Date: March 10, 2008 08:30 am Title: Chapter 1
I really enjoyed this very much. Hope to see more.
9 [Report This]Date: March 09, 2008 03:52 pm Title: Chapter 2
So happy your mind wandered : ) Nice job, BA.
7 [Report This]Date: March 08, 2008 12:30 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh, kissing in the rain, how perfect is that? Great beginning. Did you realize you switched back and forth from present to past tense?
--Strider
Author's Response: It was intentional as I wanted Pam to flit back and forth between her present reality and those memories that affected her the most to try and inject some tension into the story. Not sure how effective it was but it gave me a chance to think about Jim playing basketball again...need I say more? Thanks for the review. BA
Date: March 08, 2008 09:34 am Title: Chapter 1
okay, this... was beautiful :) if season three had actually ended like that, it wouldve made me cry for joy ! great job :)
9 [Report This]Date: March 08, 2008 05:04 am Title: Chapter 1
Wow. GREAT start, BA. I have to say that I actually like this better than your prior post (which was good--don't get me wrong). I just really like the imagery of this one.
Author's Response: Thanks NanReg. I have to say that my favourite part of writing this story was that I got swept up in description of the garden and the storm and when it came to inserting dialogue and the describing the interaction between the characters, I lost my enthusiasm somewhat. I much prefer my second story in terms of dialogue and story development; it still needs tons of work though. I really appreciate your comments. Blind Assassin x