prank also rings true for me as well. All in all not bad. Looking forward to seeing your take on Pam during this time.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your precious words. You are so right about the subjective interpretation of Pam’s Phonecall with her mom. I always felt that her mom did not make deep observation but perhaps just a slight nudge. Pam may not have been very receptive with total confrontation, but again that’s just how I see her.
I am glad you liked the prank part. I do feel that it must be life changing to lose a friend without a warning and yet you can’t complain.
1 [Report This]Date: June 19, 2021 06:57 am Title: Chapter 1 - The day I lost my Best friend
I like what you've done with Pam's denial here and the way she really has just on Casino Night started to consciously process what's been going on with the two of them. The way you write her fear and avoidance and how frozen she is waiting for Jim to show up feels free true to the Pam who ends up just... not calling Jim until he shows up on her door stop again.
Some of the details were really strong - Dwight being the only other one who immediately reacts to Jim's absence, the games with moving her computer, Michael's assumption that Pam *must* have known. And Phyllis getting a little snippy at the end tracks with the Phyllis who feels bad for Jim's hopeless crush.
Looking forward to reading more of this.
Author's Response:
I am floored by your gracious feedback. You took our time not just read but bring in those little pointers around to understand what I was trying to do there.Thank you for being such a meticulous reader to my story, it fills my heart up that you liked my interpretation and the little parts I try to put it in to stay true to character.
you are a superstar Darjeelingandcoke !