Date: April 01, 2007 06:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
I really like how you handled the Jim-Roy situation, and I'd like to read more about this. Please write what happens next in their conversation!
Date: April 01, 2007 08:12 am Title: Chapter 1
this is great. i loved it all from the drawing at the beginning, to the mention of pam's room being only hers, and while thats good its bad, to the small little confession. good job!
Date: March 31, 2007 11:23 pm Title: Chapter 1
Looks great, Pumpkin! Oh, and I forgot to mention that I really like how your Pam isn't suddenly a great artist overnight after hearing Gil's comments. These things take time and she's still finding her way.
Date: March 31, 2007 09:23 pm Title: Chapter 1
I really like how Jim and Pam interact (or don't) when she opens the door, and how all of that unfolds. I love how "a third of the office males" show up at Jim's place. That's a really cool (and unique in the post-Cocktails fanfic so far) way to have Jim warned, and to have Roy thwarted.
The analogy is nice, but it doesn't work so well for me, because I'm anxious to get to... what happened? what happened? So, for more patient people... analogy good. For Too Late Kev... speed through analogy, get to action/closure!!!
And, of course, I always love a positive JAMmy ending! I'm hoping for one of those by the end of the season. I'm praying to Thor himself.
Good job!