1 [Report This]Date: October 01, 2018 04:50 pm Title: a beginning and an end
This was beautiful and so realistic. I’m a shipper at heart so I love that they found their way back to each other. But man, the journey of Pam’s is a raw, quiet, painful one. You really did a wonderful job with this.
Date: June 08, 2007 11:33 am Title: a beginning and an end
Oh! Thank you for making it all right. I may still cry, but... Oh, man. This is so beautiful - amazing language and images and, just, everything... Here's one example: The minutes have fallen with the dust back to the place they belong
Date: June 06, 2007 09:51 am Title: a beginning and an end
WOW. This feels very Pam- there's this sort of undefinable sense of sadness about her, and you've captured it so well. And thye ending- how he just simply takes her back- is so sweet and so /Jim/. Excellent story.
Date: June 01, 2007 05:37 am Title: a beginning and an end
I love how quiet this is and how full of raw emotion without being over-written. I also love how Pam finally realizes that loving/being with Jim isn't keeping her from herself - just rings really true for her character to need to sort that out. And Jim's sad resignation, and loving her in spite of herself, comes through so palpably. The end, where he takes her back so simply, but so completely, is just a perfect moment. The sleep metaphor is lovely - as if when she wakes up, she's literally and figuratively ready the start again. Just beautifully written.
Author's Response:
Wow. This definately made my day and I'm really really glad you enjoyed this. Thank you.
Date: May 31, 2007 10:19 pm Title: a beginning and an end
Wow. My heart was up in my throat for most of that; it was very sad but powerful and moving as well. And this "She starts to think that she was settling with herself, not him, and that's why she was so unhappy. She just got lost in the idea of him always knowing who she'd be, that she forgot how to make sense of herself." is really wonderful.
I love that she went back to him and that she just took a little nap to wait for him. The last couple lines about how Jim reacts are just beautiful.
Author's Response: I was hung up on how Pam would go back to him, but I just felt like Jim would know and just leave his door open for her. Thank you for your review!
Date: May 31, 2007 07:49 pm Title: a beginning and an end
I read this based strictly on the title. It's part of my most favorite verse on that whole album.
This hurts to read in the best way. And I love this so much: She starts to think that she was settling with herself, not him, and that's why she was so unhappy. She just got lost in the idea of him always knowing who she'd be, that she forgot how to make sense of herself.
Such perfect insight and great characterization.
I'm favorting this.
Author's Response: I was really worried that this would seem completely un-Pam, but it's good to know that it works. I agree about the lyrics- that is easily my favorite verse on the whole album. Thanks for reviewing!
Date: May 31, 2007 06:50 pm Title: a beginning and an end
Wow, beautiful. There is a haunting simplicity about the way you wrote this. I love the way you handle Pam's disatisfaction, as well as her not wanting to admit she'd made a mistake. I've certainly been there. For such a sad story, the happy ending still fits. Great job.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm kind of in Pam's place now, so I just needed to get it on paper before I completely forgot what it felt like to be unhappy with someone.