9 [Report This]Date: February 26, 2010 06:34 pm Title: the sky might move but i
I love discovering great, older stories. This is one of those where I had to remind myself to blink! Delicious angst.
Date: April 08, 2007 01:57 pm Title: so he hasn't fallen
Wow, how did I miss this? This is so good...so sad and vivid (so many great details) and Jim's pain is just so palpable. And you also wrote the best kind of heat - fueled by an emotional wallop. I also really like how you left the ending ambiguous. Not resolving everything in a neat package makes it all the more powerful. Really well done.
9 [Report This]Date: April 01, 2007 05:33 pm Title: the sky might move but i
I love the last paragraph - in my mind I read the last 4 words as "when they let it". I really enjoyed this and hope you have/had an awesome time in Hawaii!
8 [Report This]Date: March 26, 2007 07:49 pm Title: so he hasn't fallen
Obviously very hot...loved the rawness of it. Although I am sad it is over, I think that was a powerful place to end it.
Date: March 26, 2007 07:44 pm Title: the sky might move but i
That was so fabulous, I feel all misty now. Excellent writing; perfect emotions--and, obviously, the sex was hot. :)
Date: March 26, 2007 07:32 pm Title: the sky might move but i
"...though she notes a tremor in his voice that makes her want to embrace him until he’s better, fixed." Yeah, that's how it feels - really pretty way to phrase the situation.
"And with their hands clasped together so hard there isn’t any blood flow, they think mostly about how it could be, how it would be, if they let it." Oh man! It hurts, but the imagery of the hands is perfect.
Date: March 26, 2007 03:27 pm Title: so he hasn't fallen
This is brilliant, the way you talk about the pain Jim's feeling so poetically, so clearly I almost winced a few times during your descriptions.
My favorite line: And he hears it before he feels it, the way bone against bone really does sound like someone knocking at the front door, how his neck actually cracks and he thinks, "I hope I don't die" like an afterthought.
Just brilliant and gorgeous and wonderful. Amazing job! Off to read the rest...
Date: March 26, 2007 08:03 am Title: so he hasn't fallen
I really loved this story. It was painful but honest and still sweet. I'll miss it! Great job!
Author's Response: thank you so much! I tried to keep it more true to life, though much of me wanted to fly off into the land of Pam And Jim Love With No Problems.
10 [Report This]Date: March 26, 2007 08:00 am Title: the sky might move but i
I really enjoyed this story !!...I liked how it ended... I will think only Happy thoughts...... Man I'll miss this story :)Good work !
Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked the ending!
10 [Report This]Date: March 18, 2007 12:19 pm Title: Just Too Tired To
Wow. This was beautiful! More, please.
Date: March 18, 2007 09:39 am Title: so he hasn't fallen
I'm dead. You killed me.
seriously though, why do you have to go on vacation?
8 [Report This]Date: March 18, 2007 07:39 am Title: Just Too Tired To
Very sexy, and I love how you've characterized Jim in the early chapters. I think you really captured his struggle with his emotions, which has fueled his character this season, and it was a delight to see that struggle finally end the only way it should. Keep up the good work!
Date: March 18, 2007 07:35 am Title: Just Too Tired To
Whew. That was sweet and hot and I cannot wait for more!
10 [Report This]Date: March 18, 2007 07:06 am Title: Just Too Tired To
Thank godd its not over! I need more more! lol <3 rating it a 10 btw!
Date: March 17, 2007 09:45 am Title: never get up again
This is amazing - very intense and scary and powerful. I look forward to more.
Date: March 17, 2007 08:45 am Title: so he hasn't fallen
I'm new to fancfic and this site....but this is the best I've read so far....can't wait to read more.
Date: March 17, 2007 08:29 am Title: never get up again
YAY! So glad you posted this here! I'll forgive the "fight-iness" because of how you've written it -- deep inside Jim's thoughts, not just a play-by-play.
Love this: "You need to let me go." So painful.
Date: March 17, 2007 08:03 am Title: never get up again
Will you return a third time with crazy smut? Lol. Please continue with the JAM love! This was awesome! Continue!!!
Date: March 17, 2007 08:03 am Title: never get up again
Will you return a third time with crazy smut? Lol. Please continue with the JAM love! This was awesome! Continue!!!
Date: March 17, 2007 07:22 am Title: never get up again
oh jesus, why did you have to end like that? if you don't update soon my head will explode. do you really want to be responsible for that?
btw, loving the story, in case you couldn't tell
Date: March 17, 2007 01:55 am Title: never get up again
My face is probably purple because I was holding my breath the entire time! Jim's pain was so powerful, it even made me mad at Pam's hesitation to tell him the truth! Wow, please write fast!
10 [Report This]Date: March 16, 2007 11:19 pm Title: never get up again
Holy crap. So intense and angsty and good. Pam's voice is perfect. And now I'm looking forward to the smut!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! That means a lot, because I'm trying really hard to keep them in character while upping the ante a little.
Date: March 16, 2007 10:07 pm Title: so he hasn't fallen
I must know why he is sorry!
Very good so far!
10 [Report This]Date: March 16, 2007 09:44 pm Title: never get up again
Why?!! why is he sorry?! Tell me!!
Date: March 16, 2007 09:30 pm Title: so he hasn't fallen
very interesting piece, here. i think you do well with it. that last line is just a punch to the gut. respect.