Date: October 12, 2007 06:57 pm Title: Partners in Crime
Ooh, I love this! I was initially skeptical about Jim's monologues at the beginning and end of each chapter, but they're really in character and well-developed. And I like these glimpses into pre-series Jim and Pam. I can't wait for more!
Author's Response: I'm glad you gave it a shot. That initial monologue was pretty much the first thing I came up with way back when I first started writing this story months ago, so even though I considered cutting it, I knew that I wouldn't be able to without completely altering the story as it was first conceived. Well, not to disappoint, but that was actually the last of the pre-series Jam. But stay with me, there's more fun stuff on the way. Stuff you'd never see on camera because it's just too fluffy!
Date: October 12, 2007 12:58 pm Title: Partners in Crime
My favorite is Jim faking depression to get away from work. As long as he doesn't go to the roof and jump on a blow-up castle, right? ;)
Author's Response:
Luckily Jim is far too depressed to make it up that ladder. I think he only has the strength to sit in a darkened movie theatre with his best friend for a few hours. Oh wait, he's also strong enough to buy her popcorn so they can keep that hand-brushing thing going even after the soda runs out.
Thanks for the review, Kev!
Date: October 12, 2007 12:54 pm Title: Jungle Fever
Love: "Michael, I am not paying for alcohol again." Angela interjected; the birth of the party planning committee; and how you're making the grape soda thing really work here. Nice job!
Author's Response: Thanks, Kev! I'm really glad you liked this chapter. I think it was my favorite one to write. Okay, no, that's not true, but it was my favorite that's been posted. I think the last chapter is still my favorite, but this one's good too!
Date: October 12, 2007 10:57 am Title: Chez Miff
This line: "all he knew was that clearly it was going to take more than just some polite chit-chat to cheer her up" is perfectly Jim and Pam.
I love Chez Miff - awesome.
Does the last line mean the scene from the Merger? (Bad memories!)
Nice job. I didn't find any errors... I'll be reading in stages, btw. ;)
Author's Response: Isn't it great that they were already them even when they'd only just met? So perfect for each other. At least, they are in this story. Huh. Maybe someone should write a story where they don't hit it off. But they'd still have to go to Cugino's hm...this is intriguing...
Date: October 12, 2007 09:25 am Title: Partners in Crime
I love this... obviously.
GS
xxx
Author's Response: Awesome! I hereby dedicate the next chapter to you. Oh, except that it happens to be a really angsty one. How about chapter 5, you'll like that one a lot better. Unless you're really into the angst, in which case you're welcome to chapter 4. Okay, how about the next two chapters. That way you can take your pick! Thanks for the review! ;)