Date: March 05, 2008 07:33 pm Title: Rubato
Love this! Honestly, that Beesly gal has a hell of a lot more willpower than I. Between the shirt and the jeans and the cologne and the smooching in the dark, well, I'd probably have that boy up against the wall outside the exit door.
And honestly, I laughed my ass off over the "Chick's" reference. No, I can't see Karen there at all. Ha.
10 [Report This]Date: March 05, 2008 02:43 pm Title: Rubato
As you know, I felt like crap today. On the way home, I started thinking about this story. Then I saw the update. This helps a lot. You continue to amaze me, Mox, as you well know. Thank you for this. Can't wait to see where it goes next :)
Date: March 05, 2008 01:41 pm Title: Rubato
Run, Pam, Run! Do not be fooled by Jim Halpert's dastardly seductive hand-holding ways!!! Not to mention showing up in jeans and a no tie. (He's practically throwing himself at you!)
Cold showers all around?
10 [Report This]Date: March 05, 2008 12:38 pm Title: Rubato
What a divine way to spend an afternoon. I'm so jealous. Leave it to you, Moxie : )
Date: March 05, 2008 12:29 pm Title: Rubato
Been reading this since the start, a big big fan. Great job, looking forward to seeing how things unfold with them and if they can *finally* get it together.
Date: March 04, 2008 08:43 pm Title: Silence
I loved it. You really seem to grasp Pam and Jim's characters. I can't wait for more!
Date: March 04, 2008 08:24 pm Title: Counterpoint
Saab + Yaris = OTP.
And yes, Miss Karen, if you tell Jim to leave you alone, he's going to do just that. Time to read the writing on the wall and move to Utica.
Date: March 04, 2008 06:02 pm Title: Counterpoint
Ah, the course of true love is never easy, is it? The dreaded day after and all three players in this drama are feeling tired from too little sleep and tension from the confrontations ahead of them.
I like the direction you've taken this story. Unlike in TJ, where all loose ends had to be wrapped up in an hour, you have the luxury here to make this triangle situation infinitely more complex. Yeah, sure, maybe some would like Karen to go into the office and ream Jim's ass for his infidelity, but I can understand Karen's hesitancy and not wanting to throw away a good relationship with a man she loves over what may just be a one-time indiscretion. I also like how Pam realizes that Jim can't really move foward into anything with her until he resolves things with Karen.
Well, I'll be patiently waiting, dear. :)
Date: March 04, 2008 04:44 pm Title: Counterpoint
Your updates always give me a thrill, Moxie, and this is no exception. Sitting on the edge of my seat...
Date: March 03, 2008 12:11 pm Title: Accelerando
I really like the back story you've given Karen. That was a great segment and now I'm completely and totally hooked. Can't wait to find out what her friend advised her to do!
Date: March 03, 2008 11:42 am Title: Pianissimo
Awww. They actually talked to each other! I mean, it's not much but with those two, dang, just the slightest bit of communication makes all the difference.
Date: March 03, 2008 11:27 am Title: Silence
Hot damn, that's one way to end an unexpected make-out session!
Date: February 29, 2008 05:46 am Title: Accelerando
Love it!! Great job!!!
Date: February 28, 2008 03:27 am Title: Accelerando
Nice job with all 3 of them, Mox. I can sympathize with Karen feeling quite abandoned and alone right now, and turning to a girlfriend for advice.
Jim and Pam's conversation was cute. I'm glad they were able to get some truths out into the open and some questions answered. Looking foward to the awkwardness of the next day, and later on, some tie shopping!
10 [Report This]Date: February 26, 2008 04:35 pm Title: Accelerando
What I think is really interesting about this chapter is the way you contrast Karen's confusion on why Jim would be attracted to Pam with evidence to why he would be attracted to her--their easy, comfortable conversation. I thought you really did well with their voices here, particularly Jim's dread of dealing with Karen the next morning in front of an office full of people. I can't wait to see how you handle their inevitable conversation, being as she did go off on him in the office (sort of) in front of everybody. A is for awkward.
Date: February 26, 2008 01:06 pm Title: Silence
Mox I'm really enjoying this story. Chapter 3 worked well from Karen's pov. You are simply the master of the Jim & Pam interaction! You never disappoint. You really are extremely talented and should persue writing! Just my opinion. I hope you continue this story and I eagerly await more of the Squirrel Mcpants part 2 story as well. I hope to see more of JAM and Mrs. Halpert as well.
Thanks,
B
Date: February 26, 2008 01:04 pm Title: Accelerando
Like that it was the Dundie's kiss Jim told Karen about...makes me less fumed about the nonchalance of 'it was no big deal.' Now, let's have that pesky parking lot chat and pick up where we left off, shall we?
Date: February 26, 2008 12:49 pm Title: Accelerando
Yup, I'm a glutton for punishment, listening to The Fray while reading this. Oh wait, that's the soundtrack to S2-era angst.
I like the Karen backstory for why she tries so hard to make things work with Jim. Can't blame her.
I really like how you have written all three characters to be aware of their failings and willing to face the consequences. (Well, not happy about it, but knowing they should.) Wow, when did this go from making out on the conference room table to being all responsible and stuff?
Date: February 26, 2008 11:12 am Title: Accelerando
Moxie, how perfect that this update came in on my lunch hour. I am one happy gal. What a great chapter. I don't even have the slightest desire to throw garbage at you--now or ever : ) I actually enjoyed Karen's POV and then there was the bonus of a late-night JAM phone call. Aside from late-night JAM sex, what could be better? So loving this story.
Date: February 26, 2008 11:06 am Title: Accelerando
"He said he'd had a crush on Pam when he used to work there. Just a crush, he said, and it didn't even go anywhere. But Karen had lived through crushes before, and she knew that once they were over (like he claimed his was) – life goes on. You can joke about it, sometimes even with the object of your previous desire. But Jim didn't do that. He didn't like to talk about Pam, even in a joking manner."
This sentence blew me away. It's scuh amazing insight into this relationship.
I'm also really enjoying the way you've been using the JAM dynamic in these situations. As much as I love tortured/angst JAM, it's just as good when they are classically THEM.
Thank you for writing this!!!
Date: February 23, 2008 10:00 am Title: Silence
What a great story, Moxie. I love how it's a completely different take on season 3, with Jim and Pam clearing the air in the first chapter, and then having to deal with the repercussions of their choices, ie Karen. Also, it's really refreshing not having to wait an entire story for Jim and Pam to get together. I also liked that Pam didn't back down after Karen caught her and Jim. Instead of reverting to her pre-FNB behavior, and avoiding the situation, she met it head on. Plus, conference room making out is always HOT! I'm really looking forward to seeing how they handle the situation with Karen. Please update SOON!
Date: February 23, 2008 01:14 am Title: Pianissimo
Eeek! The initial silence was palpable. I love how you wrote Pam and how guilty she feels over what happened. I'm glad she's being the "sensible" one and making sure Jim ends things with Karen first before anything else happens. Aww that ending was super sweet. I am loving this story! =)
Date: February 23, 2008 01:10 am Title: Silence
Oh my...wow. I cannot believe Karen found them like that. OMG awkward...and painful. I could just hear Karen's heart breaking. That's quite a catching opening chapter! Looking forward to the aftermath. =)
Date: February 22, 2008 10:08 pm Title: Pianissimo
Is it odd that I jumped out of my seat,pumped my fist in the air and screamed "YEAH!!" when I read this line?
Pam gently kicked a rock that was next to her shoe. “But what if it's not you I'm worried about?”
Date: February 22, 2008 01:11 pm Title: Pianissimo
great job!
Author's Response: thanks, batman!! I'm always happy to see you've commented. :-)