1 [Report This]Date: January 06, 2019 06:41 pm Title: Chapter 6
"And then what?"
"Then I'm going to kiss you."
I might have melted. And sighed aloud.
Author's Response: Thank you for reading! If you like my fic, check out my YA novel (ZENN DIAGRAM) on Amazon or at your local bookstore! :-)
1 [Report This]Date: January 06, 2019 06:28 pm Title: Chapter 5
Ouch, my heart
Date: January 06, 2019 05:57 pm Title: Chapter 1
O... k...
I love the fact that I don't have any idea whatsoever of where this is going.
Like Jim, more or less.
10 [Report This]Date: November 07, 2011 05:51 am Title: Chapter 7
I know that I am WAYYYY after the fact with this review but sometimes when I read an older story that just really hits me, I just have to review on the off change that maybe the author just might one day see it.
This is fabulous and I mean, it is SO spot on with our couple here. You have Jim and Pam so perfectly in character through the entire story, and on the boat and when they got off the boat you had Roy and Katy's voices and personalities perfect.
I honestly feel like this could have truly been filmed as an alternative ending for the Booze Cruise and would have fit and felt perfect with the show. (I mean except for then we wouldn't have gotten the 'treat' of living through angst hell in season 3) I REALLY like that with this one you had Pam as the one that made the move on the Booze Cruise, immediately regretted it and then just seconds later when Roy set the date she reacted just as she had on the episode itself. I just don't think Pam, even fresh off of her bold move of actually kissing Jim and justifying it in her mind in different ways like it being something she just needed to get out of her system, would have been at the point to react in any other way when Roy set the date. She was just so used to going along with what was expected and settling. On the other side, I think it's interesting and absolutely undestandable that Jim, KNOWING that Pam had just been the one to kiss him right before setting the date, and seeing that even as she danced with Roy he knew she was't exactly happy, so he tried to drown himself in whatever it was he had going on with Katy. I'm sure he was glad that Pam was seeing it. I even understand that while it may not be completely in character for the Jim Halpert we know to be well aware of his feelings for Pam and then make a conscious decision to sleep with Katy that night. Thing is, this was a hurt and confused and a kittle angry Jim. It makes sense that he would like the thought of being able to be with a girl that Roy obviously would love to be with, if not for Pam. He just wanted so bad to be able to not hurt and I think we all do things that aren't normal for who we are when we are hurting. You did keep him in character though in that the next morning he sweetly left her sleeping in his bed while he went to work even knowing that it was done with her.
I love how realistically you have the rest of the story play out. Jim confronting Pam, demanding to know why she did it, confessing his love and kissing her the way he wanted to before she shoots him down is heartbreaking but an excellent alternative to Casino Night.
It hurt my heart reading how Pam is trying to just accept what her fate is rather than seeing that she actually had choices, but oh so Pam. An hurting it even more is Jim trying to accept that he tried and failed and just going through the motions of life yet not REALLY living.
When Pam showed up at Jim's door I didn't know what to expect but you played this perfectly. I love that she was honest and he really listened and he was very happy to give her the time she needed. What I like most is Pam is determined not to kiss Jim again while she is still involved with Roy and Jim respects that.
Then comes the awesome ending. Not a whole lot to say except I SO enjoyed it. You have a gift with the sexy stuff. Loved the line where right after Jim told her that when he said she could touch anything she took him literally. Just an amazing story. I think this just be my fovorite of all the booze cruise ones! Thanks for sharing it with us.
Author's Response: I don't know if you'll get an email that I responded ... I'm not getting emails that new reviews are posted so I have no idea. But I just stopped by here to try to get motivated to write by reading a few of my old fics and I saw your review!!! Thank you soooo very much. I can't tell you how much it means to us authors to know that people are still reading and enjoying our work, even years later. I think this was only my second fic and parts of it make me cringe a little, but I'm really glad that you enjoyed it. You really understood what I was trying to do, how I thought that Jim and Pam would feel -- I love it when people "get" me! Anyway, hopefully you'll read some of my other ones! Thanks again, really, for taking the time to review. It is soooo very much appreciated, especially today when I needed a writing boost!!!
10 [Report This]Date: June 28, 2009 09:46 am Title: Chapter 7
Thank you for writing such a great story.
Date: October 09, 2008 02:26 pm Title: Chapter 7
I finished reading this story today at work... and I am so lame but I don't how I did not read it before. This story falls under the category "if only..." Those 27 seconds silence between Jim and Pam to me is in the top 5 Jam moments. The intensity between them and the lust/love in Jim's eyese for Pam. What I like about this story is that Pam was brave (and bold) w/ her feelings towards Jim. She knew exactly what she wanted and you wrote her strong and even a little sacred of the possibility of being w/o Roy. But the smut was amaaaaazing. Of course Jim looks good in jeans....
9 [Report This]Date: July 09, 2008 12:29 am Title: Chapter 7
awww I loved it!!! It was perfect!
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing cantdenytruelove!
10 [Report This]Date: June 28, 2008 06:43 pm Title: Chapter 7
Wow. I've spent the past few evenings reading JAM fanfic and I have to say, this is one of the most effective pieces I've read. Very sexy, very insightful, and the characters are spot-on. Really well-written, too. Thank you!! Loved it!!
Author's Response: Thanks Tuna! This is one of my first fics -- so, glad you liked it! Thanks for reading and taking the time to review!
10 [Report This]Date: June 10, 2008 07:42 pm Title: Chapter 7
you got me wanting more - more - more
Author's Response: Thanks! We all want more Jim, don't we? ;-) Glad you liked this, and thanks for reading!
Date: March 06, 2008 05:27 pm Title: Chapter 6
She saw the on ramps, the trail of dark hair that disappeared beneath the button of his jeans ...I'm sorry if I'm a bit daft, but I have never heard the term "on-ramps" except for well, on ramps. Would you care to clarify for me?
Also, I've noticed from the way that you write about Jim's body in your stories that you haven't seen "Smiley Face" yet...please don't. Sure, John Krasinski masturbating sounds promising, it's really not. I prefer your greek god Jim much better to the real thing. But who knows, maybe John did a few push-ups between then and now.
all that naked Jim chatter aside, I love your writing :)
Author's Response: Yeah, the "on-ramps" reference is a little bit of a stretch, but it's a shout out to the ladies over at TWoP -- I believe in the John Krasinski love fest from summer of '06 (here's the link: http://forums.televisionwithoutpity.com/index.php?showtopic=3141558&st=2115&p=5807387&#entry5807387, see post #2127rn
rnI have seen the scene from Smiley Face (not the whole movie) and I agree -- it's a bit odd. But I still think Jim has the hidden potential to be a greek god. John's stomach shot in License to Wed was hot (even though the movie wasn't). But I digress. Thanks so much for your comments -- I truly appreciate all of them!
8 [Report This]Date: March 05, 2008 10:18 pm Title: Chapter 5
uh. yeah. i'm kind of obsessed with you.
"Jim’s heart rate sped up at just that one thought. She had been thinking about him."
how sad and heartbreaking and pathetic. perfectly in character, which is also sad. i love this.
Author's Response: Really? Cool! I hate to think that I'm the only one who gets obsessed ;-) Thanks so much for reading and commenting!
Date: March 03, 2008 10:53 am Title: Chapter 7
this story was fantastic ... really well done - i hope you write some more soon!!! i love the part about jim's feet!!! beautiful!
Author's Response: Sorry for the slow response -- trying to catch up here. Anyway, Jim's feet seem to be strangely sexy, don't they? Glad you liked that. And thanks for reviewing!
Author's Response: Sorry for the slow response -- trying to catch up here. Anyway, Jim's feet seem to be strangely sexy, don't they? Glad you liked that. And thanks for reviewing!
Author's Response: Sorry for the slow response -- trying to catch up here. Anyway, Jim's feet seem to be strangely sexy, don't they? Glad you liked that. And thanks for reviewing!
Author's Response: Sorry for the slow response -- trying to catch up here. Anyway, Jim's feet seem to be strangely sexy, don't they? Glad you liked that. And thanks for reviewing!
Date: March 03, 2008 07:14 am Title: Chapter 1
After reading the last chapter I was compelled to read the whole story again. I can only say thank you for a wonderfully done job.
Author's Response: You're welcome! Thanks so much for reading and commenting!
10 [Report This]Date: March 03, 2008 06:05 am Title: Chapter 7
Niiiiiice : )
9 [Report This]Date: March 02, 2008 08:53 pm Title: Chapter 7
Perfection.
From the time Pam came to Jim's house in the 6th chapter up to the end of the 7th chapter you channelled Jim and Pam through your pen and hand.
Real
Passionate
Joyous
Thank you wendolf
Author's Response: Thanks, Jinx! So glad you liked it. I really appreciate your taking the time to read and review.
Date: March 02, 2008 06:16 pm Title: Chapter 7
Jim had better be careful when he offers young ladies privileges to touch anything they want. Oh. My.
Author's Response: Yeah . . . in our dreams. Thanks for reading, lisahoo!!!
Date: March 02, 2008 06:14 pm Title: Chapter 7
Wow, wow, wow! Fantastic! :) I can see how this was an occupational hazzard. Very well written - look forward to either more of this story or a new one!
Author's Response: Thanks, kerber! It has been so much fun I'm sure I'll do more... keep an eye out!
Date: March 02, 2008 06:07 pm Title: Chapter 1
Can't wait, bring on the smut!!
Date: March 02, 2008 05:33 pm Title: Chapter 7
awh ! this better not be the end of it, :) great job
Date: March 02, 2008 04:51 pm Title: Chapter 6
Great chapter. I can't wait for the smut.
Date: March 02, 2008 04:30 pm Title: Chapter 6
I know that writers like to hear what lines worked and which ones didn't, but if I were to list all of those I liked, I'd have to just copy and paste the chapter here. Everything is so believable, the dialogue, everything. I love the way that you describe Jim physically through Pam's eyes. Girl's got it bad...and I can't blame her. This whole story has just been amazing, and I can't wait to read more. You have the gift!
Author's Response: Thanks, my friend! I truly appreciate all of your comments and reviews. You are the greatest.
10 [Report This]Date: March 02, 2008 04:15 pm Title: Chapter 6
Your description of Jim in his jeans was really...hot! Bring on the smut!
Author's Response: Thanks hues. Ya gotta' love Jim in a good pair of jeans. ;-) Thanks for reading and reviewing!
10 [Report This]Date: March 02, 2008 04:11 pm Title: Chapter 6
Yum. Way to make my Sunday evening.
Date: March 02, 2008 04:10 pm Title: Chapter 6
Why are Jim's naked feet so freaking hot? Sheesh, something is wrong with me.
Author's Response: Join the club, lisahoo. Feet, hands, forearms . . . whatever. It's all good ;-) Thanks for your comments!