Date: January 29, 2010 09:03 pm Title: Chapter 1
I don't think I've ever read this, but I'm glad I got the chance (thank goodness for Stories of the Moment!) I love a good fight story.
Date: January 14, 2008 12:00 pm Title: Chapter 1
Thank you so much for writing this! It's a great look at their relationship and is very realistic in regards to how it really would be.
I love this:
This is the problem with dating your best friend. This is the problem with dating someone you know too well. You know exactly what will hurt the most, what name or phrase will cut the deepest. You know exactly what to say in order to rip a wound on top of a scab they forgot they had. And even though you regret the words the moment they leave your mouth, you can’t help feel a smug sense of superiority, if only for a second.
That is so spot on that it's scary. I love that you've shown them faults and all!
Author's Response: Oh wow, thanks so much!
8 [Report This]Date: January 14, 2008 06:43 am Title: Chapter 1
That last line gave me chills.
Author's Response: Thank you, that was what I was going for ;)
7 [Report This]Date: January 13, 2008 09:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
Rather nice, I especially liked the paragraph that starts "This is the problem with dating your best friend."
Author's Response: Thanks so much
Author's Response: Thanks so much
Date: January 13, 2008 07:15 pm Title: Chapter 1
“I will never stop fighting for you.”
I think you just summed up their entire relationship. Amazing.
Author's Response: Wow, thank you :)
8 [Report This]Date: January 13, 2008 06:36 pm Title: Chapter 1
Although I really hate the idea of them fighting so intensely, your last line was beautifully done.
Author's Response: Aw, thank you. And I think we all need a little angst now and then, haha.
10 [Report This]Date: January 13, 2008 06:23 pm Title: Chapter 1
i really really liked this. you said so much with having them say really nothing at all. great job!
Author's Response: Thank you! I was trying to do something different with out having a lot of dialogue, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Date: January 13, 2008 05:42 pm Title: Chapter 1
Aw! Sniff. That was great. Painful, but great. Excellent job.
Author's Response: Thank you so much :)
6 [Report This]Date: January 13, 2008 05:42 pm Title: Chapter 1
I really liked your idea for the story and the characterization of Pam was great. I guess I wanted to get a little more of Jim... maybe more dialog between them, but I do see what you were doing and enjoyed reading it.
Author's Response: Thank you. I was trying not to have too much dialogue, and there definitely was a lack of Jim, but I'm glad you enjoyed it.