Date: February 19, 2008 06:13 pm Title: Spinning on that dizzy edge, I kissed her face and kissed her head
Aw! This chapter was so sweet! I'm so happy it was Pam that made the first move, most of the time it's all Jim. GREAT WORK!
I also love The Cures, "Just Like Heaven". It's one of my favorite songs, surprisingly. (And the movie with Reese Witherspoon and Mark Ruffalo is fantastic!)
Anyway, keep up the good work, I'm looking forward to what comes next!
8 [Report This]Date: February 19, 2008 05:35 pm Title: Spinning on that dizzy edge, I kissed her face and kissed her head
Wow. That was so amazingly and deliciously hot!!! So romantic, so sexy. And a wee bit humorous that he still had his shoes on! I'm so glad they've finally hooked up!
Date: February 19, 2008 05:33 pm Title: Spinning on that dizzy edge, I kissed her face and kissed her head
Sweet jeebus, 30%. I thought it was romantic, too.
I love how silly they still are together.
8 [Report This]Date: February 19, 2008 05:26 pm Title: I'm a young soul in this very strange world
Their IM's were cute, but Pam's drunk dialing was adorable! I loved that she was laying on her face at the beginning of the conversation.
8 [Report This]Date: February 19, 2008 05:20 pm Title: I can make your heart beat short
Jeez, Pam. Telling Jim he doesn't have to stop dating or stop having sex while he waits for her? What was it about watching Jim peel an orange that brought that out? (We're not orange fans here so I've never really watched someone peel an orange.)
And I loooved this line: "Somehow almost his is more physically agonizing than not a chance."
Date: February 19, 2008 04:42 pm Title: Spinning on that dizzy edge, I kissed her face and kissed her head
God, that was HOT!!!
Date: February 19, 2008 04:36 pm Title: Spinning on that dizzy edge, I kissed her face and kissed her head
I am speechless. Seriously - this is one of (possibly the) hottest Jim/Pam scenes I've ever read. And real, and full of heart and so, so true to the characters - precisely what I can imagine them feeling, then.
From the very first sentence, the build up was just perfect and the payoff was exquisite. I love his tentativeness and the fumbling and how liberating her sureness is and how overwhelmed/amazed he is that it's happening and just...well, everything. This proves one can be lushly vivid, yet succinct. (The smell of her hair..sigh.) See, I told you you'd rendered me incoherent.
Okay, off to rec this, nay, command that everyone read it. Few fics are worth a long wait between updates. This was.
Author's Response: Colette, I love you. Have I told you that lately? 'Cause I do. I don't even know how many times I read this review.
I retract (redact?) all previous statements in the "favorite review" fanfic discussion. This is my new favorite review. And it may just retain that title for all time. It was excellent timing, too -- I had posted and was approaching the 200 read count for the chapter with just a single review (from the lovely pam_beesly below), and of course that smutter's remorse phenomenon was out in spades.
And... if I may get a little sappy here, if not for you supporting my first efforts (my first fic ever was in September -- it feels like eons ago) and Sweetpea winning the Best Beta Dundie, I doubt I would've stuck with this whole fanfiction thing, let alone taken on a plot-based, running-the-gamut-of-human-emotions story of 25k+ words. (This is by far the longest thing I've ever written.) So thank you. Sniff. Okay, I'm done. :)
10 [Report This]Date: February 19, 2008 03:56 pm Title: Spinning on that dizzy edge, I kissed her face and kissed her head
I've missed this story!! :) That chapter was *amazing.*
Author's Response: Thanks so much, pam_beesly! Man, I've been spending a lot of time and effort on this thing, so I'm really glad you liked it. Thanks a lot for the review. :)
Date: February 05, 2008 08:16 am Title: I won't rest while you break my will
oh my god!!!!!!!!! I love drunk Pam too. That was such a good chapter!! I hope we see more drunkPam or drunkJim again :)
Author's Response: Haha, thanks nandance! Do you mean on the show, or in this story? Because I really want to see happy drunk Jim on the show (not sad Stamford drunk Jim). That would be excellent. And now that (cross your fingers!) the end of the strike is in sight, maybe one day we'll see it.... Thanks so much for the review :)
Date: February 03, 2008 09:57 pm Title: I'm a young soul in this very strange world
Ok this is the most awesome shifts of all the shifts! ::sigh:: You're right, there's nothing like drunk, Pam. And I loved the email format you had going here. Very distinct Jim and Pam voices there. i can't wait to see what happens once Jim gets to NYC! Whohoo!!!
Author's Response: Hee, thanks so much, LoveFool! Oh man, I'm glad you thought the Pam/Jim voices came through here, because I constantly found myself thinking "am I just writing like myself here?" And drunk Pam is beyond fun to write -- it's like you just take everything she must be thinking (and, well, maybe a little bit of what I'm thinking) and lay it out there, no filters. With extra rambling and incomplete sentences. So yeah, I'm working on their NYC weekend. I'm thinking they're going to have a good time. ;)
Date: February 03, 2008 04:59 pm Title: I'm a young soul in this very strange world
Aw, I love drunk Pam too! This chapter was so freaking cute.
Author's Response: Hee, thanks Semby! Isn't drunk Pam awesome? This chapter was so much more pleasant to write than some of the previous ones, let me just tell you. Really glad you liked it, and thanks for the comments!
10 [Report This]Date: February 02, 2008 12:52 pm Title: I'm a young soul in this very strange world
This has quickly become one of my fave stories - you sold me with this last chapter, brilliant. looking forward to an update.
Author's Response: Thanks so much, James! I've been working really hard on this story, so I'm glad you like it. And I'm working on the update -- hopefully it won't be too long now. Thanks a lot for the review!
Date: February 02, 2008 09:06 am Title: I'm a young soul in this very strange world
this was perfect ! great job :)
Author's Response: Thanks dani! This chapter was a lot of fun to write, so I'm glad you liked it :)
Date: February 02, 2008 06:49 am Title: I'm a young soul in this very strange world
Still loving how you're pacing the progression of this - so natural, and their voices are intact at every phase. This chapter was such a hoot - wonderful balance of funny/touching/little bit awkward. Love how taken aback, but tickled, Jim is by enebriated, verbalizing Pam (“I’m drunk dialing you!” Hee!) Also, I find the email format can often get really overworked, but it seems really fresh here - and makes sense because there's actual distance between them. What else? Hooray for the thought of Pam psyched about design and talking to Jim about it, and love thinking about her at MoMA (I once worked there, many moons ago.) Okay, I think I'm as excited about Jim going to NYC as he is. Seriously. (Btw, I have a little phone-sexish thing hanging around I was thinking of posting soon too - must be something in the cyber-water ;-)
Author's Response:
Ok, first I'm going to apologize for the super late response. I can only describe this last week as... epic. And ridiculous. And absurd. And a soap opera. Ok, so I don't lack words after all.
Secondly, is it MoMA without the 'the'? I noticed both you and Sharipep referred to it as such. I'm trying to wrap my brain around that, so far unsuccessfully (I've always used 'the' with SFMoMA, but probably inaccurately, as it turns out). Also, I seem to be learning a lot about your artistic background from writing this story, Colette! :) First knowledge of chartreuse, now a history of working at MoMA? The plot thickens. ;)
Anyway, on to fanfiction. I fully approve of any and all fanfics involving phone sex. Actually, I take that back. Any and all Jim/Pam phone sex. And I'm glad you liked this chapter, because I loved writing it (much less painful than some of the earlier ones, I'll tell you that much!). And I'm also excited about them going to NYC, though concerned about striking the appropriate romantic/goofy/cheesy balance that is the two of them. I really appreciate the comments about their intact voices, because running the emotional gamut while trying to keep them in character is tricky (as I'm sure you know!).
Thanks again, and now I'm off to catch up on my reviewing!
10 [Report This]Date: February 01, 2008 05:57 pm Title: I'm a young soul in this very strange world
This chapter was excellent! I hope you update soon! I'm dying to know what happens when he gets to NY!
Author's Response: Thanks I_Still_Believe! I'm working on it. I want this next chapter to be good! And I'm planning on them having fun in NYC. :)
Date: February 01, 2008 04:24 pm Title: I'm a young soul in this very strange world
This story is lovely. I can't wait to see where it goes next.
And this chapter really got to me. I love the email format (it always seems to work well in fic) and drunkPam! is always fun to read. And my "Jim" is currently away from home... in Australia (!) and I miss him terribly too.
Author's Response: Thanks so much, Grape Soda. Wow, Australia. That's... a distance. And a bad word in Office-land :) but I'm sure a lovely place to actually visit. I hope your "Jim" isn't going to be gone too long. Thanks a lot for the comments. :)
10 [Report This]Date: February 01, 2008 02:21 pm Title: I'm a young soul in this very strange world
I love drunk Pam too!!! This chapter was all kinds of awesomeness. Reminded me that I just joined MoMa and should probably get over one of these days to make that 75 bucks useful. Can't wait for Jim and Pam's weekend in the city!!! EEEEEEEEEE EEE E E E E E E E E E!!! Great job as always!!!
Author's Response: Thanks Shari! I know, isn't she awesome? I love Dundies Pam. And one of these days I'd love to go to MoMA too (I've only been to the San Francisco MoMA). I'm still fleshing out the "what are Jim and Pam going to do in New York?" details. We shall see....
Date: February 01, 2008 12:46 pm Title: I'm a young soul in this very strange world
love it...love drunk pam
Author's Response: Thanks dancer! I love drunk Pam too. The Dundies is one of my favorite episodes!
Date: February 01, 2008 11:33 am Title: I'm a young soul in this very strange world
I loved this chapter, especially Pam's success with the graphic internship. She'll have her own clients, how exciting! Fun phone call too. Drunk Pam is adorable, and I'm glad she explained to Jim why she can't just jump into a relationship with him yet. They're gonna have a blast in NY, can't wait! I'd love them to visit the city on the show someday.
Author's Response:
I know! I'm so excited now about the prospect of having our show back. Woo! Who knows what plotlines await us...
So yeah, I grappled with the "why the heck does Dunder Mifflin have a graphics internship?" question for awhile. I mean, it's not like they have a website. But I liked this idea because it seemed plausible, and she could work out of any of the offices. Thanks, EH!
10 [Report This]Date: February 01, 2008 11:10 am Title: I'm a young soul in this very strange world
You're drunk Pam is adorable. Excellent update. Don't be a stranger, ok? I missed this! I'm excited about New York. Squeeeeeeeeeeeee!
Author's Response: Thanks, Nan, I'm trying! I don't know how people churn out chapters every day or two. I've been chugging along at one every week and a half. I guess I just need to quit my day job! ;) It looks like I have a mostly quiet weekend ahead of me, so hopefully I'll get some good writing done. Thanks for the support!
Date: January 24, 2008 07:19 pm Title: I can make your heart beat short
Hee! I loved the awkward sex conversation. And I love how they're being so... natural about this. I mean, it is awkward, but they're still friendly rather than consumed with tension, which I think is very healthy and mature!
Author's Response: Thanks Semby! (belatedly -- sorry about that!) The thing about Jim and Pam is... they're just people. They're not naturally melodramatic. And they do manage to get along, even in the most awkward situations (phone call in The Initiation, anybody?). I'm glad you liked it, and thanks for the vote of confidence. :)
8 [Report This]Date: January 23, 2008 02:36 pm Title: I can make your heart beat short
ok, mind is exploding - that ending rocked, as does this series. there is something so gentle about the way this is written, so deft, it's just lovely. more please, and soon :)
Author's Response: Aw, shucks, Emily, thank you! Sorry about responding so late, but the next chapter is up. I'll get cracking on the next one this weekend!
Date: January 22, 2008 11:00 pm Title: I can make your heart beat short
I hate so much when a chapter hates me. lol. I hear ya. This was a lot of fun though. I like the shift that's starting to take place in terms of their interactions with one another...starting to be a bit more lighthearted. That exchange at the end about sex was CLASSIC.
Author's Response: I'm a total bum in my response time, here -- but thanks, LoveFool! Yes, SHIFT, haha! The title finally makes sense! The transition is tricky to write, but it's so much more fun to think of them happ(ier) than angsting left and right. And I'm glad you liked the sex conversation. I kept thinking to myself, "too much?" I did kind of wimp out on one line -- "thank you for worrying about my sexual needs" was originally going to be something stronger. Sweetpea knows....
10 [Report This]Date: January 22, 2008 11:32 am Title: I can make your heart beat short
well I think this chapter was a total gem. I thorougly enjoyed every second!!!! Great Job.
Author's Response: Thanks so much, Stablergirl, I'm so glad you liked it! I spent a ton of time on that chapter and it was just NOT agreeing with me for the longest time. Sorry for responding so late -- I got caught up in writing the next one. Thanks again!
Date: January 22, 2008 10:23 am Title: I can make your heart beat short
Oh sweet jeebus. That conversation was painful. And hysterical and totally believable in this AU.
Loved this: Somehow almost his is more physically agonizing than not a chance.
Author's Response: Haha, thanks lisa. I think. ;) Yeah, I figure this evolution has to make for some awkward/embarrassing moments at SOME point. Thanks for the review!