Reviewer: JamesMichael Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: April 29, 2008 04:04 am Title: Sex and fratricide make for a really great margarita.

The dialogue mixed with the right amount of inner-monologue, aswell as the awkward tension but still romanticism(is that a word?) is perfect and has been through this entire story - nice job!
Keep em' coming and I'll keep reviewing

Author's Response: I think romanticism is a word, yes, but I'm not awesome at that kind of thing which is why I have a beta ;-)  Thanks for the great review I love it!!

Reviewer: Cheeb Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: April 28, 2008 11:43 pm Title: Sex and fratricide make for a really great margarita.

Each chapter just gets better and better. Did not think that was possible! I was smiling throughout this one. Loved the part about his autobiography. Cracked me up. Aw, Jim's in love and he doesn't know how to handle it. So cute. I really don't want this story to end. Okay? Okay.

Author's Response: okay.  ;-) lol thank you!  Glad this chapter made you laugh.  hopefully you'll like the rest just as much.

Reviewer: emwitz Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: April 28, 2008 11:43 am Title: It's not that I hate you, it's just that I hate everything about you.

I started reading the first chapter last night and I went in to work early this morning just so I could continue reading it because I am so hooked! I have laughed out loud so many times while reading, like when Heather said she was going to get in the closet! I love her character - usually I don't like new characters in fic that don't appear on the show but she's hilarious.

Also, this is probably my first review ever but I just had to let you know how much I love this! Looking forward to reading more! :D

Reviewer: SeluciaV Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: April 26, 2008 06:44 pm Title: Just hang on now, let me catch my breath and take my pants off.

Hey there! Sorry for the delay on my Ch. 26 review but this one just knocked my socks off and I needed some time to collect my thoughts before posting. Can I just say that, in one way at least, your Pam and I are so much alike it is scary:

“Oh, god, you’re crying,” Heather greets, rolling her eyes and pushing her way into Pam’s living room like she owns the place, and Pam sighs and kind of tosses her hands out to her sides in response.

I can't tell you how many times I've lived this scene with my BFF -- sometimes over a guy, but just as often over a silly TV show or a movie or some crazy fanfic I've become obsessed with (*wink*) -- her rolling her eyes at my overemotionalness and me shrugging because I've learned there's just no helping it.

Now if only I could become more like Pam in the having-hot-monkey-sex-with-deep-emotional-undercurrents with Jim kind of way. SIGH.

Although we've gotten glimpses inside Pam's head during this tale, it's cool to see her through the lens of her nosy best friend because you know she sees things that Pam isn't entirely prepared to think or examine or feel.

“That’s how this sort of thing is supposed to happen, though, sweetie, because fate doesn’t want to give you time to think too hard. Which is exactly what you’re doing with the weeping and the wailing, by the way,” she points out and Pam considers that, thinks that maybe she’s right and thinks that maybe she should relax into things. Maybe she should accept her feelings instead of questioning them.

See? BFF clarity right there. Also this?

“You cannot let him wander off, Pam, you should tattoo your name on his ass or something,” she declares.

WORD.

And there are just no words for how adorable and wonderful the last scene between Jim and Pam was. After the intense roller-coaster ride we've been on with these two over the last 25 chapters it was really lovely and heart warming to just see them teasing and enjoying each other.

So. Would it be tacky for me to beg for an update now? Because I heart this fic so much I feel like I'm perpetually overdue for a hit. Pretty please? *SIGH*

OK. I'll go reread it from the beginning and try to be patient. But it won't be easy!!

Reviewer: untherapy Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: April 25, 2008 03:49 pm Title: Just when I've figured out how to pretend you're out of my system, you show up and I forget.

:) best chapter so far. I love the whole thoughts-while-running thing. And just to get it out there i LOVE this entire idea of them playing "themselves".

Reviewer: SeluciaV Signed [Report This]
Date: April 24, 2008 06:49 pm Title: Lions and tigers and housecats, oh my god, I hate my life.

I'm two chapters behind in reviews so I'm going to keep this one simple:

She thinks housecats are for frightened women, and she swears to god she isn’t going to be scared anymore.

This line? It kind of makes the entire chapter while simultaneously kicking the collective asses of so many other fics in its innate awesomeness.

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: April 24, 2008 08:21 am Title: It's not that I hate you, it's just that I hate everything about you.

I think you have broken the parts of my brain that remember 'Brought to you by the letter X', which means I will have to re-read when you get around to writing more of that.  Woo!  Second drink!

But don't do that -- write more of this, or you'll have a riot on your hands.  We will burn Utica to the ground.  Not that anyone will care.

Author's Response: LOL as someone who grew up in upstate New York that "we will burn utica" always makes me laugh so hard.  And don't worry, everything but famous is on the serious back burner.  For now.

Reviewer: nbyevu Signed [Report This]
Date: April 24, 2008 07:30 am Title: Just hang on now, let me catch my breath and take my pants off.

Ok, I share a name with Pam's best friend and she acts EXACTLY LIKE ME. Awkward and uncomfortable (and funny, if I do say myself). Have you been stalking me?

Also, awesome chapter. Penis is a funny word.

Author's Response: Actually I have been stalking you.  Look out your window right now.  That's me.  Waving. ;-)

Reviewer: Catie9 Signed [Report This]
Date: April 24, 2008 06:18 am Title: Just hang on now, let me catch my breath and take my pants off.

Ok I'm so overcome with general appreciate and love for this story (and you by extension) that I have to take a moment to seriously review. Wow. This is like chapters worth of appreciation pouring out here--and I'll keep the delicious references to Jim's penis and his status as dangerous jungle cat to a minimum.

So, first thing's first: fucking hell, stablergirl. Can I like marry you or something? Because Jesus.

Also, I love love love love! how you've done these characters here. Seriously--I love that Jim's the reputed man-whore and yet he's so totally comfortable with the fact that he's fallen completely in love with the lovely Ms. Beesly. And then there's Pam--poor confused Pam. This little exchange just killed me: "You're in love with him!" "Am I?". So effing awesome. Because love is funny that way, and Pam being the one who's confused and freaked out just fits so perfectly here.

On that note, I love that this chapter gives Pam a chance to breathe. Until she started rehashing the past 24 hours with the delicious kissing, I had sort of forgotten how fast things had moved for them. I mean, taken from a different perspective, it's been a long time coming. But also, he shows up at her house, makes her eggs and does some weird but totally hot foreplay something or other in her bathroom (and jesus--the payoff for that was worth like everything ever) and then he's kissing her when it wasn't in the script and then he's kissing her in her dressing room and outside the bar and then he's pounding on her door (and other things) at 2 am and holy god. It's just so perfect.

Ok, I don't think I can function anymore, but I just wanted to say that you are seriously amazing. Even if you never write anything ever again (but please, don't get carried away and do that or anything), this will still be one of my favorite reading experiences ever. And I'm not just talking about fic--I mean in general. This must be what people were like in like the Victorian era or whenever when Charles Dickens would write one chapter at a time and be such a delicious tease. Because I've seriously had so much fun reading this, engaging with it, and wow. I just realized that I've been typing furiously for like 3 and a half hours. Ok, I'm done.


In conclusion: THANK YOU!

Author's Response:

What?! What an AMAZING REVIEW!  Look how long! Omg you are amazing for this, I love it.  So first of all, I agree about Jim being the man-whore who's secretly a softy, so cute, right?  And what girl hasn't been Pam in this where you're like "Am I in love with him? Really? I'm SO confused..." I know I have.  These kinds of things are not always clear lol.  Yeah and true to this kind of fic, everything happens in like a day, so I figured they might want a hot second to recollect their thoughts and stuff lol. 

And what writer does not like to be tossed into the pool with CHARLES DICKENS! LOL amazing! Thank you thank you.  (I do sometimes think about us on this site and mentally compare that to Jane Austen reading her romance novels to all of her sisters in their drawing room...)  Anyway, the point is TEN POINTS for fantastic review that totally made my day!! Thank you ;-)

Reviewer: Sweetpea Signed [Report This]
Date: April 24, 2008 05:42 am Title: Lions and tigers and housecats, oh my god, I hate my life.

I know this one was a bit of a battle, but wow, but it turned out so great!  I love what an editing freak you are because I always pick up little bits that change from the final read-through to post (and sometimes even after).  Everyone should know how much effort you put into even some of the smallest details and the fact that you do it so effing quickly is still mind-boggling to me.  You're so...great.

Author's Response: lol I know...me and my last minute editing.  I walk away for a second and then come back and re-read and go "what? what kind of sentence is THAT?" and poof an entire chapter gets edited. Probably REALLY bad form, right? lol.  You also are GREAT so thank you thank you for all sorts of beta things!!!!

Reviewer: aabchamp Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: April 24, 2008 05:35 am Title: Just hang on now, let me catch my breath and take my pants off.

You've done it again. Another fantastic chapter!

I really like the lighter tone. Such a great contrast to the more emotional previous chapters. That's another thing I love about this story by the way. Your ability to switch so effortlessly between different genres, even within chapters, and still stay completely true to the story and its characters.

What I also love is how you take a simple thing such as Pam's sunglasses and use it for so much more:

She picks up, dropping her purse on the floor and pushing her sunglasses so that they’re perched on top of her head.

While reading it, it's not something you pay that much attention to because you're focused on the phone call.

However, later the sunglasses return:

“I need to know literally every single detail of your life that might explain how the hell this happened,” she proclaims and Pam plops herself into the now empty armchair and sighs, pushing her hands up into her hair without realizing her sunglasses are there. They go tumbling to the floor and she just stares at them, too lazy to bend down and pick them up. Heather looks down at them, too, and purses her lips, waiting.

Aside from adding a great continuity marker, you also manage to use the sunglasses to describe how confused Pam really is. It's an honest mistake to forget that your glasses/sunglasses are sitting on your head (hell even I have done it), but contrary to Pam's normal behavior and what most of us would do, she doesn't even attempt to pick them up from the floor after she involuntarily pushes them off her head. This makes Heather (and consequently us as readers) notice that something is clearly off. Thus, this small incident ends up speaking volumes about Pam's inability to focus and wrap her mind around what has happened. So simple and yet so effective.

Speaking of simplicity, I also love this bit:

Actually she didn’t think he dated at all. She doesn’t think he does.

Two small sentences with a switch from past to present tense, and you effectively show that there's now a difference, how undefined it may be at this point, between then and now in terms of how Pam perceives her relationship with Jim.

Did that last part make sense? I'm not so sure it did...

In any case, well done. :)

PS. I know I've probably used the word love way too many times in this review, but let's face it, it's aaalll about the looove... ;)

Author's Response: hey hey! Look at you noticing my sunglass metaphor! I seriously thought that would go totally unnoticed and actually draw a few heat scratches in confusion like "why the hell is this even in here?" but you are an amazing reader so i should have known ;-)  And yeah the last part makes sense to me because that's basically what I was trying to do, I think, show that there's what she thought and what she thinks and she's caught somewhere in between (did THAT make sense?)  Also you could never use the word love too many times imho.  Thanks for being awesome and leaving such a juicy review AGAIN. I love love love it.

Reviewer: NanReg Signed [Report This]
Date: April 24, 2008 02:01 am Title: Just hang on now, let me catch my breath and take my pants off.

So, here I am at 4:57 a.m. NJ time after a rather fretful night's sleep and I'm up way too early and I'm supposed to be researching bridal shower info (like THAT'S something I really feel like doing now or ever) and here you are.  Ah, stablergirl, you complete me.  I am now a little less cranky.  THIS was just what the doctor ordered.  I love this thing that is this Jim and this Pam.  They exude awkwardness and moltent-lava sexuality.  So many great and funny lines, and my sleep-deprived brain is not quite capable of quoting any.  I think I will have to visit you later, but thank you for improving my mood like nobody could.

Author's Response:

lol bridal showers...yikes...  I'm so glad I could improve your mood!! What a wonderful testament to why we even write like this, right? You made MY day brighter by leaving this review, so i think you!