Date: October 17, 2011 07:12 am Title: Chapter 1
I have been avoiding reading this fic because I think it would be very dark. Actually it's quite heart warming and you wrote nice Jim and Pam. Poor poor Toby, even he had a better holiday in Costa Rica in your fic rather than in the actual show. I think they need to give Toby love interest or something good this season.
Date: January 11, 2008 08:24 am Title: Chapter 1
This was good. I wish the show would focus a little more on Toby
8 [Report This]Date: December 03, 2007 03:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
I loved the conversation Jim had with Toby about "Kelly and Darryl". Great way to get to the heart of the matter while allowing Toby to keep what was left of his dignity.
10 [Report This]Date: December 01, 2007 07:58 am Title: Chapter 1
first of all i looooove this! there is so much that is perfect about this story. just the premise is great. toby-centric while really pulling in the whole cast. funny hat monday was amazing, including the whole bit about "weeding out the crazies." which just seems like the perfect michael scott phrase. i loved toby's "You don't see anything funny about you telling me to go after something I want? You don't see anything wrong with that advice?" because i actually thought he was going to go after jim because mr. halpert is very much stuck in a place where he doesn't want to be. instead you threw the old curveball! jim talking about kelly/darryl. that worked so, so well. it was really charming, and i loved that you brought back the dating contract thing. brilliant.
"Toby's the black fella who sits in front?" Creed asked. "You tell him that Creed didn?t see nothing, Creed didn't hear nothing." was just just magic. i'm sorry, am i gushing? pam's conversation with meredith and phyllis was just perfect, in character, and all around amazing.
Kelly stared at her phone. She had no idea how long Toby was going to be gone. Maybe she should call Ryan again and ask him. i won't lie, i actually laughed out loud and clapped my hands. anyway, i could go on and on, and i probably could, but i love this. you wrote a great, funny, charming piece.
Date: November 30, 2007 02:52 am Title: Chapter 1
I enjoyed reading this! Kelly was especially funny, and spot on in all of her interactions. Good job!
Date: November 29, 2007 12:40 pm Title: Chapter 1
I very much liked this Toby and this Jim. I was fully prepared for this to go to a really dark place, but I think it was much more real and touching to have such a hopeful ending. Good read.
Date: November 29, 2007 09:59 am Title: Chapter 1
Aww -- now I am dying to see what the arc is for Toby this season -- how his Pam-crush will play out, do they get to sign the disclosure forms, what is Michael's problem anyway. Nicely done and well thought out, Steph.
10 [Report This]Date: November 29, 2007 09:28 am Title: Chapter 1
that was really enjoyable, especially the jim/toby moment back in the annex. :-) Looking forward to seeing more by you.
Date: November 29, 2007 07:27 am Title: Chapter 1
This was a very entertaining story -- you really did a nice job with all the characters. Michael was perfectly (in character) mean to Toby, and it's no wonder it caused the poor guy to crack! I also enjoy how you worked in all the staff, like Meredith's advice, and Bob Vance's huge holiday dinner, and how Andy can kept secrets better than Dwight (haha). The little Dwight bit at the end "Get your own, Jim!" made me laugh, too. Nice work.
10 [Report This]Date: November 29, 2007 05:45 am Title: Chapter 1
This was such a pleasure to read, Steph. I really enjoyed it. The voices were so true to character. It was like I was watching an actual episode. Thanks for the Thursday fix : )
Date: November 29, 2007 05:34 am Title: Chapter 1
Really good story! You wrote all the characters very true to themselves, and I think it's hard to write a good, believable Michael, but you did a great job. I love that you tied in Costa Rica, and the relationship forms, and all these little bits from various episodes. Is this your first story? Very nice debut!
9 [Report This]Date: November 29, 2007 01:53 am Title: Chapter 1
nice work! it was a great insight into toby's mindset and how he could very well 'crack' at any moment.
Date: November 28, 2007 10:58 pm Title: Chapter 1
So nice, Steph! (/carbonalien?)
You've probably already seen that all your quotes have changed to question marks. Did you do an "insert from Word" when you formatted (if you were using Word?) I've never seen anything quite like that.
I especially liked the line about Ryan being in his "pissy little bitch mode," Kelly's slutty friend, and Meredith. You managed to get little bits of a number of characters in here! Good job.
Author's Response: Thank you! Yes my stupid computer was acting up and I just went back and changed everything by hand.rn