Date: February 19, 2008 08:26 am Title: Secrets told in the pictures on your skin
WOW. This chapter totally floored me. Pam's last line was SO perfect for that moment. I like the idea of Pam taking Jim to her elementary school to try to show him what she could be, so he could see what she was and what she could become. Really beautiful.
10 [Report This]Date: February 19, 2008 08:15 am Title: and I watch you leave
Petty--Guh. I'm loving this. The imagery of that final scene was lovely, and I could hear all of the words. Yours is one of those stories that puts me in an awkward situation: I like Roy, and he doesn't deserve what I think is inevitably going to happen with his wife, but at the same time, you've made curlicues of my morals by making me cheer on the dissolution of their marriage. I'm rooting for Jim and Pam, of course, but I'm interested to see where you'll take this and what roads will take you there. You're doing a wonderful job with this story, and I'm savoring every chapter!
Till next time.... ---CH
Author's Response: I'm so glad you're enjoying it!
10 [Report This]Date: February 18, 2008 03:22 pm Title: So I let you go
She knew she had to let him go.
--No, she doesn't. Let's not make this the theme of the story. Instead...
Yet he had a feeling if tomorrow, she woke up in his arms, he wouldn’t regret a day of all it took to get her there.
...let's make THAT the theme of the story!
I'm really enjoying this, Petty. Post your chapters as fast as you please--I'm lovin' every word. I'm not usually one to cheer on the dissolution of marriages, but in this case, I'm hoping Pam dumps dear Roy before they even eat their Thanksgiving turkey.
Can't wait for more! -CH
Author's Response: That is still the theme of the story! Don't you worry ;)
10 [Report This]Date: February 18, 2008 03:05 pm Title: So I let you go
ohhh... I love where this is going. I think you're a fantastic writer.. everyone's surprisingly in character.
I can't wait till the next update!
Author's Response: Thanks! Writing in character is the hardest for me, so unless I'm writing for Kelly, I try to keep it simple. Cause I could do Kelly alllll day long. (TWSS but I'm a girl so that's weird)
10 [Report This]Date: February 18, 2008 01:02 pm Title: So I let you go
Petty, such a GREAT chapter! Loved it, especially the banter between Mark and Jim. Loved this line: "She was a perfectly maddening blend of free spirit and Stepford wife." You really nailed it!
Date: February 18, 2008 12:57 pm Title: Secrets told in the pictures on your skin
Awesome update!!! Love it! I hope you post the other chapters soon, lol forget about staggering them, I'm dying here! :)
Date: February 18, 2008 12:35 pm Title: So I let you go
HURRY!!! Love it! Great job!
Date: February 18, 2008 10:42 am Title: and I hate the way I'm wearing all these lies
This story is really good. I've been avoiding reading it b/c I thought it would be just too damn depressing to have Pam married to Roy. And it is. I hope she ends up happily divorced!
In the meantime, while we're waiting for those papers, you're doing a fine job of building the tension.
Date: February 18, 2008 09:58 am Title: and I hate the way I'm wearing all these lies
Nice job. I'm favoriting this so I won't miss the updates. :)
Date: February 18, 2008 09:55 am Title: I see myself reflected in your eyes
When did Roy stop being enough? Good question. Probably when Jim became everything. ;)
Date: February 18, 2008 09:49 am Title: Hours fade into days that never end
"My plane"? Where is Jim taking a plane from, and who is 'us'? I'm intrigued.
Date: February 18, 2008 09:44 am Title: Secrets told in the pictures on your skin
Excellent job. I love how "Pam's wedding was nice" means so much. 'Nice.' Ouch.
10 [Report This]Date: February 18, 2008 09:12 am Title: and I hate the way I'm wearing all these lies
This is solid. Nice work.
10 [Report This]Date: February 17, 2008 10:35 pm Title: Secrets told in the pictures on your skin
I love this story! It would be interesting to get Jim's version of the whole pam picking them up at the airport thing.. either way, can't wait for more ;-)
Author's Response: Ask and you shall receive!
Date: February 17, 2008 06:58 pm Title: Secrets told in the pictures on your skin
This was so heartbreaking! Thank you so much for updating, I absolutely LOVE this story! I think you captured Karen really, really well. She seemed much more human and likable than many fics would have her be, and that really made the story so much more believable for me. And, of course, you captured Pam's emotions perfectly. Awesome!
Author's Response: Thank you for the wonderful review! I like that none of these characters are evil or bad, nor are they all good and make the right decisions 100% of the time. I like messy characters and the Office is full of them, which makes it such prime material to base fic off of.
Date: February 17, 2008 03:03 pm Title: Secrets told in the pictures on your skin
This is so heartbreaking but I really like it. Can't wait to see where you are going with it.
Author's Response: Thank you! I hope real life can stay out of the way long enough to find out ;)
10 [Report This]Date: January 08, 2008 06:23 pm Title: Secrets told in the pictures on your skin
"And he just loved her. He was so in love with her, it hurt. And he was so tired of hurting."
That line was really, really beautiful. In fact, the whole thing is! Great, great job.
Author's Response: Thank you! I appreciate the kind review
Date: January 08, 2008 11:47 am Title: Secrets told in the pictures on your skin
This is nicely done (I know the word "nice" is not that exciting within the context of your story, but I mean it in the best way possible, I promise!). I loved your description of Pam's inner dialogue; keep up the great work! -CH
Author's Response: Ha! Thanks for the clarification ;) Thanks for the review!