Date: September 27, 2023 06:21 am Title: Step 4, Bring To a Boil
I really like how you add the recipes in here. Hope you contiue this soon!
Author's Response: Glad you like the recipes. More on the way as soon as life allows.
1 [Report This]Date: September 21, 2023 05:32 pm Title: Step 4, Bring To a Boil
First of all - very clever title - Pam was boiling alright by the end of this chapter and halleluiah for that. It's about time she saw the light (in part thanks to one very helpful Beth and of course in seeing that her cooking partner is a better an than her potential future partner. I do hope her decision sticks!
Other things I enjoyed in this chapter -
how Jan has to pad the due date knowing Michael so well - and that Darryl knows how Jan knows Michael so well. Little details that add to the overall story.
Little nods to show elements - like the strip bar and going to Niagara Falls.
The little call out to a MTT classic. The locker scene - yup classic Roy. I thought you nailed character of Kenny too.
The small visions of family life (the ones she would like to have that she shares with Beth) are so sweet to read.
Great details to have Jim anxious to check on the cook. However I am with Kenny however about the mushy peas. Not of fan of peas at all but make them mushy and sorry to say but I'd toss them down the sink too. Sorry to yuck anyone's yum.
Now that Pam is a free agent looking forward to how you title the next chapter - and of course how it plays out.
Author's Response: Thank you! I've been having fun with the chapter titles in this one for sure. Both Jim and Pam had moments where they were boiling so it seemed to fit, though of course it was also intentional. Pam's gotten a lot of fresh perspective from a new source here and it's made all the difference. To be looking more at actions rather than words and if those actions are the kind of thing she'd want going forward. Kind of a look to the past to predict the future kind of thing.
Glad you caught all the little details I put in. Jan knowing Michael, various locations from the show, the MTT call out. Always fun to put stuff like that in and see if people catch it.
I've got some fun ideas for the next chapter. Thanks as always for your detailed reviews.
Date: September 20, 2023 11:53 am Title: Step 4, Bring To a Boil
Yay you’re back!
Good for Pam for not taking a hard look at her relationship with Roy but also not putting up with it anymore. Roy was never going to grow up with Pam.
He was always going to be that high school kid.
Also good for Pam for not taking Kenny’s crap as well. Please please please update soon!
Author's Response: Yeah, Roy's still the same guy he was back in high school just in an adult body. He's never had a reason to change till now which means Pam's outgrown him. Kenny's always a jerk so goodbye to him too. Glad you liked it.
1 [Report This]Date: September 20, 2023 06:20 am Title: Step 4, Bring To a Boil
Ok, this was a GREAT chapter. Absolutely love it when Pam breaks up with Roy and you wrote it so well!!
Loved the Squirrel McPants reference!! And hey! measuring things is SO much easier to make a recipe than cups!!
Great chapter, really can't wait to see what comes next!
Author's Response: Figured I'd keep the measurements as in the recipe since it was UK night after all. Thanks for the recipes. Always fun to add in some in-site references too. Glad the fight between Pam and Roy came across well. Should be interesting to see how it pans out.