10 [Report This]Date: May 11, 2007 05:34 pm Title: On the Booze Cruise
Great story. You should write more!
8 [Report This]Date: July 12, 2006 08:48 pm Title: June 10th
I loved the format in which you chose to write these 5 chapters, and the way they are linked through progression.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I'm glad you liked it!
10 [Report This]Date: July 11, 2006 01:14 pm Title: June 10th
That was fantastic!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, you guys are so nice!
Date: July 11, 2006 01:08 pm Title: On the Booze Cruise
Nice job! I liked the poem format too. I liked that Pam is happy, but discontent and trying to make herself feel better about that.
Author's Response: Thanks Pixel! By the way, I LOVE Push. She sees options in his eyes is one of my favorite lines ever.
10 [Report This]Date: July 11, 2006 10:18 am Title: June 10th
This was awsome. What an unique way of writing - you said so much with few words and I loved the repeated "I am engaged to Roy." You definitely have talent and can't wait to read more from you. This is one of my all time favorites!
Author's Response: Thanks! The repeated I am engaged to Roy actually inspired the whole story. I woke up one morning and heard Pam's voice in my head saying "I am engaged to Roy.", and I said to her (in my head) "Yeah, you just keep telling yourself that honey." Then, I thought: Man, I bet she has to remind herself of that alot when she's around Jim to keep from jumping him! Ha! The story consumed me from that point. I was literally on the treadmill at the gym, pen and paper in hand, writing like a fiend and had to get off and get on a bike so I wouldn't injure myself.
Date: July 11, 2006 08:55 am Title: You Might As Well Go All In - It's Casino Night
Had to say I loved the part about Jim's lips reaching her before the rest of him does. Lovely observation. It's like he was so impatient he couldn't wait for the rest of him to catch up.
Author's Response: To me it seemed like he had no control over himself at that point, as they say: "The heart wants what it wants"
Date: July 11, 2006 08:54 am Title: June 10th
I can't believe this is your first fic! I loved the simplicity of it and the build-up to "I was engaged to Roy."
Author's Response: Thanks eagle! As I was writning the repeated I am engaged to Roy, I kept thinking "Not anymore because June 10th has come and gone and I know you didn't get married!" Thus, June 10th was born. I didn't really have an ending planned when I started.
Date: July 11, 2006 07:10 am Title: June 10th
Really nice and I beg to differ. I'm pretty sure you are a writer.
Author's Response: Wow. Coming from you that is the absolute best compliment! Seriously. Wow. Thank You. I love everything you have ever written about these guys.
10 [Report This]Date: July 11, 2006 12:52 am Title: June 10th
That was really powerful, justkaren! I was almost afraid to click on June 10th!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. It was hard to write June 10th because we obviously haven't seen June 10th, it was hard to write the last "I can't" (this time directed at Roy) without totally giving away who she was talking to. I didn't want to use any names in the story except "Roy", so hence the abundance of He, She, We, etc.
9 [Report This]Date: July 11, 2006 12:27 am Title: Michael's Birthday Was a Good Day
Love this line: "I wonder if he can tell I already knew."
Author's Response: You know she knows what he smells like. ;)
10 [Report This]Date: July 11, 2006 12:25 am Title: The Trouble with Boys and Girls
Oh, yow. "He says what's the point?" Rough. Nice piece.
Author's Response: I go back and forth on whether Roy is mean or just kind of a doofus.
9 [Report This]Date: July 11, 2006 12:22 am Title: On the Booze Cruise
This is great- nice to hear Pam's POV on Booze Cruise
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review. I am sitting here with butterflies hoping I did Pam any justice and that you guys like it.