8 [Report This]Date: June 11, 2007 11:45 pm Title: Chapter 6
interesting scene with Angela. Liked the humour in this chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing. I'm glad you like the Angela bit. I've always had a little trouble with her voice. ml
Date: June 09, 2007 10:42 am Title: Chapter 5
"And just as you have planted your seed in the ground, I'm going to plant my seed in you." Andy, get in the coffin! HA! I love that Jim is conspiring with Dwight to get Andy - from the hospital. Priceless.
Author's Response: To quote a famous and much beloved reviewer "EWW." It was creepy enough with Ryan. I hadn't really thought what was going to happen on the beet farm, but I'm going to have a lot of trouble getting that out of my head. Thanks for reviewing. I was a little worried about having Jim do things from the hospital, but I figured it would be a nice diversion for him. Glad you liked it.
Date: June 09, 2007 10:10 am Title: Chapter 5
I Love LOVE LOVE this. i can't wait for more.
Author's Response: Thanks for sticking with the story and for the very nice review. Will try to write more soon - ml
Date: June 07, 2007 05:05 pm Title: Chapter 4
So they teach you to write over at NC State? Totally kidding. :-)
Great Chapter! I love that Pam wants him to understand she decided all this best she knew. AND I love how she explains to him that she made such a scene. You've really done well with Michael. And you're so right, you know Michael would take her clothes off, to make her more comfortable. funny thing, I believe his motives would be honestly pure. Keep it coming.
Author's Response:
In the interest of accuracy, they didn't teach me to write at NC State. My older sister, the future Carolina grad, taught me so I would quit bugging her to read my comic books aloud. It's a secret shame.
Glad you liked the last bit. I thought Michael probably saw this in an old movie and thought it was the thing to do. It probably wasn't until he got her blouse off that he might have wondered if this was the best idea, and by then he was already committed (and should be).
Date: June 05, 2007 06:43 am Title: Chapter 4
HA! I like the comic relief at the end of this v. heavy chapter. This is a really compelling story -- looking forward to more.
Author's Response: glad you enjoyed it. I hope you like the next bit
Date: June 04, 2007 09:46 pm Title: Chapter 4
malcom, you had me until Pam's blouse and skirt had been removed. Ewww! Plus, no matter how tired she was, unless she were drugged, she'd pretty much wake up when someone's taking off her clothes. Double Ewww.
I love the rest of it! These lines are fantastic: I want to be with you, whether it's for two days or fifty years. So get over yourself and tell me you love me or I'm calling a cab.
How is it that you've just appeared on the scene, and your so prolific? Were you writing elsewhere? Are there more malcom lake fics somewhere waiting for me to read them? (Please add 'Question:' in front of all those to be in keeping with the spirit of The Office. Thanks.)
Anyway, great job!
Author's Response:
I expected some folks would think the Michael bit was over the top (no pun intended). Sometimes you just write something that strikes you as funny and you can't resist throwing it in. Especially for me, since I have a job and most of my writing is done late at night.
I've got some Buffy stories over at fanfiction.net. My favorite is a short one called the sisters, but my best reviews are for a long story called higher education and abandoned buildings.
10 [Report This]Date: June 03, 2007 08:03 pm Title: Chapter 3
I just got back from a wedding, and this is almost as romantic as anything I heard this weekend.
(I have to say "almost" because it was my little brother's wedding. But this gives him real competition. Does that mean I'm a bad person? Yes, probably. Does it mean you're a good writer? Yes, absolutely.)
I love the serious stuff, the angst and the romance. But I also love how you work understated humor in, like so: "Pam knew that her presence in the warehouse would probably not be a good thing. It would mean boys showing off and pushing themselves. It would also mean sweaty Jim in shorts and a t-shirt. She brought her lunch." I look forward to the next chapter!
Author's Response: Glad you like the story since I came up with it while writing a response to one of your reviews. Hope you like the next bit
8 [Report This]Date: June 03, 2007 12:06 pm Title: Chapter 3
Thanks Malcolm. Seeing a new chapter of Heart of the Matter made my day. Once again, well written and leaves me wanting more.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing, glad you like how the story is going
Date: June 02, 2007 09:57 pm Title: Chapter 3
This story is really amazing. Heart wrenching? Yes. But really lovely. I enjoy the way you've brought the office together here, and I think your background story for Jim is really believable. Great work, but update soon!
Author's Response: Thanks for taking the time to review a story by an NC State grad. Hope you like the next bits
Date: June 02, 2007 08:14 pm Title: Chapter 3
I'm relieved that Jim should probably be okay, and that he and Karen weren't dating!! Is it terrible that both of those things are almost equally important to me?
I LOVE the Angela hug paragraph. Gorgeous.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing. Angela is always fun to write.
Date: June 02, 2007 06:45 am Title: Chapter 2
Oooh. Very cool AU. I can totoally envision this happening. It seems a very plausible reason for Jim to end up at Dunder-Mifflin. And since JK played college ball, it totally fits.
To say "I can't wait for more" would be an understatement. More, please!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I'm glad you think it works as a story. I mean I can see how most of those guys could have ended up in the paper sellin' biz, but Jim just seems out of place. Hope you like the next bits
Date: June 01, 2007 11:29 pm Title: Chapter 2
Can't wait to see what happens next. I love how Jim's mom already loves Pam. Great job.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing. But really, who wouldn't be smitten with Pam? Can you imagine how Jim must have described her to his mom all these years? Maybe I should put some of that in.
9 [Report This]Date: June 01, 2007 09:58 pm Title: Chapter 2
I'm hooked. Really like this story a lot and look forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing. The encouragement really helps
Date: June 01, 2007 09:19 pm Title: Chapter 2
This is just so good. I love how you've given this backstory to why Jim ended up at Dunder Mifflin, and how fate sort of intervened to change how things went at The Merger.
My one little nitpick is that I think Jim's Dad is alive; at Safety Training, he said "Um, might even bring my parents tomorrow, to the matinee."
I'm looking forward to what happens next.
Author's Response: Still alive, huh? Sorry I missed that. I guess my AU just became a little more A. Thanks for reviewing and pointing that out. I'm really interested in getting better at this, so any comments I get are really valuable.
Date: June 01, 2007 09:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow! Excellent!
Date: June 01, 2007 08:25 pm Title: Chapter 2
I love this, great twist
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing!
Date: June 01, 2007 08:09 pm Title: Chapter 2
woo hoo as a future Temple alum i have to say yay to the shout out, this is interesting...def a neat concept, but you may want to be a little careful with Larissa, she seems a little like a Mary Sue, but maybe you'll fix that in the next few chapters can't wait to read more....
Author's Response: Thanks for the constructive criticism! I hope the next chapter helps make the character more believable.
Date: June 01, 2007 07:53 pm Title: Chapter 2
OMG!! Keep it coming!
Author's Response:
Hope you like how the story goes. Thanks for reviewing.
9 [Report This]Date: June 01, 2007 09:45 am Title: Chapter 1
Gripping - can't wait for the rest of the story.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing. I'm glad you liked this bit and hope the rest of the story doesn't disappoint.
Date: June 01, 2007 03:22 am Title: Chapter 1
Wow. Did NOT see that happening, but it makes since. More please :)
Author's Response: I know the tone is different from the show, but I'm trying to stay true to the characters. Thanks for reviewing.
9 [Report This]Date: June 01, 2007 12:41 am Title: Chapter 1
Oooooh man. Seriously. Can't wait to see where this goes
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing. Still not sure about how this will end, so I'm kind of curious about the destination too. It won't all be so dramatic, though.
Date: May 31, 2007 11:51 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oooohh. I want more please.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing!