10 [Report This]Date: July 14, 2008 09:18 pm Title: Thank You
Another perfect chapter title: Pam thanking Franny; Jim thanking Megan. Franny is such an important part of this story. I really love her character. Her jealousy of the new baby is perfectly in character given how much she loves Jim. I only have one child myself, but my next door neighbors have two boys, three years apart and this is exactly how the older boy behaved when his mom was pregnant and when his little brother came into the world. Great job conveying Franny’s jealousy. Nice that you brought Pam’s sister back into the story. I don’t want to smack her anymore. :) I’m also glad that you mentioned Jon’s child being a girl. I’ve been wondering if you would bring these characters back into the story. Duh, should have realized you would with the wedding.
The wedding paragraphs were perfect. Funny and sweet. I don’t need to read about them reciting their vows. You’ve shown with all these chapters how much they love each other and what they would do to make each other happy. You’ve also made me weepy again: what with Jim’s visit to Megan’s grave site and Pam’s conversation with her dad about Jim.
I too am sorry to see this one end, but just like you’ve been amazed by writing this, your loyal readers have been amazed with this story. Thank you. I look forward to the epilogue.
Date: July 14, 2008 07:41 pm Title: Thank You
I had a real crappy day and reading this story made it alittle better. I have loved this from the beginning and hate to see it end. You did a great job making me feel like a part of each character. Thank you.
Date: July 14, 2008 03:20 pm Title: Thank You
I haven't reviewed before but since this story is winding down, I just have to tell you what a great story it is. You do the characters really well and I've really enjoyed this and all your other stories!!
Date: July 14, 2008 08:11 am Title: Thank You
I can't believe this is nearly done. It's been quite a ride, italianfood. I'm enjoying all this Halpert happiness : )
I like to think that you knew I was too broken for one person to fix so you sent me two. Oh my. That went staight to my heart.
Author's Response: Thanks, I've been sitting on that line for awhile waiting for this last chapter to use it.
10 [Report This]Date: July 13, 2008 11:30 pm Title: Thank You
I am sitting here with tears in my eyes. You always get the emotions just right, never shying from the difficult or the awkward. I really thought the scene at Megan's grave was great. Something I really love about this story is the respect you have given to Pam and Jim's pasts. That MEgan isn't an afterthought and Roy isn't the bad guy. They are parts of who make these characters who they are and I appreciate you doing that. I also love Franny. Writing children is hard but you've manage to not make her too adult or too precious, but just right. I'm going to terribly miss this sotry when it finishes and I know as soon as I read the epilogue, I'll go back to the beginning and read the whole story all over again. It's really been such a lovely trip you've taken us all on.
Author's Response: I'm glad someone other than me was tearing up.
Date: July 13, 2008 10:57 pm Title: Thank You
This story was so good! And this chapter ave me all kinds of goosebumps, you really finished it up perfectly and their life together seems amazing!
:)
8 [Report This]Date: July 13, 2008 09:02 pm Title: Thank You
Well, I gotta tell ya, italianfood, I was dubious of this premise when you first started. A borderline alcoholic Jim?? But I have thoroughly enjoyed this AU Pam and Jim AND FRANNY that you created.
In this chapter, I especially liked Pam's talk with Franny right before the wedding about how Jim fell in love with her first. And I liked Jim's talk with Megan at the end.
I'll be interested to see how far in the future you set your epilogue.
Author's Response: I'm glad you gave it a chance and stuck with me the whole time. Thanks!
Date: July 13, 2008 08:26 pm Title: Thank You
Wow. What an amazing chapter. I loved Jim talking to Megan. You did such a great job with this story!
Date: July 13, 2008 08:19 pm Title: Thank You
I loved it! I think they should have another baby (a boy this time!)
Maybe?
A girl can wish, can't she?
Author's Response: A girl can wish. And I think maybe you might be onto something.
Date: July 13, 2008 07:57 pm Title: Thank You
It's just all kinds of awesome, so much to gush about. Loved it all really, Franny's baby hate and her and Pam's moments were so sweet, the wedding, Daddy Jim, and the cemetery. I love how you came back to that, and just guh! I love it and do not want it to end, hopefully though it just means you will start another awesome story soon, after finishing Mifflin Designs of coure!
You are my fanfic HERO Italianfood!!!!
Author's Response: I am not a hero... Hiro from Heroes is a hero.
10 [Report This]Date: July 13, 2008 06:50 pm Title: Thank You
That was so sweet!!!
10 [Report This]Date: July 13, 2008 06:31 pm Title: stains of our past
I'm glad this story is ending because now when can take hostage invite John Krasinski on our road trip....I'm still not giving up on this dream of mine and neither should you. I think I'm going to become a life coach after our expedition. It will help me deal with annoying people better and Jesus will be glad that I'm actually helping people instead of making fun of them. This story is so good, I give it 5 David Beckham Armani ads ( my new awards system). On to Mifflin, bitches!
Author's Response: I think I'm going to get you a life coach before any road trip. And I have a new dream remember... the cleaning lady thing. Gosh! Do you even listen to me?!?! You're awesome and I give you 4 9/10 Franny cornhusk dolls (my new award system).
10 [Report This]Date: July 13, 2008 06:25 pm Title: Thank You
It's been amazing reading this.
Thank you
Date: July 13, 2008 06:20 pm Title: Thank You
Aw, I'm disappointed that this is wrapping up. I know it's been like four months, but it still feels like it's too soon.
Just a couple of quick notes. You might want to insert some line breaks when you skip time (like between Franny's temper tantrum and the wedding, etc) because it gets pretty confusing without an indication that the scene has changed.
Also, in your chapter end notes - I think you mean an epilogue? Or are you adding something to the beginning of the story?
Author's Response: I meant epilogue of course. I just clearly was trying to post this and didn't look over my notes.
10 [Report This]Date: July 13, 2008 06:10 pm Title: Thank You
It's beautiful this has been one of my favorite stories
10 [Report This]Date: July 06, 2008 09:52 pm Title: the idea of tomorrow
All the Franny/Dwight interactions and fruit and rock shopping? Oh, it's made of awesome my friend - AWESOME.
9 [Report This]Date: July 06, 2008 09:41 pm Title: what's the plan, Stan?
This is just so, so lovely! Love it!!
10 [Report This]Date: July 06, 2008 07:36 pm Title: what's the plan, Stan?
excellant, perfectly sculpted and well paced. i could read this story forever... two more chapters just doesn't seem enough. looking forward!
Date: July 06, 2008 03:54 pm Title: what's the plan, Stan?
yay yay yay! I'm so sad this story is almost over :)
Date: July 06, 2008 01:04 pm Title: what's the plan, Stan?
*sigh* so happy : )
10 [Report This]Date: July 06, 2008 12:57 pm Title: what's the plan, Stan?
I’m so glad you like to write multi-chapter stories. I can really see how both Jim and Pam have grown emotionally since the first chapter. Someone on the MTT boards once compared John Krasinski to a big, overgrown puppy at the way that he gets excited. I thought this exact same thing as I read how excited Jim is at the idea of Pam’s possibly being pregnant. You’ve once again brought me to tears, but happy ones this time: Jim’s reaction to their being pregnant. Franny keeps her valuables in her backpack: A daddy shirt and a corn husk doll from Dwight. Love it! Sweet image to have at the end of this chapter: Jim and Franny eating cereal together while watching a movie. So cute. Have I said how much I like the way you write? You are so funny. The teasing, the sarcasm, hilarious. And the fact that you’ve brought me to tears more than once while reading this story. Excellent job, yet again italianfood.
Author's Response: Thanks Cheeb! Now I have an ego the size of Texas! Seriously though, thank you for reading and reviewing all the time. I live to make you cry!
Date: July 06, 2008 09:38 am Title: stains of our past
I think I will cry when this story comes to an end. You have captured every character perfect. I really can't tell you how much I love it.
Date: July 06, 2008 02:54 am Title: what's the plan, Stan?
I love, 1 am pregnancy test shopping, moon rock giving Jim. Super Awesome chapter. I have loved this story since the start, so sad to see it go, but there is always re-reading. You ROCK
Date: July 06, 2008 01:09 am Title: what's the plan, Stan?
Love it, love it, love it!
Date: July 05, 2008 11:13 pm Title: what's the plan, Stan?
Franny + cereal = pure genus!