Date: January 28, 2008 06:07 pm Title: Circling The Sand
Oh, Miss Pam, you are about to start feeling your feelings. Once you start being honest with yourself, who might be next?
P.S. The angst is killing me. Nicely done.
Author's Response: As always, lisa..thanks so much. It's dangerous when we start feeling our feelings...especially for these two. Glad you are continuing to like this. Thanks again!
Date: January 28, 2008 02:28 pm Title: Circling The Sand
I love the alternate universe you are painting here. Things are familiar, like an echo, but I love that I'm not sure where you are going to go next.
Looking forward to Jim!
Author's Response: Thanks for your review. I really do love playing around with timelines and perspectives. I'm glad your enjoying it. I'm working on Jim's thoughts now :)
Date: January 24, 2008 08:58 pm Title: Patrick Beesly's Inbox
I love the style of this story. It's like looking at a scrapbook of JAM memories, with a slight twist.
Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: That's exactly what I was going for, so thanks very much!
Date: January 24, 2008 07:30 pm Title: Patrick Beesly's Inbox
OK, kind of loving Patrick now :) And Libby, too! And I love Pam admitting that she's had a few fantasies, whether she realizes the full significance of that yet or not.
Author's Response: I'm so glad you like the "original" characters. I always worry about inserting people like that. Thanks so much for your review!
Date: January 24, 2008 08:30 am Title: Patrick Beesly's Inbox
Booze cruise, yay!
I think there are some things about Pam's defense that actually incriminate her feelings for Jim, and I like that. I love the turn you've taken here--I'll be honest, I was a little weary the last few chapters, but this one was awesome.
Author's Response: So glad you liked this chapter! I'm excited to work through the Booze Cruise from a different persepective. Thanks so much for the review.
Date: January 23, 2008 07:31 pm Title: Blog Alert! Who IS That Hussy???
I love how much you are into this story, it rocks. I love the site and the pics, the show stuff, really, it's almost like they are real. Your story is bringing them to life, and not in a completly creepy way. Great job, update soon please!
Author's Response: Wow. Thanks so much for your kind words. I appreciate your review. I'm working on an update now, so it shouldn't be too much longer.
Date: January 23, 2008 06:06 am Title: Blog Alert! Who IS That Hussy???
This is so clever! Love it!
Author's Response: Thanks! I really appreciate it!
Date: January 22, 2008 05:56 pm Title: The Color Of The Sky
I'm probably in the minority, but I really like Libby ;) I think it's cool that she admitted that she'd seen the show and was going into the relationship with eyes wide open.
I hope Pam wakes up to WHY she's feeling like she is and what she needs to do about it. Looking forward to the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for your review. I like Libby too. I think that if the documentary were real, these characters would have to deal with the fallout. What girl would date Ryan? Why wouldn't the police be after Creed? What sensible boss would hire Jim?
Pam will wake up. It will just take her a little time. Thanks so much for your review.
Date: January 22, 2008 05:33 pm Title: The Color Of The Sky
Excellent chapter. I love Libby. It's just what Pam and Jim need to kick things into gear.
I especially love how you are mirroring S3 Jim here. He totally went on automatic pilot in S3 to mask his pain and it's great to see his thought processes here. Nice work.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review. I'm so glad that my intent to mirror S3 is coming through. I'm a firm believer that they needed to go through what they did in S3...the separation, the personal growth, dealing with Karen to get to where they needed to be. I'm just trying to get them to do that sooner. Thanks again!
Date: January 22, 2008 05:25 pm Title: The Color Of The Sky
I love libby.... this is weird... haha.
Author's Response: I like her too. I'm having conflicting feelings about what I need to do in this story. Thanks again for your review.
Date: January 19, 2008 09:50 pm Title: A Struggle Neither Wins
wow. I'm almost rooting for Roy... incredible!
Author's Response: I think that's the beauty of the Roy character (and a tribute to how David D. played him). You want too root for him...just not for him to be with Pam.
Author's Response: I think that's the beauty of the Roy character (and a tribute to how David D. played him). You want too root for him...just not for him to be with Pam.
Date: January 19, 2008 09:29 am Title: A Struggle Neither Wins
Hmm... sorry I'm just now reviewing--you've been amazing about writing chapters and my life has been so hectic I've sucked about reviewing them. So, let's see.
I'm not sure if I liked this chapter or not. I don't really know how Roy was "spying" on Pam... I understand why he would read/post on the message boards, but I don't see it as spying at all. And honestly, I don't think their messages did a great job describing why everyone loves Jim and seemingly hates Roy (I don't; I just think he was wrong for her)... There weren't many concrete examples, if that makes sense. I mean, why would Roy believe all of those things if there isn't a specific time mentioned (other than the one in SandyDee's, I didn't see any). Just a thought.
I think the final two lines were pretty in character. I've had a hard time judging whether or not I think your story is recently, so that was good.
Also, and this is just a nitpick but it's my pet peeve, you said, "Trojan 15, whoever that was, seemed to be one of his biggest supporters and they were right." < In that sentence, it should be he or she was right. They is plural (regardless if you know the gender of the subject or not) and should never be used singularly.
Overall, not my favorite chapter, but I'm anxious to see where you go with it!
Author's Response:
Hey AGrace-- Thanks so much for your review! I appreciate your feedback and rely on reviews like this to help me keep on track. I think what I was going for here (and maybe wasn't successful at) was how black and white and simple Roy sees things. He "spys" on Pam by checking the site to make sure there hasn't been any "funny business" with Jim. He's not really looking for anything concrete...just to check up on Pam. That seems like the border-line jealous, posessive boyfriend thing Roy would try to do.
Thanks, also, for the grammar reminder, but my intent was to try to sound like i was in Roy's head. I need to work on that more.
Thanks again, and I appreciate you interacting over on the blog!
Date: January 19, 2008 08:20 am Title: A Struggle Neither Wins
Roy! You wanker!
Interesting take on the message board -- Pam & Roy both trying to defend Roy. Pointlessly, I might add.
Author's Response: I LOL'd at you calling Roy a wanker. I'm working on getting to a place where Pam realizes how pointless things have been. Thanks, as always, for your review.
10 [Report This]Date: January 19, 2008 01:05 am Title: A Struggle Neither Wins
Good storyline (gave it a 10), but Roy kills me. I seriously hate that piece of shit, and I hope that something JAM-like comes of the next couple of chapters. This is really good building up, but who cares about Roy and the jerk Pam set Jim up with? NO ONE.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review. Trust me, nobody wants the JAM more than I do. I felt, though, like Roy was a part of this story. I really do appreciate your feedback.
8 [Report This]Date: January 19, 2008 12:05 am Title: And Our Sky Was Unfolding
*looks around* is there jam insurance on this piece =P?
love the new part and you've managed to make me feel split about roy! can't wait for the new part.
Author's Response: I think there is a healthy amount of Jam insurance. They may have to pay their deductibles, though. Thanks so much for your review and I hope you continue to enjoy the story.
Date: January 18, 2008 10:24 pm Title: A Struggle Neither Wins
OH BURN!!! Roy plays dirty....so not cool :) Question: Does Jim have a screen name on the website; I forget.
Author's Response:
Roy is just doing what he can to survive. I almost feel sorry for him. Jim doesn't have a screen name. Yet. :)
Date: January 18, 2008 04:44 pm Title: Marissa Updates Her Blog
This story is so creative and fun!
I continue to follow your every word.
Author's Response: Awwwww....thanks so much Beeswax!
Date: January 17, 2008 02:22 pm Title: If things were going to end
"He knew he couldn’t look over at her anymore…at least not the way he used to. Link after link on that god-damned website had shown him what a desperate, pathetic loser he had been. Mooning after an engaged woman…strutting his goofy smiles and cocked eyebrows like a peacock in mating season…essentially telling the cameraman that he was in love with Pam…what had he been thinking?"
Poor, poor Jim. My heart breaks for him here. Having to calculate the acceptable number of visits to reception to avoid anyone getting the wrong idea. And Pam offering to set him up - say it isn't so.
9 [Report This]Date: January 17, 2008 02:10 pm Title: Marissa Updates Her Blog
You are a genius to combine a blog written by "Marissa" within your story - what great fun. As was her friend who lip reads and saw Jim saying "unicorns". Although we know he said it, it's a riot that it's the only word they know he said!
Author's Response: Thanks. I'm glad you liked Marissa's blog. I'm working really hard to incorporate the experiences I've had in fan communities. I know there have been times when we've analyzed a word or phrase or lyric to death and then found out we were totally off base. Thanks for all of your great reviews. I'm so appreciative.
Date: January 17, 2008 02:06 pm Title: In the calling out to one another
"When that sort of thing happened, you couldn’t go back from that…you could never not know again."
Another awesome line. As was:
"Did he really think that she’d use this website as some sort of wakeup call and come running to him because 9 out of 10 fans preferred him to Roy?".
Date: January 17, 2008 01:56 pm Title: Put Aside What Was True or Untrue
"They had gone around in circles. He accused. She denied. He ranted. She soothed. This was the typical pattern for them. This was their dance…every move choreographed and practiced. The quickstep around the issues, the dramatic samba of pushing and pulling emotions, the tango of anger and passion…they had done it all before and would do it all again. She just wished, though, that she wasn’t always the one that had to lead."
Great job on their fight and the aftermath. And I loved Pams' reaction when she realized that Jim was in love with her:
"She found her thoughts swinging back and forth of a pendulum of extremes. Jim loved her. Jim couldn’t love her. Jim wanted her. Jim wanted girls like Katy. This was bad. This was good. It couldn’t be good."
Awesome chapter!!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I really do think there's a lot of back and forth in both Jim's and Pam's minds. He likes me. He's just my friend...and so on. If only they would have communicated! Ugh. Thanks again for your thoughtful review.
Date: January 17, 2008 01:43 pm Title: Marissa Updates Her Blog
Jim + Pam = LIARS! ARGGGH!
Marissa, you and I need to go to Scranton and smack some sense into those two.
Author's Response: So violent, Lisahoo! I'm with you, though. Lots of smacking needs to happen in Scranton! Thanks for reviewing.
Date: January 17, 2008 01:31 pm Title: I'd have fought the world for you
"It was as if Jim could see the light turn off inside of Pam and he wondered if it was that inner darkness that kept Roy’s wrongness for her hidden and obscured the promise of what could be."
What a beautiful line! I'm glad to be catching up with this story again. And I love that you've linked the blog to it. Very creative!
Author's Response: Thanks so very much for your reivew. I'm glad that you're enjoying it and I'm so happy you liked that line. I worked on that one for a while.
9 [Report This]Date: January 17, 2008 01:12 pm Title: Marissa Updates Her Blog
I hope she's hideous or a bitch or something.
Why do I feel like Marissa and I would get along REALLY well? We share the same thoughts!
Great little teaser, GITC! You know I'm always hungry for this story--keep the chapters coming! --CH
Author's Response: Even I hope she's a bitch or hideous or something and I already know what she's going to be like. I'll do my best to keep your hunger at bay. Thanks as always for your feedback and review.
Date: January 17, 2008 10:23 am Title: Marissa Updates Her Blog
unicorns! LOL
loving it.
Author's Response: Thanks!