Date: March 25, 2007 08:31 am Title: Raw
Everything is really in character. I like how you kept everything very quiet. That made everything even more intense and suspenseful!
9 [Report This]Date: March 23, 2007 08:12 pm Title: Raw
Sigh...I loved Pam's "It did". She's finally telling Jim what he needs to hear and making up for the pain she's caused him. I love how she was early and everyone was kinda waiting for something to happen. Amazing.
10 [Report This]Date: March 13, 2007 09:46 am Title: Raw
Very intense. And it's nice how you've cut to the base of the story: what happens between Pam and Jim. The fight, Roy, Karen - all secondary to what's going on with these two. I'd love to know what happened next. :-)
Date: March 09, 2007 01:22 am Title: Raw
Beautiful details. I especially like Pam thinking that news of her life wouldn't travel that fast (don't we all think that?) and Angela's concern (so sweet and in character) and the pain of resolution. Sometimes hurt is good. Well done! Cyber-cookie for you!
Date: March 08, 2007 08:39 pm Title: Raw
I like cookies. I admit: I also love post-Cocktails fic right now. And I love fics where Pam and Jim get together post-Cocktails. This was sweet and ... oh. Poor Jim.
Date: March 08, 2007 08:26 pm Title: Raw
This was a sweet story. I especially loved how Angela was so supportive in her quiet way, considering how Pam supported her during her Dwight crisis. Also that Michael, Dwight and Angela stayed to the end of the day with her..they do care about her.
And that PLoD scene was a lot nicer than the damn "Merger" one tonight, so yay for you!
Date: March 08, 2007 08:20 pm Title: Raw
Bee-yoo-tee-ful. I have tears in my eyes again. I love how you just skipped the fight entirely and went for the aftermath. I'm really not being articulate enough, but suffice it to say I adore this.
10 [Report This]Date: March 08, 2007 07:09 pm Title: Raw
This is lovely. I love the tension you create throughout the day while everyone's waiting for Jim to come back, with Dwight actually working quietly and Pam being unable to concentrate on anything, even her drawing (and for some reason, the idea of Pam drawing the edge of her keyboard is a really powerful image to me, maybe because... I don't even know. It's her job, and her artistic talent, and her nervousness all rolled into one and just- like I said, I don't know why).
You've got some awesome images in here too, besides the sketch of the keyboard, like the moon-shaped indents in her sandwich bag, and the way Jim's just suddenly there when she looks up... fabulous. There's something really quietly powerful about this piece.
My favorite line: ...and the friction almost hurts on her raw lips but she refuses to care, because maybe that's the way it's supposed to be, maybe things have to be raw and open and painful sometimes. GORGEOUS.
This is a seriously wonderful piece. I have a lot of love for it.
Author's Response:
Your review just made my day. =D! It's nice to see somebody respond to the little things I try and shuffle into my pieces. The keyboard thing was like "...YES." for me, because I went through a few options with that (another mug, Michael's somber face, the door) and settled on the keyboard.
Thank you. Authors love it when a reviewer takes this much time and care - thanks so much.
Date: March 08, 2007 07:02 pm Title: Raw
Raw is exactly the word -- Jim's poor beat-up face, Pam's lip, my poor heart (The Merger was just on), but this is good medicine for the 'Hiatus from Hell' -- thanks for writing it!
8 [Report This]Date: March 08, 2007 07:01 pm Title: Raw
"She twists her fists into his sweater and kisses him more, and the friction almost hurts on her raw lips but she refuses to care, because maybe that’s the way it’s supposed to be, maybe things have to be raw and open and painful sometimes to finally be right." What a beautiful line. I really enjoyed this.
Date: March 08, 2007 06:51 pm Title: Raw
I like this. I especially like how you describe the tension throughout the day.
I'll take chocolate chip.
Date: March 08, 2007 06:48 pm Title: Raw
it was good. my brain is fried, so sorry nothing more. but i like it. i like the way its written. the... something of it. yeah, its good. and i lack all forms of vocabulary.