7 [Report This]Date: February 27, 2009 08:19 pm Title: Chapter 2
Just found this in the archive tonight and settled in for a trip down memory lane. This was very well written, I liked that the break-up was relatively civil, and that the first date seemed very realistic. And I agree with Jim, I love May, too!
10 [Report This]Date: September 21, 2007 07:53 am Title: Chapter 1
What a perfect first-date--so realistic and true.
8 [Report This]Date: September 20, 2007 10:50 pm Title: Chapter 2
What's not to love about May? Especially when you're in love and he/she loves you back. Looking forward to a hot summer.
9 [Report This]Date: September 20, 2007 09:11 pm Title: Chapter 2
Absolutely love the final three sentences! This is really nicely done.
10 [Report This]Date: September 20, 2007 09:04 pm Title: Chapter 2
Wow. I loved this from beginning to end. The right pitch, true to form and sweet as honey. Thanks.
8 [Report This]Date: September 20, 2007 08:29 pm Title: Chapter 2
This is a lovely take on that first date. I'm crazy about the last few paragraphs, and I think you really hit your stride in the middle of this chapter. I can't wait for more! --CH
Date: September 20, 2007 08:25 pm Title: Chapter 2
This chapter was really nice. I think it's more true to the characters than the stories where Jim and Pam go straight to the sex part the day of the interview. I like the descriptions and the character interaction. The paragraph formatting makes it a little hard to read, but the story is so worth the effort.
Date: August 22, 2007 10:38 am Title: Chapter 1
this is FLAWLESS - which i think is hard to accomplish. i love the bit in the restaurant, and the "well i wish you would." don't we all do that? and more importantly, can't we see jim doing that? i am just over the moon about this story - v. well done.
Date: August 17, 2007 07:02 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is just fantastic. You really have a handle on Jim in this and I love love LOVED this:
"Tell me something, Jim," she began, "What's she got that I don't?"
It was a good question. Jim wanted to have an answer, a laundry list of reasons why he and Pam were a better fit. That she was warm and welcoming, funny, laughed at his jokes, joined him in pranks against Dwight and Michael, encouraged him to reach beyond himself, challenged him to not settle, thought he was brilliant, wanted the best for him. All of these things were true about Pam, but they seemed to be after the fact. In certain ways and certain contexts, they were just as true about Karen. What it came to was that he loved Pam, because she was Pam. And he was Jim. It was as simple and uncomplicated as it was in junior high, when you carved your initials into the trunk of a tree. JH hearts PB. Like sodium and chlorine, they simply came together in such a way that something new and wonderful was the result. Jim rejected the idea of soulmates, one person for one another, and all that garbage, but this was how the universe had chosen to organize itself. Sodium and chlorine. Jim and Pam. No wonder they called it "chemistry."
Fantastic!!!!!
Date: August 17, 2007 07:12 am Title: Chapter 1
This was really good. I love stories about what happened in The Job and afterwards.
Date: July 27, 2007 02:21 pm Title: Chapter 1
I love the foreshadowing with Ryan in this. (Can't wait to see how that plays out on the show!)
If she were going to throw the drink in his face based on what he was about to tell her, he’d prefer it to be cold. Ha -- I love how Jim has figured out that he's in for it with Karen.
"I should have broken up with you a long time ago." The whole breakup scene is very plausible. I hope Karen is allowed to depart with this much dignity.
Ken, the director, and Randall, the cameraman. -- Nice shout-outs ;o)
10 [Report This]Date: July 27, 2007 07:11 am Title: Chapter 1
I just got chills. Loved it. I wish you'd continue...
Date: July 26, 2007 08:08 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is GREAT! I love the conversation between Jim & Karen. I love that he pours his heart out to a waitress at a diner. Just love it all. Really good interior monologue.
Date: July 26, 2007 08:06 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh, this is one of those stories that makes me feel like: "Damn, I wish I had written this." My favorite parts include: "Like sodium and chlorine, they simply came together in such a way that something new and wonderful was the result" and " It was in the eyes those brides as they walked down the aisle towards the men who were about to become their husbands. Now, Pam was looking at him with that same mixture of hope, happiness, and possibility." These lines are terrific, because they describe things we're all familiar with, but in fresh and interesting ways. Well done!