10 [Report This]Date: September 06, 2008 12:40 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was very well written and real. I've always felt a bit bad for Karen; it was never her fault that Jim put her between himself and Pam. I also think that your story depicts a real relationship and a real man. We all know Jim doesn't have the best track record with women that aren't Pam. I think this certainly is a last attempt by both of them to make it work, although I'm sure Jim knows deep down that he shouldn't be there with her.
10 [Report This]Date: September 14, 2007 11:41 pm Title: Chapter 1
Great great story. I've been in many a "discussion" about the degree that Karen loves Jim, and from the looks of this story, I think I've found a kindred spirit. Karen's a smart chick. Her brain is telling her that Jim's a selfish, undeserving user, but she can't pull away. What's that little four letter word that makes smart, together women like Karen do dumb things like give Jim chance after chance after chance? Thank you for believing that she's capable of loving in such a real, human, believable way, and therefore not trivializing the broken heart she got handed.
10 [Report This]Date: July 01, 2007 12:45 am Title: Chapter 1
I really like this. I like your Karen. She seems like a real person and not a caricature. It all seems very real. Jim as a real guy. Them as a real couple. Real sex. Real not -feeling -sexy -while -spitting -out -toothpaste.
I like the emotional atmosphere you created and sustained very well throughout the piece. I like the disconnect between Jim and Karen. It isn't a blaring "they are TOTALLY wrong for each other," but a disconnect that happens with all couples.
I keep reading the last bit, trying to figure out if the feeling of the "goodbye kiss" is all in Karen's head and wondering, if not, how and why Jim would have expressed that "goodbye" then.
Well done.
8 [Report This]Date: May 26, 2007 07:35 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow, that was hot. Poor Karen. She should have bailed when she heard the "yes" many months ago.
10 [Report This]Date: May 20, 2007 01:56 pm Title: Chapter 1
You write the hottest stuff. You actually made me feel bad for Karen. And as a member of Team Pam, it hurt my heart to read Jim so persistently seducing Karen. I mean that as a compliment to your writing--I couldn't not read it once I started.
Date: May 20, 2007 01:26 pm Title: Chapter 1
she cannot shake the feeling that it’s more of a goodbye kiss than anything else. Because it was. Nice fic but I agree with Karen as it was a goodbye.
Date: May 20, 2007 11:15 am Title: Chapter 1
Interesting. I don't really like to think of Jim as being sort of pushy, like he is here. But then again, Karen's not really making herself very clear that she really isn't that interested right now, and why.
Kinda sad. It makes me feel sad for Karen, but also like "you see that elephant in the room, if you're not going to talk about it right now, then don't let it get in your way"!
Your Karen sees the writing on the wall. Sad, waiting-for-the-shoe-to-drop Karen.