Date: July 28, 2023 02:18 am Title: Chapter 1
An idyllic day for Jim and Pam with a bittersweet ending. Good one!
1 [Report This]Date: December 15, 2020 02:45 pm Title: Chapter 1
Man you're a good writer.
10 [Report This]Date: November 11, 2012 07:26 am Title: Chapter 1
Wow is this really the first story on the site? (I'm asking that based on what another reviewer said.) I didn't know that you cou,d find the stories in the order that they were posted. I wonder how. I always wonder how many I have missed because I just kinda look here and there.
Okay, all that aside, I know this story is obviously really old and you'll likely never read this review but I decided to post anyhow. My reviews really are not solely for the author. I also write them for other readers. I often decide to or not to read a story based on what either a specific or many reviews say so I figure I maybe could help someone decide if a story is worth reading if anyone else is as weird as I am and reads reviews to help them decide. THAT SAID... this is VERY worth reading. If it really was the first story posted IMO that makes it all the more imressive because you didn't have other people's writing to read first before deciding how to write yours. I just have to say that all the thoughts, actions and emotions you bring out in this piece just feel very very real and so in character. I have read a lot of your stories and I'm a bit embarassed to admit that I think this is my first review. I will say that with the older stuff I do tend to need to feel something strongly before I take the time and effort to review and while, like I said, I have read many of your other works, some multiple times, this was the first time I can remember seeing this and it did bring out strong feelings in me. It's a really great piece by a truly fantastic author! I don't think you're writing on this site any longer but especially with the last season upon us now, I really wish you would come back and write at least one final piece.
Author's Response: Thank so much for reviewing this story, ftmill16. Before we started this archive, several folks posted stories to fanfiction.net, so I did get to read others' work before trying my hand at writing fic. I haven't written much in recent years because season 2 was the last season *I* felt strong feelings for the show. :) I suppose my stories will seem dated to a lot of readers now (not that you said that, but a lot has happened on the show since season 2!). I'm sorry I'm so late responding to your review -- the feature that used to notify authors of new reviews has been disabled, so I check in periodically to do a manual check. Thanks for sharing your reading experience with me and other potential readers!
Date: June 09, 2009 01:38 pm Title: Chapter 1
Hey there! I don't know if you're still around here, but I have decided to make it my summer project to go back and read all the stories here at MTT. Yikes right?
Anyway, I started a the beginning and this story was #1 so here goes.
I love this. I forgot about it until I clicked on it and then first sentence in I remembered why I love your work. So creative, so true to Jim and Pam. You always had the characters right. I never read one of yours and thought "They wouldn't do that" or "That doesn't sound like him/her".
Favorite line in this one: "Then he smiled at you across the parking lot and you knew you hadn't done it for Roy."
Author's Response: Hi, Karen! All the stories? Big project :) Thanks so much for reviewing these again. I'll be able to respond when I'm not at work :D
10 [Report This]Date: January 30, 2007 12:51 am Title: Chapter 1
ugh, why do you write so well?!
Author's Response: Thanks, venulia!
10 [Report This]Date: January 17, 2007 03:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
Love the idea, love the repitition and all the sensory details... this is great! The ending is fabulous because it's so obviously lacking that second sentence (and because it's just a great last line). I also love the lines about the key turning in a lock and tasting the beach and how all men should wearing Levi jeans... there were more, definitely, but I don't want to end up quoting the whole thing! Really, really nice job here.
Author's Response: Thanks, allibabab - I do appreciate the specifics! Glad you liked the format - it was a bit of a stretch :)
Date: September 10, 2006 09:10 pm Title: Chapter 1
GAH. I am playing catch up on reading all the fabulous fanfic before I actually post some of my own, and I have to say that you are one of my very favorite writers to enjoy! This is a beautiful, beautiful story, and crazily unique! I love the imagery and your writing style, and I cannot wait to read more from you! Wonderful!
Author's Response: Thanks a lot, GreenEyes! Looking forward to reading your fic :)
10 [Report This]Date: September 04, 2006 11:07 pm Title: Chapter 1
That was FANTASTIC! And what an interesting concept! Very unique and well written.
Author's Response: Thanks, Cameron! :)
10 [Report This]Date: August 25, 2006 12:58 pm Title: Chapter 1
Very well done.
Author's Response: Thanks, gotkona :)
10 [Report This]Date: August 06, 2006 09:56 am Title: Chapter 1
I love this format, and each sentence is so evocative.
Author's Response: Thanks! :)
10 [Report This]Date: July 12, 2006 09:14 pm Title: Chapter 1
Since I have no idea how bowling works, the reason behind the structure went completely over my head. This didn't keep me from completely and totally adoring this fic. So. Hot.
Author's Response: Hey, thanks!
10 [Report This]Date: July 12, 2006 01:50 am Title: Chapter 1
Great idea for a unique and original fic... I love the way you write!
Author's Response: Thanks, aurorabora!
8 [Report This]Date: July 12, 2006 12:15 am Title: Chapter 1
Not just a clever format, but also some beautifully written content. Great images.
Author's Response: Thanks - that's just what I was hoping to create :)
Date: July 12, 2006 12:03 am Title: Chapter 1
Loved the format. Unusual and engaging!
Author's Response: Thank you!
10 [Report This]Date: July 11, 2006 01:00 am Title: Chapter 1
Very cool story!
Author's Response: Thanks :)
10 [Report This]Date: July 11, 2006 12:45 am Title: Chapter 1
I love this fic for so many reasons. The structure is really clever (two sentences for each frame, and that last frame unfinished...), and it's very well-written. You've done a wonderful job capturing the small moments in terms of senses and feelings (for example, Jim's cologne and hands, the steam in the cold air). It's incredibly romantic, suspenseful, and hot. And this: "When he brought one of your curls to his lips, you watched for a glimpse of his tongue. Then you lowered your head, and tasted the beach on him." is killer.
On a side note, this: "Then it was his turn, and you decided that all men should just wear Levi’s and be done with it." I am going to take as a shoutout to the JK:WCHLAT hussies. :)
Author's Response: What awesome feedback - thanks! I appreciate your comments about the structure + details. And well-worn Levi's? Just yum.
10 [Report This]Date: July 10, 2006 04:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was great! Loved the format!
Author's Response: Good - thanks for reviewing!
Date: July 10, 2006 06:54 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh that was lovely. And delicious. I suddenly have a craving for coconut. ;) Nice to know that if I have to be up at 6 am at least I have something wonderful to read.
Author's Response: Glad you liked it!
10 [Report This]Date: July 10, 2006 05:32 am Title: Chapter 1
ooh, beautiful.
Author's Response: Thanks :)
Date: July 10, 2006 04:36 am Title: Chapter 1
Wow. Who knew bowling could be sexy?
Author's Response: Must be the shoes :)