Date: March 11, 2007 05:11 pm Title: Mosquitoes
I really love reading a story that involves some confrontation between Jim and Roy that doesn't seem like a parody. I really love the pacing and how this is handled. Well done! Can't wait to read more. :)
Author's Response: Thank you for your comments :) I love getting specific feedback like this. I try to pay close attention to the pacing, so that means a lot.
9 [Report This]Date: March 11, 2007 05:07 pm Title: Questions and Answers
Such a powerful chapter - I loved Pam's strength and Jim punching Roy and Pam and Jim almost talking - but what I may have loved the most, after everything that had happened, was this:
“He left his brother on my car.” What a great way to break the tension.
Author's Response: YES! Thank you! I felt like such a moron, snickering to myself when I wrote that line. It was definitely my favorite part to write. I'm glad that you liked the rest of it too. Assertive!Pam and Angry!Jim and some of my favorites to write.
Date: March 11, 2007 05:01 pm Title: Mosquitoes
i registered on this site JUST so i could give you a review for this story. i think that it is absolutely fantastic and get so excited whenever i see that you update it. you have captured the characters perfectly and make it so exciting to read. GREAT JOB!
Author's Response: Awww! Thank you so much! That seriously makes me giddy! I'm so happy that I was your first ;) FanTAStic name, by the way.
Date: March 11, 2007 04:55 pm Title: Truth
Oh wow - gasped right out loud at this chapter. He told her they kissed at the Dundies? I mean, it's not a lie, but it's certainly...oh man, this is not good for Karen.
BTW, is it wrong that I really like your Karen? Love the way she's so no-nonsense, yet is caught in the middle of the biggest, messiest love triangle since Antony & Cleopatra.
Seriously, though, this is terrific: spot-on dialogue, intriguing characterizations, and a plot that is nothing short of mesmerizing.
Author's Response:
Hee! Yup! It was the Dundies! I actually used that surprise in another fic, but I've convinced myself that it's canon so I think I'm going to continue to use it as a basic assumption in all of my fics. Heh.
And I love that you like my Karen. Because I like my Karen. I try really hard not to give Karen a raw deal, because I try to put myself in her place. Would I move to Scranton for Jim? Quite possibly. Would I be very jealous of his relationship with Pam? Definitely. Would I be dumb enough to stay with him even after he admitted he still had feelings for Pam... Probably not, but I can try to explain it in a way that saves her character from being pathetic and/or nasty. I hope.
Anyway, thank you so much! Can't wait to hear what you think of the rest :)
9 [Report This]Date: March 11, 2007 04:45 pm Title: Questions and Answers
Ooooh I love me the drama! You've done really well creating such a high level of energy and urgency in this story- I can't wait for the next chapter! My heart was actually racing at certain points- most notably when Jim finally hit Roy- such a fantastic moment.
I really related to this part in chapter 3- But when all of a sudden “When the Saints Go Marching In” comes blaring from her phone, she is completely startled and bewildered. She forgot about his special ring. He hasn’t called her cell—not once—since that night, the night that she just told Roy about.
I've been there. Set a sappy ring tone to a guy (At Last. Could I have gotten any sappier?) One night, six months or so after we broke up, he called and that ring was like a frakkin dagger. Anyway, I felt it was a very real moment.
Author's Response: Oh, I am so glad to hear you say that the punch moment worked for you. When I wrote it I was like, 'Does this even make sense?' So yay! And that's too funny about the ring tone thing. I just randomly threw that in--I don't have a story about it or anything. And side note--the word "frakkin" will always make me giggle like Kevin. Always.
Date: March 11, 2007 04:44 pm Title: Questions and Answers
Fabulous and wonderful as usual; can't wait for more!
Will you name my review "President Thomas Jefferson" or something cool like that? :)
Author's Response: Thanks Becky! And consider it done. Mr. President has his own little name plate (think Kelly's from Christmas Party--with little pastel flowers and everything)
Date: March 11, 2007 04:41 pm Title: Questions and Answers
Wow. What an Awesome, outstanding chapter.
Author's Response: Wow, I got an "outstanding!" Thank you so much :)
Date: March 11, 2007 04:29 pm Title: Questions and Answers
yes! so happy to see this updated! so good!
Author's Response: Yay! Glad you liked it!
Date: March 11, 2007 04:22 pm Title: Questions and Answers
ooh, I am loving the drama here -- what I wouldn't give to hear Pam stand up for herself like this -- and I'm on the edge of my seat for the next chapter, like everyone else.
Author's Response: Doncha just love Assertive!Pam? I mean, she sort of got mixed up with Frantic!Pam in this one, but I tried. I'm glad the drama is still working for you lisahoo! You're a great reviewer, very consistent :)
Date: March 11, 2007 04:20 pm Title: Questions and Answers
Oh I love this story. I really do. I smiled when I saw an update. The tension is fantastic and I love how you keep putting in little moments of connection between Jim and Pam. So good.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad that the tension was still there, because I was worried it might get a little lost toward the end. Btw, I've been meaning to read the update to Twenty-Six for a while now, and I promise I will! I love your story :)
Date: March 11, 2007 04:16 pm Title: Mosquitoes
Where to begin? Your Michael is so spot-on that I was laughing out loud. Necrophiliac? Priceless.
I love the way you've managed to sustain the mosquito metaphor here - so apt, almost making me feel sorry for Karen. Almost. (Seriously, how dare she obstruct that call?)
....Aaaand that's the best I can do, knowing that there's another chapter waiting for me.
Terrific story!
Author's Response: Wow! This means so much coming from you, because I'm the biggest fan of your stories! I find myself often feeling almost bad for Karen. I don't particularly like the depiction of Krazy!Karen, so I figured I'd take sort of a middle road here. She can be cool, but she certainly isn't perfect. Thank you so much for your review!
Date: March 11, 2007 04:14 pm Title: Questions and Answers
Oh that was so great. And I loved Jim breaking Drunk!Roy's nose. He deserved it. Now I can't wait for the next chapter. Jim and Pam have some 'splain'n to do.
Author's Response: I was soooo nervous about having Jim punch Roy. It seemed like something Jim wouldn't normally do. But I kept having these moments in the chapter when I was writing Jim get angrier and angrier, only to restrain himself at the last minute, and I thought--I gotta let him do it once. Hee!
10 [Report This]Date: March 11, 2007 04:10 pm Title: Questions and Answers
Hey this is soo intense! I wonder what Karen has to say about all of this....! I wouldn't be surprised if she just wants out of it all! want waitt to see the next chapter! =)
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! If I was Karen, I'd have walked away by the time that Jim started questioning Pam, but I'm not Karen :) So we shall see what she does next...
Date: March 11, 2007 04:07 pm Title: Questions and Answers
This is turning out great! Who knew I'd love to read about Roy in pain? Oh wait, that's right, I did!
Get Karen out of the picture so Jim and Pam can talk!
Name this review Chester please.
Author's Response:
Hey! Did you get a sneak peak at the next chapter? Tricksy Jamster!
And I have already knit your review little booties with "Chester" embroidered on them, so *check*
10 [Report This]Date: March 10, 2007 03:14 pm Title: Collision
I love unafraid!Pam!!! Write faster!!
Author's Response:
Hee! Okay!
Unafraid!Pam just took a turn toward angry!Pam and hysterical!Pam as I was writing the next chapter... hope that's okay!
Date: March 09, 2007 08:07 am Title: Collision
roy is such a jerk but he did have a great last sentence.:)
Author's Response: Oh, totally. The more a jerk he becomes, the closer we get to Jam. Both on the show and in this fic :)
Date: March 09, 2007 06:33 am Title: Collision
This IS different! And oh, Pam, and Jim, they just will never get it, will they? Please update soon!
Author's Response: It seems that way doesn't it? Those two drive me crazy. Thanks for the review!
Date: March 08, 2007 09:56 pm Title: Collision
I think my favorite part of this is when Jim gets all snarky with Roy and Pam, hee! I just kept thinking, go Jim! Be a brat! I so love this fic.
Author's Response: Yay! That was the most fun to write too. I LOVE making Jim a brat. As adorable as he can be, when he's snarky I'm like a puddle on the floor. So I'm hoping to inject some snarkiness into the next chapter too.
Date: March 08, 2007 09:25 pm Title: Collision
“Then it was a lie of the mission!” he blusters
“What?” she asks, more confused than ever.
“I think he means lie of omission,” Jim interjects in a mocking tone.
Okay I'm sorry THAT'S THE FUNNIEST THING I'VE EVER HEARD! I mean first it's just a funny freaking joke...on top of that, just how meshed it was within the drama of it all - come to find out Roy is still simple Roy. FREAKING HILARIOUS.
Beyond that just a GREAT chapter!!! You've literally managed to keep me on the edge of my seat the entire time. And Roy....oh poor simple Roy....he basically just signed his own walking papers AGAIN. Now he's spilled the beans on those kisses being MORE than just kisses. Shan, I just ADORE this story.
Author's Response:
Okay, I'm totally giggling here, because when I wrote that I thought to myself, "No one is going to think this is funny, Shannon. You are a dork. Cut this part." But I couldn't bring myself to do it. Plus, any chance I have to expose Roy as a simple idiot, I will. I loathe him ever so much.
And can I just say that this was my first ever bolded review, and I'm loving it? I clicked to see new reviews and I was like, WHOA! What's this? It makes me feel special :) So thanks!
10 [Report This]Date: March 08, 2007 07:20 pm Title: Collision
WOW! That was amazing! I love all the turmoil and all the confusion and bitterness that was rolled up into this chapter---agonizing b/c I want Jim and Pam together---but damn does it make for a GREAT story!
I'm so glad you're half way through the next chapter b/c I'm dying to read it!
More soon!
Author's Response:
*squeal* Thank you! I don't promise to have the same amazing update speed as Moxie, but I'll try very hard to write quickly :)
Date: March 08, 2007 06:51 pm Title: Collision
Ahhhh! Yes Pam, tell him you had feelings for him when she was with Roy. Write really fast shan!!!
Author's Response:
Ha! I can't make it that easy, now can I? We'll see... Thanks for reading and reviewing!
9 [Report This]Date: March 08, 2007 06:48 pm Title: Collision
The whole time I was reading this I kept glancing over at the blue rectangle hoping it wasn't getting too close to the down arrow. I just wanted this chapter to go on and on. Please, update soon. I can't wait to see both Jim and Karen's reaction to Roy's admission.
Author's Response:
Wow, thanks! Actually, the chapter was originally like 1,000 words longer, but I decided to cut it off there and start a new chapter. Sorry! The next chapter will be from Jim's POV, so we'll know his thoughts on the admission right away.
Date: March 08, 2007 06:36 pm Title: Collision
Ok you know that i love evil cliffhangers as much as the next girl, but SHAN! You better post soon before I burst .....POP......too late.
It was worth the wait for chapter 3, I loved it. You really have ramped up the angst, so i really can't wait for the payoff. :-)
Author's Response:
Oh no! I popped you! Now I'll never get chapter 7 of Courage! I did not think this through...
Seriously, thanks so much! I am brainstorming what I hope is a good payoff, although I'm pretty sure it won't come until chapter 5...
Date: March 08, 2007 05:51 pm Title: Collision
This is so exciting! Lots of drama, uncharacteristic of these characters, yet still perfectly in character.
Author's Response: Thank you! That is exactly what I was hoping people would think. Are you reading my mind?
9 [Report This]Date: March 08, 2007 05:46 pm Title: Mosquitoes
Wow, I love the spin you're putting on this scenario! And I love how you set up everything to come to a head. Finally, I love Jim's reaction when Pam shows up in the parking lot -- very realistic and you handled it really well. Great job! Can't wait for more!!!
Author's Response: Thank you! Annoyed!Jim is extremely fun to write :)