Date: April 29, 2008 10:33 am Title: Sex and fratricide make for a really great margarita.
It took me a while to get into this story because it just tripped too many of my usual squicks (for lack of a better word), but now, I really like how they are opening up to each other. They are starting to feel more like the Jim and Pam I know and love. So, good job!
Author's Response: yeah I guess I was probably purposely tripping the squicks (for lack of a better word) to try to make something good come out of them ;-) Glad you're recognizing them now, that was basically my plan from the start. Sort of a "they're Jim and Pam but they're not but...they are" kind of scenario. If that makes sense...
Date: April 29, 2008 10:09 am Title: Sex and fratricide make for a really great margarita.
Yay! They can be together and not annoy each other and even be real. (Psst... it's called vulnerability, it's what grown-ups do when they actually want to let another person in to their hearts so they can love them.)
I love Jim trying to impress Pam. So damned adorable. But still cocky enough to give Pam 'acting tips' and be obnoxious to the waiter. Nicely balanced, SG.
Author's Response: thanks! balance is what it's all about, right? ;-)
Date: April 29, 2008 09:43 am Title: Sex and fratricide make for a really great margarita.
I love the fake-out about the brother if only because it ties in with a conceit we've seen on the show too. I think you're having the intimacy between them grow in a realistic fashion. He's willing to open up because he's head over heels for her, and yet, it's not necessarily easy. This was so much fun to read, and now, I want a margarita! ;)
Author's Response: lol who doesn't want a margarita?!?! Only a crazy person, I guess. Thanks for this review, i so appreciate it. Definitely helps me crank out my next chapter.
8 [Report This]Date: April 29, 2008 09:12 am Title: Sex and fratricide make for a really great margarita.
I love how they're both evolving into this full-blown relationship. Seems so foreign for both of them, but they're so natural together.
Great back-story on Jim. The foreshadowing in your previous chapters set this up perfectly.
I'm not sure about Steve though, having a waiter like that would ruin my entire night... I guess the fact that he doesn't ruin theirs says something about how eager they are to be together.
Author's Response: yeah can't let the waiter ruin their, fun, right? that would just be a major disappointment. Thanks for enjoying the backstory and the foreshadowing! And thanks for reviewing, I totally live for it. ;-)
Date: April 29, 2008 07:46 am Title: Sex and fratricide make for a really great margarita.
Stablergirl, like so much of your work, this is an absolutely an awesome story. Your writing style in this one is so fun and evocative! And I love how Jim is still somehow Jim despite the fact that he had that surface "jerk" quality.
Steve the waiter...priceless.
"You’ve turned me all romantic, Sunshine"... way to bring back the formerly sarcastic nickname in a now-endearing fashion.
Keep it up!
Author's Response: right? thanks for getting that Jim is still our Jim despite the defenses. He's totally the same guy and that was basically the whole point of the story. Also so glad you liked the call back of the nickname, that's a favorite of mine too. Thanks for the review!
Date: April 29, 2008 06:01 am Title: Sex and fratricide make for a really great margarita.
Just so you know, you had me cracking up this morning before seven and before coffee. I read this before I got ready for work, and I almost peed my pants at this:
But jesus…that fucking shirt makes him need to maybe sit down and put his head between his legs.
Or her legs.
Oh, Jim.
And then you go and get all deep on us, and it just works so well and explains so much and just makes me want to hug the everliving shit out of this story. Because it's serious and then silly and then serious with a nice side of silly--and really, that's what life is all about, right?
So effing awesome. I salute you, my friend.
Author's Response: life is TOTALLY about being silly and serious simultaneously, i say ;-) Thanks for liking this one and sorry it takes me so long to respond, I'm like a sloth. Or a snail.
Date: April 29, 2008 05:42 am Title: Sex and fratricide make for a really great margarita.
I am simply in awe, Stablergirl. Seriously. This story just gets better and better...and better. I love learning these little nuggets from their past. So fantastic. It really puts them and their actions in a whole new light. “Pam, meet my brother. Steve.” How funny is that?! I'm just one big grin. By the way, my birthday is on 5/1, so if you can whip up something amazing just for me, that would be great. That's not too much to ask, right? Heeeeee : )
P.S. Kudos to the lovely and talented Sweetpea. She knows I love her, too : )
Author's Response: Nan! sorry the newest chapter didn't show up on your birthday, but it's only four days late so...HAPPY BELATED BIRTHDAY! ;-) lol. Glad you liked this one and hopefully you'll like the new one too. And kudos, indeed, to sweetpea.
10 [Report This]Date: April 29, 2008 04:04 am Title: Sex and fratricide make for a really great margarita.
The dialogue mixed with the right amount of inner-monologue, aswell as the awkward tension but still romanticism(is that a word?) is perfect and has been through this entire story - nice job!
Keep em' coming and I'll keep reviewing
Author's Response: I think romanticism is a word, yes, but I'm not awesome at that kind of thing which is why I have a beta ;-) Thanks for the great review I love it!!
Date: April 29, 2008 02:49 am Title: Sex and fratricide make for a really great margarita.
Great chapter, SG! Love how they're slowly opening up emotionally to each other, sharing the pain of their past and all. They'll get there. Steve's funny, making it quite obvious that he's not thrilled having to take care of Scranton's big celebrities. But the little upstairs table and the sunset sounds very romantic, so good job, Jim!
Author's Response:
good job, Jim, indeed! ;-) thanks for this review, I'm glad you're appreciating their journey for what it is.
10 [Report This]Date: April 28, 2008 11:43 pm Title: Sex and fratricide make for a really great margarita.
Each chapter just gets better and better. Did not think that was possible! I was smiling throughout this one. Loved the part about his autobiography. Cracked me up. Aw, Jim's in love and he doesn't know how to handle it. So cute. I really don't want this story to end. Okay? Okay.
Author's Response: okay. ;-) lol thank you! Glad this chapter made you laugh. hopefully you'll like the rest just as much.
10 [Report This]Date: April 28, 2008 11:30 pm Title: Sex and fratricide make for a really great margarita.
Wait, am I first again? This must be a West-Coast night owl thing...
ANYway, this is a nice chapter and I love how comfortable/uncomfortable they are with each other. Jim's reveal explain so freaking much about his character. Did you have this backstory in your brain from the beginning?
Author's Response:
I did have that backstory planned from the beginning, actually, surprisingly enough! Usually I don't plan anything, but the sibling thing had been bouncing around in my mind since like chapter 3 of this I think, which was wow a long time ago ;-) And I do think it's a west coast night owl thing, btw. for sure. thanks for the review! sorry I took so long responding, it's an illness of mine.
10 [Report This]Date: April 28, 2008 11:43 am Title: It's not that I hate you, it's just that I hate everything about you.
I started reading the first chapter last night and I went in to work early this morning just so I could continue reading it because I am so hooked! I have laughed out loud so many times while reading, like when Heather said she was going to get in the closet! I love her character - usually I don't like new characters in fic that don't appear on the show but she's hilarious.
Also, this is probably my first review ever but I just had to let you know how much I love this! Looking forward to reading more! :D
10 [Report This]Date: April 28, 2008 09:56 am Title: It's not that I hate you, it's just that I hate everything about you.
This has to be the funniest fanfic I've read. I usually read on the bus and I was unsuccessful at stifling my outbursts.
The characters are just so much fun, so different from the Jim and Pam we see, but so believable that their real personalities could actually be like this.
I also love the fact that not only have you reinvented Pam and Jim, but you've also weaved in new characters (Heather) and bits of the ensemble cast. So so funny.
I can't wait to see/hear the reaction shots when the rest of the cast discovers they really are together after that make out session on camera.
Poor Graham, but I mean, he must have known she wasn't into him. (He and Karen had quite a bit in common)
Yours in anticipation...
10 [Report This]Date: April 26, 2008 06:44 pm Title: Just hang on now, let me catch my breath and take my pants off.
Hey there! Sorry for the delay on my Ch. 26 review but this one just knocked my socks off and I needed some time to collect my thoughts before posting. Can I just say that, in one way at least, your Pam and I are so much alike it is scary:
“Oh, god, you’re crying,” Heather greets, rolling her eyes and pushing her way into Pam’s living room like she owns the place, and Pam sighs and kind of tosses her hands out to her sides in response.
I can't tell you how many times I've lived this scene with my BFF -- sometimes over a guy, but just as often over a silly TV show or a movie or some crazy fanfic I've become obsessed with (*wink*) -- her rolling her eyes at my overemotionalness and me shrugging because I've learned there's just no helping it.
Now if only I could become more like Pam in the having-hot-monkey-sex-with-deep-emotional-undercurrents with Jim kind of way. SIGH.
Although we've gotten glimpses inside Pam's head during this tale, it's cool to see her through the lens of her nosy best friend because you know she sees things that Pam isn't entirely prepared to think or examine or feel.
“That’s how this sort of thing is supposed to happen, though, sweetie, because fate doesn’t want to give you time to think too hard. Which is exactly what you’re doing with the weeping and the wailing, by the way,” she points out and Pam considers that, thinks that maybe she’s right and thinks that maybe she should relax into things. Maybe she should accept her feelings instead of questioning them.
See? BFF clarity right there. Also this?
“You cannot let him wander off, Pam, you should tattoo your name on his ass or something,” she declares.
WORD.
And there are just no words for how adorable and wonderful the last scene between Jim and Pam was. After the intense roller-coaster ride we've been on with these two over the last 25 chapters it was really lovely and heart warming to just see them teasing and enjoying each other.
So. Would it be tacky for me to beg for an update now? Because I heart this fic so much I feel like I'm perpetually overdue for a hit. Pretty please? *SIGH*
OK. I'll go reread it from the beginning and try to be patient. But it won't be easy!!
Date: April 25, 2008 04:13 pm Title: Wait a second, I feel like I've seen this movie before.
yay Pam-plosion :) Also, your chapter notes are the funniest chapter notes I've ever read!
10 [Report This]Date: April 25, 2008 03:49 pm Title: Just when I've figured out how to pretend you're out of my system, you show up and I forget.
:) best chapter so far. I love the whole thoughts-while-running thing. And just to get it out there i LOVE this entire idea of them playing "themselves".
Date: April 24, 2008 07:16 pm Title: It's not that I hate you, it's just that I hate everything about you.
yummy as usual!
Date: April 24, 2008 06:49 pm Title: Lions and tigers and housecats, oh my god, I hate my life.
I'm two chapters behind in reviews so I'm going to keep this one simple:
She thinks housecats are for frightened women, and she swears to god she isn’t going to be scared anymore.
This line? It kind of makes the entire chapter while simultaneously kicking the collective asses of so many other fics in its innate awesomeness.
10 [Report This]Date: April 24, 2008 09:39 am Title: Just hang on now, let me catch my breath and take my pants off.
this story is so much love. the characterizations are absolutely brilliant. the dialouge is funny and real and being that my name is heather i really got an even bigger joy out of this chapter.
im selfish what can i say.
anyway. great chapter as always. i will be so sad when this is over.
Date: April 24, 2008 08:21 am Title: It's not that I hate you, it's just that I hate everything about you.
I think you have broken the parts of my brain that remember 'Brought to you by the letter X', which means I will have to re-read when you get around to writing more of that. Woo! Second drink!
But don't do that -- write more of this, or you'll have a riot on your hands. We will burn Utica to the ground. Not that anyone will care.
Author's Response: LOL as someone who grew up in upstate New York that "we will burn utica" always makes me laugh so hard. And don't worry, everything but famous is on the serious back burner. For now.
Date: April 24, 2008 07:47 am Title: Just hang on now, let me catch my breath and take my pants off.
These updates seriously brighten my day!! Awesome story!
Author's Response: oh good! Glad I could brighten your day ;-) And thanks!
Date: April 24, 2008 07:30 am Title: Just hang on now, let me catch my breath and take my pants off.
Ok, I share a name with Pam's best friend and she acts EXACTLY LIKE ME. Awkward and uncomfortable (and funny, if I do say myself). Have you been stalking me?
Also, awesome chapter. Penis is a funny word.
Author's Response: Actually I have been stalking you. Look out your window right now. That's me. Waving. ;-)
Date: April 24, 2008 07:05 am Title: Just hang on now, let me catch my breath and take my pants off.
I FREAKING LOVE YOU. this is seriously the best thing ever. I think I say that every time I review. I love that she cries and she knows it's coming and i completely understand because I would cry too. I love Heather SOOOO MUCH!!!! I feel like I've been Heather all this time, experiencing this through your story, so it's fun to see a character experience that, especially through penis talk :) Then, I love that Jim makes her say it. and "Do you really expect me to stay out here when I know you're in there taking all of your clothes off?" and finally I love "She kind of just wants to see the look on his face."
I think my favorite part of this is the realization that love is just love and it comes through sweatshirts and no make up and the insanity that is life. This just feels so real. I can't wait until you update again. This is never gonna be over right? I'm pretty sure I don't wanna know the answer to that.
Author's Response: To be honest, lol, I am a cryer, so I think that's why I wrote Pam here as someone who just randomly cries because I totally do that in stressful situations. To an extent. I'm not all messy and awkward or anything I just...ok whatever ;-) And I'm so glad you say it feels real because that's what I was going for!! That despite the fact that everything is crazy and scripted and put on television with these two, there's something totally actual going on underneath. Ok anyway, the point is thank you for this review!! And good morning ;-)
Date: April 24, 2008 06:18 am Title: Just hang on now, let me catch my breath and take my pants off.
Ok I'm so overcome with general appreciate and love for this story (and you by extension) that I have to take a moment to seriously review. Wow. This is like chapters worth of appreciation pouring out here--and I'll keep the delicious references to Jim's penis and his status as dangerous jungle cat to a minimum.
So, first thing's first: fucking hell, stablergirl. Can I like marry you or something? Because Jesus.
Also, I love love love love! how you've done these characters here. Seriously--I love that Jim's the reputed man-whore and yet he's so totally comfortable with the fact that he's fallen completely in love with the lovely Ms. Beesly. And then there's Pam--poor confused Pam. This little exchange just killed me: "You're in love with him!" "Am I?". So effing awesome. Because love is funny that way, and Pam being the one who's confused and freaked out just fits so perfectly here.
On that note, I love that this chapter gives Pam a chance to breathe. Until she started rehashing the past 24 hours with the delicious kissing, I had sort of forgotten how fast things had moved for them. I mean, taken from a different perspective, it's been a long time coming. But also, he shows up at her house, makes her eggs and does some weird but totally hot foreplay something or other in her bathroom (and jesus--the payoff for that was worth like everything ever) and then he's kissing her when it wasn't in the script and then he's kissing her in her dressing room and outside the bar and then he's pounding on her door (and other things) at 2 am and holy god. It's just so perfect.
Ok, I don't think I can function anymore, but I just wanted to say that you are seriously amazing. Even if you never write anything ever again (but please, don't get carried away and do that or anything), this will still be one of my favorite reading experiences ever. And I'm not just talking about fic--I mean in general. This must be what people were like in like the Victorian era or whenever when Charles Dickens would write one chapter at a time and be such a delicious tease. Because I've seriously had so much fun reading this, engaging with it, and wow. I just realized that I've been typing furiously for like 3 and a half hours. Ok, I'm done.
In conclusion: THANK YOU!
Author's Response:
What?! What an AMAZING REVIEW! Look how long! Omg you are amazing for this, I love it. So first of all, I agree about Jim being the man-whore who's secretly a softy, so cute, right? And what girl hasn't been Pam in this where you're like "Am I in love with him? Really? I'm SO confused..." I know I have. These kinds of things are not always clear lol. Yeah and true to this kind of fic, everything happens in like a day, so I figured they might want a hot second to recollect their thoughts and stuff lol.
And what writer does not like to be tossed into the pool with CHARLES DICKENS! LOL amazing! Thank you thank you. (I do sometimes think about us on this site and mentally compare that to Jane Austen reading her romance novels to all of her sisters in their drawing room...) Anyway, the point is TEN POINTS for fantastic review that totally made my day!! Thank you ;-)
Date: April 24, 2008 05:58 am Title: Just hang on now, let me catch my breath and take my pants off.
Oh, sweet jeebus. I practically PUSHED HooHusband out the door to go to work so I could read this deliciousness.
I loved the '24' references. Shouldn’t like the alignment of the stars only point to one huge world altering event at a time? and Even Jack Bauer would be confused. ;o)
Heather would be dawesome on the fake reality show. She is too funny. Talking about Jim's penis for an hour.
Oh, and can I also add that Jim being so unembarrassed about the girls discussing his penis is completely adorable and so very in-character for your version of Jim. (How refreshing to have a Jim who is aware of and comfortable with his status as Man-Candy.)
But this part, cut to the core of how Pam has been totally annihilated: but like his actual personality is delicious. His attitude and his honesty and his total openness around her. Yup, that is exactly why she is under his spell.
I wonder what will happen when the viewing public sees the couple of the century out to dinner?
Author's Response: lol I loved those references too, to be honest, made me laugh at myself. ;-) And YES to Jim being cool with his status as Man-Candy! So attractive in some kind of mysterious way. lol and hopefully this time dinner will actually happen unlike in Brought to You by the Letter X, in which Jim, Pam, Mulder, and Scully have all pretty much died of starvation at this point...maybe i should get on that ;-)